Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo
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Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you like going to parks as a child?
Thí sinh
Well when I was 10 years old, I extremely love going to the parks due to some reasons. First of all, you see the place where me and my friends usually hang out together to play some games like football or volleyball and 2nd, my mom usually took me to the park to avoid playing video games at home.
Giám khảo
Do you still like going to parks now?
Thí sinh
You know, I'm a workaholic kind person with the heavy workloads, so I spend most of my time for working instead of going to the park. But in the future, if I have time, I will go to the park with my friends to memorize about our childhood and to take some exercise to strengthen our health.
Giám khảo
Would you like to see more parks in your city?
Thí sinh
What I think is an essential and interesting idea because having a lot of park brings many benefits. First and foremost is, uh, there will be more risk pay for citizens to enjoy. And the second is there will be some playground for children to take part in after school. And the last reason is that, uh, it will have to the environment.
Giám khảo
Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?
Thí sinh
Well you know I used to watch a movie, Jurassic Park, which is about a park surrounding with many T Rex or dinosaurs. So I really want to go there one more time in my life to enjoy the chichen it and beautiful species which is about 100 years ago.
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Part 1
Did you like going to parks as a child?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn, dùng thì phù hợp và cấu trúc ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu). Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'extremely love' và vị trí đại từ ('me and my friends' → 'my friends and I'). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể, dùng liên từ để liên kết ý.
Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was ten. My friends and I would meet there to play football or volleyball, which helped us stay active. Also, my mother often took me to the park to keep me away from video games. Those visits created many happy memories.
Do you still like going to parks now?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Cần sử dụng ngữ pháp chuẩn (ví dụ 'I am a workaholic' not 'a workaholic kind person') và câu ngắn, rõ ràng. Tránh từ không chính xác như 'memorize about our childhood' — nên dùng 'reminisce about our childhood'. Thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc và cụ thể hóa kế hoạch tương lai.
Ví dụ: Not really, because I am a bit of a workaholic and my job keeps me very busy. However, if I have more free time in the future, I would like to go to the park with friends to reminisce about our childhood and get some exercise to improve our health.
Would you like to see more parks in your city?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: Câu trả lời thiếu chính xác từ vựng và có lỗi ý nghĩa ('risk pay' không hợp lý; 'it will have to the environment' không rõ). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và nêu 2–3 lợi ích cụ thể, dùng từ phù hợp như 'recreation', 'playgrounds', 'benefit the environment'. Dùng liên từ để kết nối các lý do.
Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide valuable recreation space for residents. For example, new parks would offer playgrounds for children after school and green areas where people can relax. Additionally, more parks would help improve air quality and benefit the local environment.
Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: Câu trả lời thiếu logic và có nhiều lỗi (nói về phim thay vì một công viên thực tế; 'surrounding with' → 'surrounded by'; 'chichen it' không rõ). Nên trả lời trực tiếp: nêu tên hoặc loại công viên bạn muốn đến, lý do cụ thể và mô tả ngắn gọn. Tránh thông tin mâu thuẫn về thời gian.
Ví dụ: I would love to visit a famous wildlife or botanical park in the future, such as a national park with diverse species. For instance, visiting a large nature reserve would let me see native animals and beautiful plants up close, and I could learn more about conservation efforts.
Ngữ pháp
× Well when I was 10 years old, I extremely love going to the parks due to some reasons.
✓ Well, when I was 10 years old, I really loved going to parks for several reasons.
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