Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with correct tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. Back then parks were my main source of fun because there were fewer video games, so most children went outside to play and relax.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and reduce hesitations. Use one clear topic sentence about current habits, then briefly explain reasons with a linking word (e.g., because, so). Correct unclear phrases (e.g., 'evening monk work'—confirm intended meaning) and avoid repeating words.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still go to parks when I have spare time. I usually visit them for exercise and quiet reflection because I do morning and evening duties, so the park is a convenient place to relax rather than to socialize.

Gợi ý: Be specific and use correct distance expressions. Provide a clear opinion with a reason and a suggestion. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and avoid filler words.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because there is only one park about four to five kilometres away. Ideally, there should be parks within two to three kilometres so people can walk to them easily.

Gợi ý: Mention specific parks or features you want to see and use clearer grammar. Start with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons (e.g., scenery, facilities) using linking words.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit parks in Switzerland, Germany and Norway because I have heard they are very beautiful. For example, I want to see the Swiss alpine parks for their mountain views and German parks for their organized gardens and pathways.

× Yes, I like to go to parks as when I was child because I think at that time it was the main source of enjoyment.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child because at that time they were my main source of enjoyment.

Mixed present and past tense: 'like' should be past 'liked' to match 'when I was a child.' 'to go to parks as when I was child' is ungrammatical; use 'going to parks when I was a child.' Use plural 'they' or 'parks' as the subject and 'were' for past tense. Also add article 'a' before 'child'.

× Then video games because at that time video games are too much less compared to nowadays and most of the children travel to park for a purpose of refreshment and enjoyment.

✓ Also, video games were much less common then compared with nowadays, and most children went to parks for refreshment and enjoyment.

Tense mismatch and awkward phrasing: use past tense 'were' and 'went' to match 'at that time.' 'too much less' is incorrect; use 'much less common.' 'travel to park for a purpose of' is wordy and unidiomatic; use 'went to parks for refreshment and enjoyment.' Omit unnecessary 'the' before 'children.'

× Uh, yes, uh, if I have spare time, I usually spend it in parts because because I, uh, do uh, morning work as well as evening monk work regularly.

✓ If I have spare time, I usually spend it in parks because I do morning work as well as evening monk work regularly.

'spend it in parts' is incorrect; likely 'in parks' intended. Present simple 'have' and 'usually spend' are fine for habitual actions. Remove filler words. Ensure noun 'parks' fits plural. No tense change required.

× And for this purpose I travel to parks, but now for not for such enjoyment purposes or any other occasional activities and I only travel here.

✓ For this purpose I go to parks, but now not for enjoyment or for other occasional activities; I only go for exercise.

'travel to parks' is odd; use 'go to parks.' 'for not for such enjoyment purposes' is ungrammatical; reorder to 'not for enjoyment or for other occasional activities.' Clarify 'here' — replaced with likely 'for exercise' to make sentence meaningful. Use parallel structure.

× Uh, yes, I like to see more parks in my city because, and now I, we have only, uh, one, uh, park and it's about 4 to 5 kilometer away from my house.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we have only one park and it is about 4 to 5 kilometers away from my house.

Remove extraneous fillers. Use conditional 'would like' for preference. Use plural 'kilometers' and include 'a' before 'park' is fine but unnecessary; keep 'one park.' Also fix 'it's' to 'it is' for clarity.

× That's why I think park must be, uh, at least there at least 2 to 3 kilometers of every walking distance, although it require more.

✓ That's why I think parks should be within 2 to 3 kilometers walking distance from every neighborhood, although more would be better.

Incorrect structure: 'park must be...of every walking distance' is ungrammatical. Use 'should be within 2 to 3 kilometers walking distance from every neighborhood.' 'require' should be 'would be better' or 'would be ideal.' Use plural 'parks' for general statement and 'should' for recommendation.

× I guess I heard about the parks of Switzerland and Germany and Norway and I they heard about these parts that they are more beautiful and the overall environment of park is too much impressive.

✓ I have heard about parks in Switzerland, Germany, and Norway, and I heard that they are very beautiful and that the overall park environments are impressive.

Tense and pronoun errors: use present perfect 'have heard' for experience up to now, or simple past 'heard' consistently. Remove extra 'I they.' 'too much impressive' is unidiomatic; use 'very beautiful' or 'highly impressive.' Use plural 'environments are' to match plural parks.

× That's why I like to visit these parks in future if I got a chance.

✓ That's why I would like to visit these parks in the future if I get a chance.

Conditional and tense error: use 'would like' for desire and 'in the future.' Use present simple 'get' in the if-clause for a real future condition: 'if I get a chance.' 'got' is past and doesn't match the conditional here.