Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar; begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and fix tense/number errors (e.g., "there weren't any parks near me"). Use a linking word for clarity.

Ví dụ: Not really. I preferred playing football in the street and video games at home because there weren’t any parks near our village. As a result, I rarely visited green spaces when I was a child.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons. Correct vocabulary (parks, not 'Barks'), fix repetition and word order, and avoid contradictions (saying hope to have time to go to work is odd). Use linking words like 'however' or 'because'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks for walks. However, because I work long shifts as a doctor, I rarely find time to visit them. I hope to make time soon, perhaps by scheduling a weekly walk after work.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and then one specific benefit with a brief explanation. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., 'Who wouldn't?' 'green spaces' 'parks'). Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would — who wouldn't? More parks and green spaces would improve people's wellbeing because seeing greenery reduces anxiety and stress. For example, a small park can provide a quiet place to relax after a busy day.

Gợi ý: Answer clearly and mention one or two specific parks with reasons why you want to visit. Fix grammar ("there are a lot") and reduce fillers ('uh', 'who know'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

Ví dụ: Yes, there are several parks I’d like to visit. For example, I hope to go to Lazar Park and Mansoura Park because they are known for their large lawns and peaceful atmosphere. I would also like to visit national parks in the USA or Switzerland someday to see their famous scenery.

× No, no I didn't because I was spending my time playing football in the street and playing video games on my computer.

✓ No, I didn't, because I spent my time playing football in the street and playing video games on my computer.

The student used past continuous 'was spending' which implies an ongoing action at a specific time; here a simple past 'spent' is more appropriate to describe habitual past activities. Use simple past for completed habitual actions in the past (I spent my time ...). Improve by replacing 'was spending' with 'spent' and add a comma after 'No, I didn't' for clarity.

× Also, there wasn't any parks nearby me because I was living in a village and there is no parks there.

✓ Also, there weren't any parks near me because I lived in a village and there were no parks there.

There are two issues: subject-verb agreement with 'there wasn't any parks' (plural 'parks' needs 'weren't'), and inconsistent tense/use of 'nearby me' (natural phrase is 'near me'). 'I was living' can be simplified to simple past 'I lived' for habitual past. Also 'there is no parks' should be 'there were no parks' (past tense + plural agreement).

× I do, I like going for a walk in open places like Barks.

✓ I do. I like going for walks in open places like parks.

'Barks' is a spelling error for 'parks' and 'going for a walk' used generically is better as plural 'going for walks'. Also separate into two sentences for clarity. Maintain present simple for current habits ('I like').

× But there is a small problem that I don't have any time because I am a doctor now.

✓ But there is a small problem: I don't have any time because I am a doctor now.

Grammar is mostly correct but needs punctuation and a clearer connector. Use a colon to introduce the explanation. 'Any time' is acceptable; no pronoun error besides clarity. This suggestion refines punctuation and clarity.

× So I hope in the near future I can have some time to go to work or to to go to the gym.

✓ So I hope in the near future I can have some time to go to work or to go to the gym.

There is a duplicated 'to' ('to to go') which is an error. Remove the extra 'to'. The rest is correct with modal 'can' expressing ability in the future; present form 'have' after 'can' is correct.

× It is very difficult to now to have a time to go to the park.

✓ It is very difficult now to find the time to go to the park.

The placement of 'now' is awkward and 'have a time' is unnatural; use 'find the time'. Keep present simple 'is' for current situation and reposition 'now' before the verb phrase for natural adverb placement.

× Of course, who doesn't it give comforts and cheerful sensation to see this green color of gardens and barks.

✓ Of course. Who doesn't enjoy the comfort and cheerful feeling of seeing the green of gardens and parks?

Original mixes pronouns and structure incorrectly. 'Who doesn't it give...' is ungrammatical. Use 'Who doesn't enjoy...' Also 'comforts' should be 'comfort' (uncountable) and 'cheerful sensation' is better as 'cheerful feeling'. 'Barks' -> 'parks'. Adjust word choice and sentence structure for natural English.

× It is. I think it is lowering the anxiety and the stress.

✓ I think it lowers anxiety and stress.

'It is.' is unnatural and unnecessary. Use simple present 'lowers' to state a general truth. Drop 'the' before uncountable nouns 'anxiety' and 'stress'. Streamline sentence for clarity.

× Of course there is a lot.

✓ Of course there are a lot (of parks).

'There is a lot' is incorrect before a plural implied noun; use 'there are a lot' when referring to multiple parks. Better: 'Of course, there are a lot (of parks).' Ensure noun 'parks' is explicit where possible.

× I hope I can go to the Lazar Park or Mansoura Bark in the near future.

✓ I hope I can go to Lazar Park or Mansoura Park in the near future.

'The Lazar Park' may be unnecessary unless the park's definite article is part of its name; common usage is without 'the'. 'Bark' is misspelled; use 'Park'. Remove incorrect article unless context requires it.

× Or, uh, why not? I can go to Barks in USA or in Switzerland.

✓ Or, why not? I could go to parks in the USA or in Switzerland.

Use 'could' or 'might' to express possibility rather than 'can' when speculating about the future. 'Barks' should be 'parks' and include the article 'the' before 'USA' is optional but common 'the USA'. Use 'in the USA' and 'in Switzerland'.

× Who know? Who know what will happen in the future, But I hope I can go.

✓ Who knows? Who knows what will happen in the future, but I hope I can go.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Who know' should be 'Who knows' (third person singular). Also lowercase 'but' after the comma. 'I hope I can go' is acceptable; keep simple present 'hope' with 'can' for ability.