Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more fluent and precise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choices, reduce repetition, and limit to 2–3 supporting sentences. Mention a specific memory and give a brief reason why it was special. Use linking words (for example, “because” or “and”) to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my parents and brothers to a small park near our home, and I remember playing on the swings and having picnics there because it felt safe and fun. Those visits are some of my fondest childhood memories.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and clarity: begin with a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and provide one clear reason or example. Keep it concise and use a linking word to show contrast (e.g., “however” or “but”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but it is difficult at the moment because I live on an island with few public parks. However, whenever I visit my hometown, Córdoba in Argentina, I always meet friends in the parks to relax and chat.

Gợi ý: Be specific and reduce filler words: give one or two clear reasons why more parks are desirable, use natural vocabulary (e.g., “green spaces” not “natural nature”), and link ideas with words like “because” or “so”.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because green spaces help people relax and improve air quality. For example, new parks could provide places for families to exercise and children to play.

Gợi ý: Make the answer more coherent and grammatically correct: state the park or city clearly, give a specific reason or example, and use linking words (e.g., “because” and “so”) to connect ideas. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit the parks in Budapest because I have heard they are beautiful and very green. A friend who lives there often describes the city’s parks, so I hope to visit with her and explore places like City Park and Margaret Island.

× I really enjoyed going to some park with my family and my brothers.

✓ I really enjoyed going to the park with my family and my brothers.

Use of 'some park' is unnatural here; article is needed. Also after 'enjoyed' the -ing form 'going' is correct. Suggestion: use 'the park' to refer to parks in general when speaking about habitual childhood visits.

× It was some incredible recall that I have about my my child and I love it.

✓ It is an incredible memory from my childhood, and I love it.

Original sentence has several problems: 'some incredible recall' is unidiomatic, 'I have about my my child' is incorrect word choice and duplicated 'my'. Use 'memory from my childhood' and present simple 'is' to describe a lasting memory. Also join clauses with 'and'.

× I use going to pass always as I can, but in this moment is maybe difficult because I'm living in a island where there isn't too much parks.

✓ I try to go as often as I can, but at the moment it is difficult because I'm living on an island where there aren't many parks.

Multiple issues: 'use going to pass always' is ungrammatical; use 'try to go as often as I can' to express habit. 'in this moment' should be 'at the moment'. 'a island' requires 'an island'. 'there isn't too much parks' has subject-verb and quantifier errors: 'parks' plural needs 'there aren't' and 'many' not 'much' for countable nouns.

× But of course I love going to parks and always when I, when I am in my country, in Argentina, Cordova, I just go into parks with friends.

✓ But of course I love going to parks, and whenever I am in my country, Argentina (Córdoba), I just go to parks with friends.

Use 'whenever' instead of 'always when I'. Use 'in my country, Argentina, Córdoba' with commas; 'into parks' is incorrect—use 'to parks'. Also place commas for clarity.

× And I think, uh, parks made me feel relaxed and around, uh, trees and, uh, natural nature.

✓ And I think parks make me feel relaxed and surrounded by trees and nature.

Tense and word choice: 'parks made me feel' shifts to past; present simple 'make' fits the general statement. 'around trees' is awkward; use 'surrounded by trees'. 'natural nature' is redundant—use 'nature'.

× I have a friend living there and she always tell me how amazing is and the incredible places it has.

✓ I have a friend living there, and she always tells me how amazing it is and about the incredible places it has.

Subject-verb agreement: 'she always tell' should be 'she always tells'. Clause order: 'how amazing is' should be 'how amazing it is'. Add 'about' before 'the incredible places' for clarity.

× So I would like to know and to have with my friend in that incredible places.

✓ So I would like to visit those incredible places with my friend.

Original is ungrammatical: 'to know and to have with my friend in that incredible places' is unclear. Use 'visit those incredible places with my friend' to express intent. Use 'those' for plural 'places' and correct word order.