Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar, give a clear topic sentence then 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and unclear words like “club” or “the stuff.” Use past tense consistently and name activities specifically.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. After school I often met my friends there to play on the jungle gym and kick a football, and we sometimes had picnics. Those afternoons were one of my favorite parts of the week.

Gợi ý: Give a clear direct answer first, then explain with specific reasons and use correct grammar and tense. Avoid repetition and filler. Use linking words like ‘however’ or ‘but’ to contrast ideas.

Ví dụ: I still enjoy parks, but it depends on the season. In summer I avoid them because of insects and heat; however, in spring and autumn I often go to relax and read or meet friends.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and clearly without hesitation. Provide a brief comparison with correct place names (check spelling) and one specific reason. Avoid repetitions and unfinished phrases.

Ví dụ: No, I wouldn't want more parks because my city already has many green spaces. For example, there are several large parks and community gardens in each district, so additional parks are not necessary right now.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct answer and add a specific reason why you want to visit. Avoid fillers and correct phrasing like “the famous park” or “famous for.” Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in New York. I've never been to the United States, and I want to see the park's famous landscapes, bridges, and cultural events in person.

× Uh, definitely, yes. I love going to parks.

✓ Uh, definitely, yes. I loved going to parks.

The question asks about childhood (past). The student uses present tense 'love' which mismatches the time frame. Use past tense 'loved' to match 'as a child'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time expressions (when I was a child).

× When I was a child after school I met with my friends in the parks playing, uh, club, jungle gyms, the stuff.

✓ When I was a child, after school I met my friends at the park to play on the swings and jungle gyms and similar things.

Sentence is awkward and has preposition and word choice issues. 'Met with' is awkward in this context; 'at the park' is singular and typical. 'playing, uh, club, jungle gyms, the stuff' is ungrammatical listing. Suggestion: use clear list with nouns and appropriate prepositions: 'met my friends at the park to play on the swings and jungle gyms.'

× So it was one of my favorite ways to spend the afternoons.

✓ So it was one of my favorite ways to spend the afternoon.

'Afternoons' is plural while 'one of my favorite ways' usually pairs with 'the afternoon' as a general time period; however 'afternoons' can be acceptable. To reduce redundancy and keep natural phrasing, use singular 'the afternoon.' Suggestion: use consistent singular/plural with time expressions.

× Uh, it's on. It depends on the situation because in summer I hate uh, insects.

✓ Uh, it depends on the situation because in summer I hate insects.

'It's on' is unclear and unnecessary. Keep present tense 'hate' for habitual dislike; remove extraneous fragment. Suggestion: avoid filler fragments that confuse meaning.

× So I didn't like go to the parks in the summer vacation summer.

✓ So I didn't like going to the parks during summer vacation.

Incorrect verb form: after 'didn't' use base form; but negative preference is better expressed with 'didn't like going' or 'didn't go.' Original 'didn't like go' is ungrammatical. Also 'summer vacation summer' is redundant. Suggestion: use 'didn't like going' or 'didn't go' and remove repetition.

× But umm, sometimes parks feel more relaxed.

✓ But sometimes parks feel more relaxing.

'Feel relaxed' describes people, while parks are described as 'relaxing.' Use adjective 'relaxing' to describe the effect of parks. Suggestion: choose correct adjective to describe nouns vs people.

× No, I wouldn't because my city already has a lot of parks, uh, compared with Hitaglia or Shibuya.

✓ No, I wouldn't because my city already has a lot of parks compared with Hitachio or Shibuya.

'Wouldn't' is fine for hypothetical preference. Main issues: possible place name typo 'Hitaglia' unclear; assumed correction 'Hitachio' but if original is 'Hitaglia' keep as name. Also remove filler comma. Suggestion: check and use correct place names and avoid filler words.

× So I think it's a two I it's a lot of parks in my city, so I guess I have, yeah.

✓ So I think there are a lot of parks in my city, so I don't need more.

Original is ungrammatical and incoherent ('it's a two I it's a lot'). Use 'there are' for existence of plural noun and clear conclusion. Suggestion: use clear clause structure: 'I think there are a lot of parks, so I don't need more.'

× Oh, I haven't really thought about it before, but I would love to visit Central Park in New York.

✓ Oh, I haven't really thought about it before, but I would love to visit Central Park in New York.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses present perfect 'haven't thought' for past experience up to now and modal 'would love' for desire; no change needed.

× Uh, I've never been to the United States and I'd like to see it famous as parks.

✓ I've never been to the United States and I'd like to see its famous parks.

Incorrect word order and phrase 'see it famous as parks' is ungrammatical. Use possessive 'its' and noun phrase 'famous parks.' Suggestion: place adjectives before nouns and use possessive pronouns correctly.

× So yes, I want, I wanna see.

✓ So yes, I want to see it.

Colloquial 'wanna' is fine in speech but in corrected form use 'want to see.' Also include the object 'it' (Central Park). Suggestion: use 'want to' plus base verb and include the referent for clarity.