Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make your answer more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct past tense forms (e.g., 'swung' not 'swang') and avoid repeating ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. Although the nearest park was an hour’s drive away, we still went sometimes, and I especially remember swinging on the swings and building sandcastles with my friends.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and combine related ideas using linking words. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'have a picnic' not 'doing picnic') and correct verb forms. Keep it to a maximum of 3–4 sentences with one clear topic sentence and specific examples.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go with friends, and we often have a picnic there, play on the swings and slides, and meet other people to socialize.

Gợi ý: Structure your answer with one clear opinion sentence followed by two specific reasons linked logically. Reduce redundancy (avoid repeating 'options') and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'promote' instead of 'encouraging').

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because the single park we have is far for most residents. More parks would give people closer green spaces and promote outdoor activities, helping them spend less time on social media.

Gợi ý: Finish sentences fully and be specific about the parks or countries you mean. Start with a direct statement, then give one or two concrete examples of what you want to experience (food, culture, activities). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'in particular'.

Ví dụ: Yes — I want to visit famous parks abroad to learn about different cultures. For example, I would like to visit Japan’s public parks to see how families picnic there and try local street food, and compare how children play and interact.

× We had to have an hour drive at least.

✓ We had to have at least an hour's drive.

Use of noun phrase for duration requires possessive form 'an hour's drive' or 'a one-hour drive'. The original phrase 'an hour drive' is incorrect because 'hour' needs a possessive or hyphenation when modifying 'drive'. Suggestion: say 'at least an hour's drive' or 'at least a one-hour drive.'

× I rode the slides and I swang and I played with the sand with my friends.

✓ I rode the slides, I swung, and I played in the sand with my friends.

The past tense of 'swing' is 'swung', not 'swang'. Also use parallel structure and the preposition 'in' for 'play in the sand'. Suggestion: keep verbs parallel and use correct past tense forms.

× Yes, I really enjoy going to the park.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy going to parks.

Context asks about parks generally, so plural or no article is appropriate. 'The park' refers to a specific park; to express a general habit use 'parks' or 'the park' only if a specific park is meant. Suggestion: use 'parks' when speaking generally.

× We have so much fun time riding swings and slides.

✓ We have so much fun riding swings and slides.

The phrase 'fun time' is redundant and unidiomatic. Use 'so much fun' without 'time'. Suggestion: say 'have so much fun' or 'have a great time'.

× We also like bringing food and eating and doing picnic, eating together, gathering and socializing with other people and get to know other people.

✓ We also like bringing food, having picnics, eating together, gathering, socializing with other people, and getting to know them.

Use consistent gerund forms: 'having picnics' not 'doing picnic'; maintain parallel structure and use 'getting to know them' (gerund) rather than bare infinitive 'get'. Also replace repeated 'other people' with 'them' for conciseness. Suggestion: list activities in parallel gerund form.

× Yes, it would be more convenient to have more parks in my city because we don't have as much.

✓ Yes, it would be more convenient to have more parks in my city because we don't have many.

'As much' is used with uncountable nouns; parks are countable so use 'many'. Suggestion: use 'many parks' or 'as many parks' depending on structure.

× So people can have more options and closer options to them because the park that we have is so far away from most citizens and having more parks is encouraging the outdoor activities and getting away from everything on social media.

✓ This would give people more and closer options because the park we have is far from most residents, and having more parks would encourage outdoor activities and help people get away from social media.

Pronoun 'them' misused; restructure sentence for clarity. 'Citizens' is awkward; 'residents' fits better. Use conditional 'would encourage' to match 'It would be more convenient'. Also 'encouraging the outdoor activities' is unidiomatic; use 'encourage outdoor activities'. Suggestion: simplify and use consistent verb tense/modal 'would'.

× I would love to go to parks in other countries and get to socialize and know their culture and preferences.

✓ I would love to go to parks in other countries, socialize, and learn about their cultures and preferences.

Use parallel verbs: 'socialize' and 'learn' rather than 'get to socialize and know'. 'Their culture' is vague—use 'their cultures' when referring to people of multiple countries. 'Get to' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use simple verbs in parallel and pluralize 'cultures'.

× I also would love to go on a picnic with these people and try their local food, see how the children are socialized with each other and.

✓ I would also love to go on a picnic with these people, try their local food, and see how the children interact with one another.

'Socialized with each other' is awkward; use 'interact with one another' or 'are socialized' in passive only if intended. Remove trailing 'and' and keep parallel verb forms. Also position 'also' more naturally. Suggestion: use parallel verb phrases and 'interact with one another' for children's behavior.