Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make your answer more concise and natural, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and maintain coherence by using a linking word if you add extra information.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, there was a large open area in the centre where I’d play games and make friends, which made those visits exciting and memorable.

Gợi ý: Reduce filler words (uh) and avoid repetition. Use one clear topic sentence and then give two specific effects of the walks, linked with a connector (for example, “because” or “so”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy parks, but for different reasons. As an adult, I go there for long walks because they help me clear my head and reduce stress after a hectic workday.

Gợi ý: Avoid repeating ideas and correct minor grammar errors. Provide one clear reason and one specific effect or example. Use a linking phrase (for example, “because” or “therefore”) to connect your reason and result.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. Because pollution is rising in my city, we need more parks to improve air quality and give residents places to exercise and relax, which would benefit many adults.

Gợi ý: Make the response more direct and add a specific example to sound more engaging. Start with a clear topic sentence, then name one park or type of park you’d like to visit and why.

Ví dụ: I don't have a particular park in my city in mind, but I would like to visit national parks in the United States, such as Yosemite, because I've heard they have spectacular landscapes and hiking opportunities.

× Yes, I loved going to the parks as a child.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.

The definite article 'the' implies specific parks previously mentioned; here the speaker refers to parks in general. Remove 'the' to indicate parks generally.

× There used to be a huge grey area at the centre of the park and I would love to go play there and make new friends.

✓ There used to be a huge grey area at the centre of the park and I would love to go and play there and make new friends.

The verb sequence 'go play' is informal; standard grammar requires 'go and play' or 'go to play' to indicate purpose. Insert 'and' to make the phrase grammatically correct.

× I still like going to parks, though it would be for different reasons.

✓ I still like going to parks, though it is for different reasons.

Using 'would' here is inappropriate because the speaker is describing current habitual preference. Replace 'would' with 'is' to match present tense and the habitual meaning.

× Uh, as an adult, I enjoy going to the parks for long walks and to rejuvenate after a long hectic day at work.

✓ Uh, as an adult, I enjoy going to parks for long walks and to rejuvenate after a long hectic day at work.

'The parks' suggests specific parks; the speaker speaks generally about parks. Remove 'the' to correctly express general meaning.

× Uh, it helps me clear my head and uh, gives me fresh sense of feeling.

✓ Uh, it helps me clear my head and, uh, gives me a fresh sense of feeling.

Missing article 'a' before 'fresh sense'. Also 'sense of feeling' is awkward; consider 'a fresh feeling' or 'a renewed sense' for natural expression. Added 'a' to fix article error and improve grammar.

× I think with the growing pollution in in my city, it becomes more essential for us to have more parks.

✓ I think with the growing pollution in my city, it becomes more essential for us to have more parks.

Duplicate preposition 'in in' is a typographical error. Remove the extra 'in' to correct the preposition usage.

× Uh, one like I mentioned, as an adult I like taking long walks in the park it and it helps me refresh after a long hectic day.

✓ Uh, as I mentioned, as an adult I like taking long walks in the park, and it helps me refresh after a long hectic day.

Original sentence has redundant phrasing 'one like I mentioned' and a misplaced 'it'. Rephrase to 'as I mentioned' and add comma and conjunction to join clauses. Also 'refresh' is fine but 'refresh myself' or 'feel refreshed' would be more natural.

× I think a lot of adults.

✓ I think a lot of adults feel the same.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and completing thought. Add a verb phrase to form a complete sentence and clarify the idea.

× There are no specific parks as such that I would like to go in the future.

✓ There are no specific parks that I would like to go to in the future.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' when indicating a destination. Place 'to' after 'go' or reposition phrase to 'go to in the future'. Also 'as such' is unnecessary and can be omitted for clarity.