Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答は内容が伝わるが、文法ミス、語順の不自然さ、冗長な表現が目立ちます。改善点は①主題文を明確にする（短い肯定/否定の文で開始）、②不要な重複を避ける、③過去形の一貫性を保つ、④「with my friends families」は不明瞭なので正確な語句に直すこと。例: “I didn’t like going to parks as a child because I preferred staying indoors and playing with my friends or family.”のように、主題→理由の順で簡潔に述べ、1～2の補足文で具体例を加えるとよいです。

Ví dụ: I didn’t like going to parks as a child. I preferred staying indoors where I could play video games or read books with my family and close friends. For example, I often spent afternoons playing board games with my siblings rather than visiting the local park.

Gợi ý: 意味は伝わるが文法（主語と動詞の一致、語彙選択）と繰り返しが問題です。改善点は①主語と動詞の一致（“technology has”）、②不自然な語句を簡潔に置き換える（“acquirements of digital services”→“access to digital services”）、③ためらい語（uh）や繰り返しを削ること。理由を一つか二つに絞り、接続詞でつなげると流れが良くなります。

Ví dụ: Not really. Technology has made it easier to access digital entertainment, so I usually spend my free time playing video games or watching shows at home. As a result, I prefer indoor activities to visiting parks.

Gợi ý: 回答は率直だが長くて回りくどい表現があります。改善点は①不要な情報を省く（“so I'm OK with seeing parks”は曖昧）、②“families”は誤用（単数“family”）、③一文を短くして主張→理由の構成にすること。相手の質問に対して明確な立場（肯定/否定/中立）を先に示してください。

Ví dụ: I’m fairly indifferent to having more parks in the city. I usually prefer spending time indoors with my family, so additional parks wouldn’t make a big difference to me. However, I can see how they would benefit people who enjoy outdoor activities.

Gợi ý: 答えは分かりやすいが、繰り返しや文法の誤り（“that has that has”, “an enormous numbers of green”）がある。改善点は①繰り返しを取り除く、②名詞の数と表現を正しくする（“a park with a lot of greenery”または“extensive green space”）、③具体性を高めるためにどんな特徴の公園か例を加えること。

Ví dụ: I don’t know specific parks in Tokyo, but I would like to visit a park with extensive green space and quiet walking paths to help me relax. For example, a large botanical garden with shaded benches and water features would be ideal for reducing stress.

× When I was a kid I was more indoor rather than spending time socializing with my friends in the parks.

✓ When I was a kid I spent more time indoors rather than socializing with my friends in parks.

The adjective 'indoor' is incorrectly used; the adverbial form 'indoors' is required to describe where time was spent. Also sentence structure improved by using 'spent more time indoors' instead of 'was more indoor'. Use 'in parks' without 'the' for general places. Suggestions: replace 'was more indoor' with 'spent more time indoors' and remove unnecessary articles.

× So I didn't really like going to a park and I rather and I stayed at stayed more time at home with my friends families.

✓ So I didn't really like going to parks and I preferred to stay at home with my friends and family.

The original has repetition, incorrect phrase order, and incorrect pluralization. 'Rather' should be used in 'prefer to' or 'would rather'. 'Stayed at stayed more time' is ungrammatical. Use 'parks' plural for general reference and 'family' as a collective noun; 'friends and family' is idiomatic. Suggestions: use 'preferred to stay at home' or 'would rather stay at home' and correct pluralization.

× Not really, since technology have improved rapidly and the acquirements of digital services to play video games have increased, so I so I rather enjoy using them to, uh, in my free time rather than going to parks.

✓ Not really, since technology has improved rapidly and access to digital services for playing video games has increased, so I now prefer using them in my free time rather than going to parks.

Subject 'technology' is singular and requires 'has' not 'have'. 'Acquirements' is not correct; use 'access' or 'availability'. Remove repetition 'so I so I' and use 'prefer' or 'would rather' correctly. Also place 'in my free time' after the verb for natural word order. Suggestions: use 'technology has improved', 'access to digital services has increased', and 'I prefer using them in my free time'.

× To be honest, I don't really care if there's more green in my city or not because I prefer spending my time with my families in my house rather than going outdoors and socializing with my friends or other people, so I'm OK with seeing parks in my city.

✓ To be honest, I don't really care if there's more green space in my city or not because I prefer spending my time with my family at home rather than going outdoors and socializing with friends or other people, so I'm OK with having parks in my city.

'Green' as a noun is unidiomatic; use 'green space'. 'Families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's household. 'In my house' is acceptable but 'at home' is more natural. 'Seeing parks' is awkward; use 'having parks' or 'there being parks'. Suggestions: replace 'more green' with 'more green space', 'my families' with 'my family', and 'seeing parks' with 'having parks'.

× To be honest I'm not that into this topic so I don't know any parks around Tokyo, but I would like to go to a park that has that has an enormous numbers of green which can reduce my stress.

✓ To be honest, I'm not that into this topic so I don't know many parks around Tokyo, but I would like to go to a park that has an enormous amount of greenery which could reduce my stress.

'Any parks' with 'don't know' is odd; 'know many parks' is better. 'Has that has' is duplicated. 'Numbers of green' is incorrect; use 'an enormous amount of greenery' or 'a large number of trees' depending on meaning. Use 'could' to indicate potential reduction of stress. Suggestions: remove duplication, use 'many parks', and replace 'numbers of green' with 'amount of greenery' or 'number of trees'.