Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid hesitations and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar (e.g., "used to go with my grandma" not "with with") and finish the sentence instead of trailing off.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. I often went with my grandma or my mother, and there was a small park near our house full of colorful flowers, which I enjoyed smelling and looking at.

Gợi ý: Good clear response with supporting details. Improve coherence by using linking words and combining sentences to avoid repetition (e.g., avoid repeating "now"). Use a concise topic sentence and one or two specific details about frequency or what you do there.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Since I moved to another country with my husband, I usually go alone during the week, but sometimes he joins me for a short walk and we both appreciate the colorful flowers and fresh air.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and avoid rhetorical questions. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about benefits. Also finish your final thought; avoid trailing off. Keep it to two to three sentences maximum.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe play spaces with swings for children, which can reduce screen time. In addition, parks improve community health by offering places for exercise and relaxation for people of all ages.

Gợi ý: Be specific about which park and why you want to visit it in the future. Use linking words to structure the answer and avoid trailing off. Mention a clear reason and, if relevant, a planned time or activity to show intention.

Ví dụ: Yes, I plan to visit the small neighborhood park near my home because I enjoy watching children play and seeing families spend time together. Next weekend I hope to walk there in the morning and sit on a bench to relax and read while observing the lively atmosphere.

× We had a very beautiful park near our house that was uh, having so many flowers.

✓ We had a very beautiful park near our house that had so many flowers.

The verb 'have' is not normally used in the continuous '-ing' form to describe a permanent feature in the past. Use the simple past 'had' to describe possession or existence in the past. Suggestion: use simple past for states (had, was, were) instead of 'having'.

× I really liked those flowers sometimes I.

✓ I really liked those flowers sometimes.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains a stray pronoun 'I' at the end, creating a sentence fragment. Remove the extra 'I' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: read aloud to catch fragments and ensure each sentence has subject and predicate.

× Now I go to the parks alone.

✓ Now I go to the park alone.

When referring to the general activity of going to parks in a habitual, non-count specific way, English commonly uses 'the park' to mean 'the local park' or simply 'park' with no article; 'the parks' implies multiple specific parks. Here the speaker likely means the local park, so use 'the park'. Suggestion: choose 'the park' for habitual visits to a familiar place.

× Nobody's there with me because I have moved to another country with my husband.

✓ Nobody is there with me because I moved to another country with my husband.

The contraction 'Nobody's' is acceptable but formal correction uses 'Nobody is'. More importantly, the tense 'have moved' (present perfect) is acceptable with recent moves, but 'moved' (simple past) matches the narrative better and keeps tense consistency with surrounding past description. Also avoid contractions in formal speech. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (use simple past if describing a past action with present consequence already established).

× And sometimes when he's free, he comes with me and we just go for a short walk.

✓ Sometimes, when he is free, he comes with me and we go for a short walk.

This sentence is acceptable but can be made more formal by expanding contractions and removing 'just' which is filler. No major grammatical error; correction improves register and clarity. Suggestion: avoid contractions and filler words in formal responses.

× But we really enjoy the flowers, the colorful flowers around us.

✓ We really enjoy the colorful flowers around us.

Repeating 'the flowers' and 'the colorful flowers' is redundant. Combine into one clear noun phrase. Suggestion: avoid repetition by using a single descriptive phrase.

× In the cities we really need many parks around us with swings so that children can come and play there and it will decrease their screen time.

✓ In cities, we really need many parks with swings so that children can come and play and reduce their screen time.

Use 'In cities' (general statement) rather than 'In the cities'. 'Many parks around us with swings' is wordy; simplify to 'many parks with swings'. 'It will decrease their screen time' is awkward; use 'reduce their screen time'. Suggestion: use concise expressions for general statements and prefer 'reduce' for this context.

× Moreover, it is a fun having parks around us.

✓ Moreover, it is fun to have parks around us.

The phrase 'a fun having parks' is ungrammatical. Use 'it is fun to have' or 'having parks around us is fun'. Suggestion: choose correct verb form after 'it is' (adjective + to-infinitive).

× Everyone will love it, people of all.

✓ Everyone will love it; people of all ages will enjoy it.

'People of all' is incomplete. Specify 'ages' to complete the phrase. Also join clauses properly. Suggestion: complete comparative/group phrases (people of all ages/genders etc.).

× Yes, I would like to go to a park near my home actually, because when I go for a walk I really move around that park and I see many children swinging and playing there.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to a park near my home, because when I go for a walk I usually walk around that park and see many children swinging and playing there.

The phrase 'I really move around that park' is unnatural; use 'I usually walk around that park' or 'I often walk around that park'. 'Swinging and playing' is fine as present participles describing simultaneous actions. Suggestion: use natural verbs for walking (walk, stroll) and adverbs like 'usually'/'often' for habit.

× They have got their own toys with them and their grandparents are with them and sometimes their mother and father help them to move in the.

✓ They bring their own toys, and their grandparents are with them; sometimes their mother and father help them on the swings.

The phrase 'help them to move in the' is incomplete and unidiomatic. Likely intended meaning is parents helping children use the swings or move on the swings. Use 'bring' instead of 'have got' for clarity, and complete the sentence with 'on the swings'. Suggestion: ensure prepositions and particles complete the intended verb phrase ('help them on the swings', 'help them get on the swings').