Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be concise and correct grammar (use 'my brother and me'), avoid redundancy ('I would admit that I did like' -> 'I liked'). Keep to 2–3 sentences: a clear topic sentence plus one specific supporting detail. Use a linking phrase for clarity.

Ví dụ: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child. My parents often took my brother and me to the local park, where we spent hours on the swings and had picnics on the grass.

Gợi ý: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and one concise reason. Avoid repetition ('currently', 'go to') and filler words ('umm'). Mention a specific example of time constraints. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still like parks, but I rarely visit them now because I am preparing for my A-levels. For example, I spend most evenings studying, so I only have time for short walks near my home.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear position and give two balanced reasons using linking words ('on the one hand', 'on the other hand'). Correct grammar ('provide' not 'provides', 'people need', 'need improvement'). Give a specific example of other infrastructure that might be prioritized.

Ví dụ: On the one hand, yes, more parks would give people green spaces to relax and exercise. On the other hand, the city also needs to invest in public transport and schools, so both should be considered.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with a topic sentence and a specific reason or example. Avoid vague phrases ('isn't 1 currently in my mind') and grammar errors ('a newest and most modern park' -> 'one of the newest, most modern parks'). Mention what features interest you.

Ví dụ: I don't have a specific park in mind right now, but I would like to visit one of the newest, most modern parks. I'm especially interested in parks with innovative playgrounds and water features, which would be fun to see.

× My parents often took my brother and I to the nearest local park, where we spent lots of time playing around the swings and flights and having a picnic was.

✓ My parents often took my brother and me to the nearest local park, where we spent a lot of time playing on the swings and slides and having a picnic.

Use 'my brother and me' not 'my brother and I' because the pronoun is the object of the verb 'took'. Replace 'flights' with 'slides' (likely intended playground equipment) and change 'playing around the swings' to 'playing on the swings' for correct preposition. Change 'lots of time' to 'a lot of time' and remove the extra 'was' to form a correct coordinated clause.

× Yes I do but now as I'm growing older I'm currently also currently preparing for my A levels so I don't really get that amount of time to relax and especially go to parks as umm go to.

✓ Yes, I do, but now that I'm growing older I'm currently preparing for my A levels, so I don't really have much time to relax or especially to go to parks.

Use 'have' not 'get' to express possession of time and 'much time' is appropriate for uncountable nouns. Remove duplicate 'currently' and change 'as I'm' to 'now that I'm' for clarity. Use 'to go to parks' rather than the fragmented phrase 'go to parks as umm go to'. Add commas for readability.

× Getting going to a park is quite time consuming.

✓ Going to a park is quite time-consuming.

'Getting going to a park' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use 'Going to a park' as the subject and hyphenate 'time-consuming' as a compound adjective. This places the adverb/participle correctly.

× It depends. On the one hand, yes, because it provides more, more green spaces for people needed to relax and downwind.

✓ It depends. On the one hand, yes, because it provides more green spaces for people who need to relax and unwind.

Replace the duplicated 'more, more' with a single 'more'. Use 'people who need' to introduce the relative clause; 'needed' is incorrect tense. Use 'unwind' not 'downwind' (wrong word). Quantifier 'more' should modify 'green spaces' directly.

× But on the other hand, other infrastructure is also need improve.

✓ But on the other hand, other infrastructure also needs to be improved.

Use the passive 'needs to be improved' or active 'needs improvement' because 'is need improve' is ungrammatical. 'Needs' agrees with singular 'infrastructure'. Add 'to be' with passive or use 'needs improvement'.

× It need improvement.

✓ It needs improvement.

This is subject-verb agreement and tense: 'need' should be 'needs' to match singular noun 'it'. Using present simple 'needs' correctly expresses the current requirement for improvement.

× Well there isn't 1 currently in my mind, but I would definitely want to visit one of the newest and most modern park in the future because I feel like it would be worth visiting to see those new infrastructure.

✓ Well, there isn't one currently in my mind, but I would definitely want to visit one of the newest and most modern parks in the future because I feel it would be worth visiting to see that new infrastructure.

Use the word 'one' not the digit '1' and include a comma after 'Well'. 'Parks' should be plural to match 'one of the newest ... parks'. Change 'it would be worth visiting to see those new infrastructure' to 'it would be worth visiting to see that new infrastructure' because 'infrastructure' is uncountable and takes singular demonstrative 'that'. Also avoid repeating 'visit' unnecessarily and simplify to 'I feel it would be worth visiting'.