Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be clearer and more coherent. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Focus on past tense when describing childhood and use simple connectors (for example, because, and, then).

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my parents and siblings because we enjoyed picnics and playing on the swings. For example, I remember spending whole afternoons running around the playground and having ice cream afterwards, which made those visits very happy memories.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and use present tense for current habits. Reduce fillers (um, uh) and use one clear reason with a linking word (because, so). Give a specific example of activities you do now. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now. I usually go with my close friends because we like to chat and play frisbee together, which is relaxing. For instance, last weekend we walked around the lake and had coffee while we talked about our plans.

Gợi ý: Be concise and give one or two specific reasons why more parks are needed, using linking phrases (for example, because, so that). Avoid vague or awkward phrasing and check grammar (e.g., 'construct parks in our city').

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we only have one small park. More parks would give people space to exercise and relax, and the government could allocate funds to build playgrounds and green areas so residents have healthier outdoor options.

Gợi ý: Answer directly about a specific park or type of park abroad and explain why, with clear reasons and an example. Use correct grammar for future intentions (e.g., 'I would like to visit...') and avoid vague expressions like 'forward us'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit famous parks abroad, such as Central Park in New York or Hyde Park in London, because they offer diverse activities and attractions. For example, Central Park has large lawns, boating, and cultural events that I would love to experience on a visit.

× I always told them to go, but sometimes they regretted me.

✓ I always asked them to go, but sometimes they regretted it.

The original uses the verb 'regret' incorrectly with an object pronoun 'me'. Regret is typically followed by a clause or a noun phrase (e.g., 'regretted it' or 'regretted going'). Also 'told them to go' is natural but 'regretted me' is ungrammatical. Use 'regretted it' to refer to the action or 'they regretted not going' for clarity.

× It's a very enjoyable moment. While a circle circling, walking around the bar here. Very.

✓ It was a very enjoyable time, walking in a circle around the park here.

The original contains sentence fragments and awkward phrases ('a circle circling', 'walking around the bar here. Very.'). Combine ideas into a complete sentence: use 'time' instead of 'moment' for repeated activities, express the action with a gerund phrase 'walking in a circle around the park', and ensure the sentence is complete.

× Umm, of course, in the past, I used to go back with my family members, but nowadays I get used to go there with my friends, my best friends, uh, which always tries to have, uh, happy me.

✓ In the past I used to go with my family, but nowadays I usually go there with my friends, my best friends, who always try to make me happy.

The phrase 'get used to go' is incorrect; use 'usually go' or 'am used to going' for habitual present. 'Which' is incorrect for people; use 'who'. 'Tries to have happy me' is ungrammatical; say 'try to make me happy.' Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× And it is also very interesting and very funny moments when we are walking with some conversation and.

✓ It is also very interesting and fun when we walk and have conversations.

Original mixes singular/plural ('it is... moments') and ends with an unfinished conjunction 'and.' Use a clear structure: 'it is ... when we walk and have conversations.' Use 'fun' rather than 'funny' for enjoyable experiences.

× To be honest, yes, because in my city there is only one park which is very small.

✓ To be honest, yes, because in my city there is only one park and it is very small.

The original sentence is understandable but can be improved by splitting the relative clause into a separate clause for clarity: 'there is only one park and it is very small.' This avoids the awkward 'which is' after 'only one park' in spoken English.

× So I think in the future government should allocate more money to construct parks to our country city because more people tend to go parks than want to go there.

✓ So I think in the future the government should allocate more money to build parks in our city because more people want to go to parks.

Use 'the government' for a specific entity. 'Allocate money to construct parks to our country city' is awkward — use 'allocate money to build parks in our city.' 'Tend to go parks than want to go there' is confused; use 'more people want to go to parks.' Ensure correct prepositions: 'go to parks.'

× I'm here to talk about future yeah, I want to go parks which are in abroad because there are different kind of facilities for people who can try and also the attractions which are forward us in abroad is a bit challenging and also very funny to try and.

✓ Speaking about the future, I want to visit parks abroad because there are different kinds of facilities people can try, and the attractions abroad are a bit challenging and fun to try.

Several issues: 'go parks which are in abroad' should be 'visit parks abroad.' Use 'kinds' plural with 'different.' 'Who can try' is unnecessary; use 'people can try.' 'Attractions which are forward us in abroad' is ungrammatical; use 'attractions abroad.' Keep future intention with 'want to visit' and correct adjective/adverb choice 'fun' not 'funny.'