Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make the answer more natural by correcting tense and reducing redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often spent entire afternoons there playing tag and climbing trees with my friends, which helped me become more active and social.

Gợi ý: Be concise and natural: use a clear topic sentence and give one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid repeating words like 'now' and 'nowadays'.

Ví dụ: Not really — I rarely visit parks these days because I'm busy with work and family commitments. However, I try to go for short walks in nearby green spaces when I have free time.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct singular/plural forms and a linking word to connect ideas. Be a bit more specific about benefits and give one concrete example.

Ví dụ: Yes, I believe more community parks are essential because they give children and teenagers safe places to meet and play. For instance, parks with playgrounds and sports fields encourage teamwork and help young people build social skills.

Gợi ý: Fix grammar and be specific: use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and one or two specific details about why you want to visit (memories, scenery). Use linking words to make it coherent.

Ví dụ: Yes — if I had the chance, I would visit the park where I played as a child because it holds many happy memories. In particular, I would like to sit by the pond and watch the sunset while remembering games I used to play there.

× When I was younger, I can still remember that I really enjoyed playing in the park together with my friends.

✓ When I was younger, I could still remember that I really enjoyed playing in the park with my friends.

The sentence mixes past time reference 'When I was younger' with the present tense modal 'can'. Use a past-tense modal 'could' to match the past time frame. Also 'together' is redundant with 'with my friends'; removing it makes the sentence more natural.

× Unfortunately, nowadays I don't have time to spend on visiting parks and I'm focusing my attention now on work and family.

✓ Unfortunately, nowadays I don't have time to visit parks because I am focusing my attention on work and family.

The phrase 'to spend on visiting parks' is awkward and uses unnecessary preposition 'on'. Use the infinitive 'to visit parks'. Also avoid repeating 'now' and 'nowadays' together; keep 'nowadays' and use 'because' to link the reason clearly.

× I do believe that parks in the community is essential, especially for younger generations, in order for them to communicate and promote camaraderie with their peers.

✓ I do believe that parks in the community are essential, especially for younger generations, so that they can socialize and build camaraderie with their peers.

The subject 'parks' is plural, so the verb must be 'are' not 'is' (subject-verb agreement). 'In order for them to communicate and promote camaraderie' is wordy; use 'so that they can socialize and build camaraderie' for natural phrasing.

× It will also help them develop their interpersonal relationship with each other.

✓ It will also help them develop interpersonal relationships with each other.

Use the plural 'relationships' to match 'them' (multiple people) and omit the unnecessary 'their' before 'interpersonal' because 'develop interpersonal relationships' is the correct collocation. The preposition use is improved by removing redundancy.

× If given an opportunity, I would like to go visit the park where I used to play with when I was younger.

✓ If given an opportunity, I would like to visit the park where I used to play when I was younger.

The phrase 'go visit' is redundant; 'visit' alone is sufficient. Also 'play with when I was younger' incorrectly places 'with'—you 'play with someone' but 'play at/ in a place.' Removing 'with' corrects the prepositional error and keeps the past reference consistent.

× I want to remember the happy memories that I have on that part and enjoying the sceneries watching over.

✓ I want to remember the happy memories I have of that place and enjoy the scenery there.

Use 'memories of that place' rather than 'on that part'. 'Enjoying' is the wrong form after 'I want to'—use the base verb 'enjoy'. 'Sceneries' is nonstandard; use the uncountable 'scenery'. Replace 'watching over' with 'there' or remove it for clarity.