Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be careful with tense consistency and subject-verb agreement. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and use linking words like “because” correctly. For example, say ‘I didn’t’ with past tense verbs (preferred, watched).

Ví dụ: No, I didn’t. As a child I preferred staying at home because I loved reading books and watching TV with my family, which felt cozy and relaxing.

Gợi ý: Fix subject-verb agreement and awkward phrases. Use one topic sentence then a brief reason with clear wording. Replace incorrect phrases like “helps me and wind” with a coherent reason. Keep it natural and concise.

Ví dụ: Not really. As an adult I still prefer staying at home because it helps me relax and feel comfortable after a busy day.

Gợi ý: Make your meaning clear and avoid incorrect or unclear expressions. Use a topic sentence then a supporting detail with correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘feel welcomed by nature’). Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ properly and keep sentences grammatically correct.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. I usually feel welcomed by nature when I visit parks, so more parks in the city would give people more peaceful places to unwind and relax.

Gợi ý: Avoid contradictions and clarify ideas. Begin with a direct answer, then describe your ideal park with specific, correctly formed phrases. Use correct articles and plural forms, and replace unclear words (e.g., ‘bars and dogs’ — maybe you meant ‘benches and paths’ or ‘areas for dogs’).

Ví dụ: Not particularly, because I don't know many parks nearby. However, my ideal park would have many trees and flowerbeds, walking paths, benches, and a dog-friendly area, making it a peaceful nature park.

× No, I didn't because as a child I prefer to stay at home and read books and watch TV with my family.

✓ No, I didn't because as a child I preferred to stay at home and read books and watch TV with my family.

The sentence uses past context 'as a child' and the preceding clause 'I didn't' (past) but the verb 'prefer' is present tense. This is a tense inconsistency. Use the past tense 'preferred' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: Keep verbs consistent in past narratives (e.g., 'I preferred to stay at home').

× Not really, as an adult I still loves to stay at home and relax because it helps me and wind and makes me relaxed and comfortable.

✓ Not really, as an adult I still love to stay at home and relax because it helps me unwind and makes me feel relaxed and comfortable.

The subject 'I' requires the base verb form 'love', not 'loves' which is third person singular. Also 'wind' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'unwind' (to relax). 'Makes me relaxed' is unnatural; use 'makes me feel relaxed'. Suggestions: Use 'I love', 'unwind', and 'makes me feel relaxed and comfortable.'

× Yes I would because every time I go to parks I always wear open and welcomed by the nature house. So if there are more parks in my city that would be really great place to unwind and relax.

✓ Yes, I would because every time I go to parks I always feel welcomed and open to nature. So if there were more parks in my city, that would be a really great place to unwind and relax.

Multiple issues: 'wear open and welcomed by the nature house' is ungrammatical and seems to confuse verbs and nouns. Replace with 'feel welcomed and open to nature'. Also conditional/tense: use 'were' for hypothetical ('if there were more parks') or keep present 'if there are' with matching result clause. 'That would be really great place' needs article 'a'. Suggestions: Use clear verbs ('feel welcomed'), correct conditional form ('if there were' or 'if there are') and include articles where needed ('a really great place').

× Not really because I don't have any knowledge about parks, but if I could go my ideal parks then that would be have a lot of nature such as trees and flowers, bars and dogs.

✓ Not really because I don't know much about parks, but if I could go to my ideal park, it would have a lot of nature such as trees and flowers, birds and dogs.

Several problems: 'don't have any knowledge about' is wordy; use 'don't know much about'. 'If I could go my ideal parks' is missing preposition and number agreement; use 'go to my ideal park' (singular). 'That would be have' is ungrammatical; use 'it would have'. 'Bars' is likely intended 'birds'. Suggestions: Use natural collocations ('know much about', 'go to my ideal park', 'it would have') and correct word choice ('birds').

× It's going to be like nature park.

✓ It would be like a natural park.

Mismatch of tense and word choice: earlier sentence uses conditional 'if I could go', so 'would' is more appropriate than 'going to be'. 'Nature park' is not idiomatic; use 'natural park' or 'nature park' rarely—'natural park' or 'nature reserve' is better. Also include article 'a'. Suggestions: Use matching conditional modal ('would') and correct adjective ('natural') and include an article ('a').