Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word if adding more information.

Ví dụ: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child, especially with my family. For example, I often played football with my older brothers, which was fun and helped me stay active.

Gợi ý: Avoid filler words and repeated phrases (e.g., “like”). Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with a linking word for coherence.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me clear my mind. For instance, when I walk among trees I can relax and concentrate better, which makes it easier to think through problems.

Gợi ý: Be direct and avoid hedging phrases like “I guess” and repeated words. Provide one clear reason and a concrete benefit using a linking word.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because they make urban areas greener and cleaner. Moreover, more parks would give people additional places to relax and meet friends.

Gợi ý: Be confident and avoid uncertain phrases like “I guess.” Give a clear name and one reason why you want to visit, using a linking word to connect the ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I want to visit an amusement park called Kunju World in Konjo because it sounds exciting. For example, I’d like to go with friends to try the rides and enjoy the shows there.

× Well, as I can remember, I loved going to the parks, especially with my family.

✓ Well, as far as I can remember, I loved going to parks, especially with my family.

Uses present-tense phrase 'as I can remember' incorrectly; correct phrase is 'as far as I can remember' to refer to memory now. Also 'the parks' is unnecessary; use plural 'parks' without article when speaking generally.

× I remember I used to play some football with my elder brothers and I really enjoyed it.

✓ I remember I used to play football with my older brothers, and I really enjoyed it.

'Some football' is informal and unnecessary; 'football' is sufficient. 'Elder' is typically used in formal contexts or for relatives in specific positions; 'older brothers' is more natural. Add a comma before 'and' to join clauses.

× Of course I do, I do love it like I go to park, like to clear my mind or have some good time.

✓ Of course I do; I love it. I go to parks to clear my mind or have a good time.

Run-on sentence and incorrect article 'go to park' should be 'go to parks' or 'go to the park' depending on meaning. Repetition of 'do' and 'like' is unnecessary. Split into shorter sentences and use infinitive 'to clear' for purpose.

× Like spending my time in the nature.

✓ I like spending my time in nature.

Unnecessary 'Like' at start and incorrect article 'the nature' — 'nature' as a general concept does not need 'the'. Use gerund 'spending' correctly preceded by subject 'I'.

× It helps to concentrate or think about life.

✓ It helps me concentrate and think about life.

Missing object 'me' after 'helps'. Use parallel structure 'concentrate and think' rather than 'or'.

× I guess I would love it because the more the parks are in the city, the cleaner or more greener it becomes I guess and there will be quite a lot of places for people to spend some quality time.

✓ I guess I would love that, because the more parks there are in the city, the cleaner and greener it becomes, and there will be many places for people to spend quality time.

Several issues: 'love it' -> 'love that' is more natural. Article and word order: 'the more parks there are' instead of 'the more the parks are'. 'More greener' is incorrect double comparative; use 'greener'. Use 'and' not 'or' between adjectives. 'Quite a lot of places' -> 'many places'. Add commas for clarity.

× Well, I have heard about amusement park in Konjo.

✓ Well, I have heard about an amusement park in Konjo.

Missing indefinite article 'an' before 'amusement park'.

× I guess it's called Kunju World.

✓ I guess it's called Kunju World.

Sentence is correct; no change needed. (Included to indicate no applicable error from list.)

× I think I would love it to go and spend some time with my friends.

✓ I think I would love to go and spend some time with my friends.

Incorrect insertion of 'it' after 'would love' blocks the correct infinitive structure. Remove 'it' so 'would love to go' is correct.

× Yeah, I want to go there.

✓ Yes, I want to go there.

Informal 'Yeah' is acceptable in speech but 'Yes' is more formal. Sentence structure and tense are correct; change optional for register.