Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct basic errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, correct place name and verb forms, and add one specific detail to make the answer vivid. Keep it under five sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often played simple games and ran around with my friends at a nearby park called Jindrisska Square. Those afternoons made me feel excited and happy because we would race each other and play hide-and-seek until sunset.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence, fix grammar (plural/singular, articles), remove fillers, and use linking words to contrast seasons. Add a specific activity or detail to support the opinion.

Ví dụ: Yes, but it depends on the season. I avoid parks in the summer because Japanese summers are hot and humid, which can affect my health. However, in spring and autumn I enjoy going for a walk and watching cherry blossoms or colorful leaves because the weather is pleasant.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct answer and avoid repetition. Correct grammar (there are many parks), use linking words to explain reason, and give one specific example of park differences to make the answer concrete.

Ví dụ: Not really — I think there are already enough parks in my city. There are many parks with different characters; for example, one near my house is a quiet garden with ponds, while another is a large playground with sports facilities, so I enjoy both types.

Gợi ý: Provide a clearer topic sentence, remove repetition and filler words, and be specific about a country or park and what you want to see. Use linking words to explain reasons for interest.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit parks abroad, especially Kew Gardens in the UK. I want to see different plant species and historical landscapes because the flora and garden styles there are very different from those in Japan.

× Yes, I loved going to the Prague when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I loved going to Prague when I was a child.

Use of the definite article 'the' before proper place names like 'Prague' is incorrect in English. Remove 'the'. Suggestion: say 'going to Prague' or 'going to the park' if referring to a specific park.

× I often played games such as tasks and run around with my friends.

✓ I often played games such as tag and ran around with my friends.

Two issues: 'tasks' is likely the wrong noun (use 'tag' or another game) and after mentioning a past action use past tense 'ran' not base form 'run'. Use verbs consistently in past tense. Suggestion: use correct game name and past tense verbs.

× I yeah, which made me feel excited and happy and I still remember those days.

✓ Yes, those experiences made me feel excited and happy, and I still remember those days.

Fragment 'I yeah, which made...' is ungrammatical. Replace filler 'yeah' and the relative clause 'which made...' needs a clear noun reference. Combine into a complete sentence: 'Those experiences made me...'.

× It depends on the seasons. I avoid going to park in summer because Japanese summer are hot and humid because and which can be bad for my health.

✓ It depends on the season. I avoid going to parks in summer because Japanese summers are hot and humid, which can be bad for my health.

Use plural 'parks' or 'the park'—'going to park' is incorrect (article error). Also 'season' vs 'seasons' for general statement: 'It depends on the season' is natural. 'Japanese summer are' has subject-verb agreement error; use plural 'summers are'. Remove extra 'because' and 'and' before 'which'. Suggestion: simplify sentence and fix articles and agreement.

× But in spring and autumn I enjoy going for a walk and and watch the scenery.

✓ But in spring and autumn I enjoy going for a walk and watching the scenery.

After 'enjoy' use verb + -ing form: 'watching' not base form 'watch'. Also remove duplicate 'and'.

× It's yeah.

✓ That's right.

'It's yeah' is a filler and not grammatical. Replace with a concise confirmation like 'That's right' or 'Yes'.

× Not really. I think because there is enough park in in my home, in my city, there is many, there's many park and every park has different character.

✓ Not really. I think there are enough parks in my hometown and in my city; there are many parks, and each park has a different character.

Multiple issues: 'enough park' should be plural 'enough parks' (article/number). 'in in my home' unclear — use 'hometown' or 'home'. 'there is many' subject-verb agreement error: use 'there are many parks'. 'every park has different character' needs article 'a' or 'a different character' or 'different characteristics'. Suggestion: use plural forms and correct subject-verb agreement.

× I, I, I really enjoy both of them.

✓ I really enjoy them both.

Repetition 'I, I, I' is a spoken filler; for written form use a concise sentence. 'Both of them' can be rephrased 'them both' or 'both'.

× Well, I want to go some park in abroad because because in abroad there's there's history and and the plants are different from those of Japan.

✓ Well, I want to visit some parks abroad because abroad there is history and the plants are different from those in Japan.

Errors: 'go some park' should be 'visit some parks' or 'go to a park'. 'in abroad' is incorrect; use 'abroad' without 'in'. Duplicate words 'because because' and 'there's there's' and 'and and' are fillers. 'those of Japan' is acceptable but 'those in Japan' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'abroad' properly and correct verb and count forms.

× So I want to enjoy the differences.

✓ So I would like to enjoy the differences.

Tense and register: when talking about future desires or hypothetical plans, 'would like' or 'want to' is possible. 'I want to' is acceptable, but 'I would like to' is more polite. No strict grammar error, but adjusting to 'would like' makes it more natural. If keeping 'want to', it's also correct; choose based on formality.