Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitation and repetition, use past tense consistently, combine ideas into a concise response (max 5 sentences), and add one specific detail to make the answer more vivid. Use linking words like “because” and “and” appropriately.

Ví dụ: Yes. I loved going to parks as a child because I could play games and ride my bike with friends. I also enjoyed walking there and breathing fresh air, which felt refreshing after being indoors. For example, we often played hide-and-seek near the big oak tree.

Gợi ý: Speak more fluently with fewer fillers, use comparative structure correctly, and give a clear reason with one specific example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like “because” and “so”.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but not as much as when I was a child because I am busier now. For example, during weekdays I usually do homework and attend classes, so I only visit parks on weekends to relax.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g., ‘there aren’t enough parks’). Offer a concise reason and one specific consequence or benefit. Use linking words like “because”, “so”, or “therefore”.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are few green spaces at the moment. As a result, families and elderly people have limited places to relax, so adding parks would improve residents’ health and community life.

Gợi ý: Use clear, natural phrasing and avoid repeated words and unusual expressions (e.g., ‘pleasant to meet’ is incorrect). State a simple reason and a specific plan or time frame. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

Ví dụ: Yes, I want to visit a new park in the capital that was recently built. I plan to go there with my friends next month because it has modern play areas and beautiful gardens, and I’m excited to explore it.

× Yeah, when I was a child, uh, I like, I like, uh, I liked going to the parks because I can play there with my friends.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I liked going to parks because I could play there with my friends.

The sentence mixes present and past tense. The time phrase 'when I was a child' requires past tense. 'I like' is present; change to 'I liked'. Also 'the parks' is unnatural here; use plural 'parks' without 'the'. 'Can' should be 'could' to match past time. Suggestion: Keep all verbs in the past when referring to childhood (liked, could).

× I can meet some of my friends and I can walk there.

✓ I could meet some of my friends and I could walk there.

This continues the childhood context so present modal 'can' should be past 'could'. Maintain consistent past tense for actions that happened in the past. Suggestion: Use 'could' when describing abilities in the past.

× I can breath fresh air.

✓ I could breathe fresh air.

Again, 'can' should be 'could' for past ability. Also 'breath' is a noun; the correct verb is 'breathe'. Suggestion: Use 'could' and the correct verb form 'breathe' for ability in the past.

× I could, umm, press fresh air and I, I also could try, uh, ride a bike.

✓ I could, umm, breathe fresh air and I also could try riding a bike.

'Press fresh air' is incorrect; likely intended 'breathe fresh air'. For 'try ride a bike', after 'try' use the -ing form 'riding' when expressing attempting an activity. Keep 'could' for past ability. Suggestion: Use correct verb 'breathe' and gerund 'riding' after 'try'.

× Uh, of course I like, but I don't like as much as I like when I was a child.

✓ Of course I like going to parks now, but I don't like them as much as I did when I was a child.

The comparison mixes tenses. 'As much as I like when I was a child' is incorrect; use past 'did' to refer to childhood. Also specify the object 'them' (parks) for clarity and add 'going to parks' for parallel structure. Suggestion: Use 'did' for past comparison and include the object for clarity.

× Uh, nowadays I have a lot of, uh, stuff to do.

✓ Nowadays I have a lot of stuff to do.

Sentence is acceptable but repeated hesitations removed. No tense error; kept present simple 'have' for current situation. Suggestion: Avoid filler words for clarity.

× I have a lot of homework to do and I'm doing, I'm doing a lot of stuff in my, in my, uh, weekdays, but sometimes I go there.

✓ I have a lot of homework to do and I'm busy on weekdays, but sometimes I go there.

Repetition 'I'm doing, I'm doing' and phrase 'in my weekdays' are incorrect. Use 'busy on weekdays' to express ongoing current routine. Present continuous 'I'm doing' is fine but redundant here. Suggestion: Use 'busy on weekdays' or 'I do a lot during weekdays' for natural expression.

× Yeah, I wish to see more parks.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks.

'I wish to see' is not wrong grammatically but sounds unnatural in this context; 'would like' is more idiomatic for expressing desire. No article issue specifically, but improved phrasing. Suggestion: Use 'would like' for polite desire expressions.

× Uh, in my city, there aren't enough parks for me, uh, for my, for my, uh, relatives and to the citizens because there are a lot of umm, roads, roads are being renovated and many, many buildings are don't have enough parks.

✓ In my city there aren't enough parks for me, my relatives, and other citizens because many roads are being renovated and many buildings don't have enough green space.

Original mixes prepositions and has subject-verb errors. 'There aren't enough parks for me, for my relatives and to the citizens' should be 'for me, my relatives, and other citizens'. 'Roads are being renovated' is acceptable; 'many buildings are don't have' is incorrect: drop 'are' before 'don't'. Also 'parks' for buildings is odd; 'green space' or 'parks' for residents is better. Suggestion: Use parallel lists separated by commas, don't combine 'are' with 'don't', and choose appropriate nouns ('green space').

× Yeah, I want to visit the new park. It's in our capital.

✓ Yes, I want to visit the new park in our capital.

Sentences are acceptable but can be combined for fluency. 'It's in our capital' is fine; no tense error. Suggestion: Combine short sentences for natural speech.

× I want to go there with my friends or with my parents because it it has been built recently and it's brand new.

✓ I want to go there with my friends or my parents because it was built recently and it's brand new.

'Has been built recently' (present perfect passive) can be used, but when giving a recent finished action with a specific time reference 'recently' both present perfect and simple past are possible. Repetition 'it it' removed. Using simple past 'was built recently' is more natural in spoken English here. Suggestion: Remove duplication and use either 'was built recently' or 'has been built recently' consistently.

× I want to, I wish to see and that park as soon as possible.

✓ I want to visit that park as soon as possible.

Original is ungrammatical: 'I want to, I wish to see and that park' is confused. Use 'visit that park' or 'see that park'. Keep one expression of desire ('want to' or 'wish to'). Suggestion: Use one clear phrase: 'I want to visit that park as soon as possible.'

× And I'm very, I'm very pleasant to meet.

✓ And I'm very happy to go there / I'm very pleased to visit.

'I'm very pleasant to meet' wrongly uses 'pleasant' to describe the speaker as an attribute toward others; likely intended 'I'm very pleased' or 'I'm very happy'. The structure 'pleasant to meet' describes being enjoyable to meet, not feeling pleased. Suggestion: Use 'pleased' or 'happy' to express your feeling about visiting the park.