Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cevap doğal ve duygusal; ancak tekrarlamalar ve uzun cümleler var. Daha kısa, doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kullanın, ardından 1–2 spesifik ayrıntı verin. Gereksiz tekrarları ve ‘late hours’ gibi ifadelerin tekrarını azaltın. Bağlaçlarla (for example, because, so) akışı güçlendirin ve cümle sayısını 3–4’te tutun.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I played there with my friends every afternoon. For example, we used to play football until sunset and then buy snacks from a nearby stall. Those simple routines made parks my favorite place to spend time.

Gợi ý: Cevap net ve doğrudan; ancak küçük dilbilgisi hataları (extra 'it') ve tekrar eden ifadeler var. Sebebi daha spesifik örneklerle destekleyin (ör. hangi sesler sizi rahatsız ediyor). Ayrıca bağlaçlarla cümleleri daha akıcı yapın ve maksimum 3 cümlede kalın.

Ví dụ: Not really — I prefer quiet places now because parks are often noisy with children and loud music. For instance, the constant chatter and traffic noise make it hard for me to relax, so I tend to visit small cafes or botanical gardens instead.

Gợi ý: İyi fikir veriliyor fakat cümleler karışık, tekrarlar (‘my city’, duplicated 'who') ve belirsiz ifadeler mevcut. Daha düzenli bir konu cümlesi kurun, ardından iki spesifik neden verin (ör. sağlık, aile etkinlikleri) ve bağlaç kullanın. Gereksiz kelimeleri çıkarın.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks because our city currently lacks green spaces. This would give families places to exercise and children somewhere safe to play, which would improve community health and social life.

Gợi ý: Cevap samimi ama konuşma dolgu kelimeleri ('umm', 'I, I') ve dilbilgisi hataları ('it don't') içeriyor. Net bir konu cümlesi kurun, sonra neden istediğinizi iki kısa destekleyici cümleyle açıklayın. Dolgu kelimelerini azaltın ve doğru fiil formunu kullanın.

Ví dụ: I'm not sure it's a traditional park, but I would love to visit Disneyland once because of the attractions and shows I have seen online. I expect the themed areas and performances to be memorable, so I hope the experience lives up to my expectations.

× I loved going to parks when I was a child because I remember having so much fun when I was in the park with my friends, chilling, hanging out, playing until late hours and everything was just so perfect.

✓ I loved going to parks when I was a child because I remember having so much fun when I was in the park with my friends, chilling, hanging out, and playing until late at night; everything felt so perfect.

The original sentence mixes informal phrases and has a phrasing issue with 'late hours' and punctuation. Use 'late at night' for natural past-time reference and add 'and' before the last item in the list. Also replace 'was just so perfect' with 'felt so perfect' to match past-tense perception.

× I did not want to go home until really late hours and I wish I could go back into time and play with my friends back in the park.

✓ I did not want to go home until really late, and I wish I could go back in time and play with my friends in the park again.

Use 'go back in time' (idiomatic) instead of 'go back into time'. 'Late hours' is awkward—'late' suffices. Use 'in the park' not 'back in the park' and add 'again' to express repetition. Keep tense consistent.

× I don't really fancy parks anymore because it they are very loud for me.

✓ I don't really fancy parks anymore because they are very noisy for me.

Remove the extraneous 'it' (pronoun error) and use 'noisy' instead of 'loud' for natural collocation. 'Loud for me' is acceptable but 'noisy for me' is more idiomatic.

× I love peace and quiet nowadays compared to the childhood times of mine, so I enjoy more quiet places where I can just chill.

✓ I love peace and quiet nowadays compared to my childhood, so I prefer quieter places where I can just relax.

Use 'my childhood' instead of 'the childhood times of mine' (unnatural phrasing). 'Enjoy more quiet places' should be 'prefer quieter places' (comparative adjective). 'Chill' is informal; 'relax' is more appropriate in a test context. Keep present-tense preference.

× I actually would like to see more parks in my city because I feel like there is a massive lack of parks and green places in my city and I kind of feel like that there are people around who who are struggling to spend some time with their family in the appropriate places.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because there is a significant lack of parks and green spaces, and I feel that some people are struggling to find suitable places to spend time with their families.

Remove redundant 'actually' and duplicate 'my city'. Use 'significant' and 'green spaces' (plural) for natural collocation. 'Kind of feel like that there are people around who who are' contains repetition and awkward structure—simplify to 'I feel that some people are struggling'. Use 'families' plural and 'find suitable places' instead of 'spend some time with their family in the appropriate places'.

× I'm not really sure if it's a park or not, but I would like to go to Disneyland, umm, once in my life.

✓ I'm not really sure if it's a park, but I would like to visit Disneyland at least once in my life.

Use 'visit' rather than 'go to' for variety and 'at least once' is more natural than 'once in my life'. Remove filler 'umm' for clarity. Keep conditional/future desire form.

× Umm, I have very high expectations of there because of the videos and the photos that I see on online.

✓ I have very high expectations of it because of the videos and photos I see online.

Use 'of it' to refer to Disneyland (preposition + pronoun). 'See on online' is incorrect; use 'see online'. Remove redundant 'the' before 'photos' and filler 'Umm'.

× So I hope it don't disappoint me.

✓ So I hope it doesn't disappoint me.

Subject 'it' requires singular verb 'doesn't' not 'don't' (subject-verb agreement). Keep present simple for hope about future event.