Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with correct tense and plurality. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I was very active as a child, so I often went to parks to ride my bike and have picnics with my family. For example, we used to spend Sunday afternoons playing frisbee and sharing snacks on a blanket.

Gợi ý: Improve clarity by correcting grammar and making a clear contrast. Use linking words (however, because) and avoid long, run-on sentences. Provide one concrete example of recent park activity.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do, although not as much as when I was a child. Because I work long hours, I now go to the park mainly to exercise; for instance, I go for a 30-minute run there three times a week and sometimes have a picnic with friends on weekends.

Gợi ý: Correct vocabulary and structure, be specific about the problem and provide a reasoned suggestion. Avoid hesitations and filler words. Use linking words to explain cause and effect.

Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. There are very few parks in my city — probably only one or two — so they are often crowded and far from many neighborhoods. Therefore, building more small parks would make outdoor activities more accessible for residents.

Gợi ý: Organize the answer: name the park, describe specific attractions, and explain why you want to visit. Use correct articles and plurals, and avoid vague phrases like "various activities."

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit a large park in Seoul that has a swimming pool and a small roller coaster for children. I want to go because I enjoy trying new rides and relaxing by the pool, and I think it would be fun to spend a whole day there with friends.

× Yes, I did because I was very active child, so I really love to go to the park and ride some bicycles or having a picnic with my families and some other activities.

✓ Yes, I did because I was a very active child, so I really loved going to the park, riding bicycles, having picnics with my family, and doing other activities.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: the speaker talks about childhood (past) but uses present simple verbs (love, having). Use past tense 'loved' to match 'I did' and 'I was'. Also articles and noun forms: add 'a' before 'very active child' and use 'family' (collective noun) not 'families'. Use parallel gerund forms 'going, riding, having, doing' for a list of activities. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent (past) and use parallel structure for listed activities.

× Yes I do but not like as I was a child but I still really love to go to the park for a walk because I rarely work in a day so I try to go to the park and do some exercises like walking, running and I also enjoy picnics still with my friends.

✓ Yes, I do, but not as much as when I was a child; I still really love going to the park for a walk because I rarely work during the day, so I try to go to the park and do some exercises like walking and running, and I still enjoy picnics with my friends.

This sentence has tense and comparative issues: use 'not as much as when I was a child' for correct comparison and past reference. 'Love to go' is acceptable, but 'love going' is more natural. 'Rarely work in a day' is incorrect — use 'rarely work during the day'. Maintain parallel gerund forms for activities and place adverbs in natural positions ('still' before the verb). Fix punctuation for clarity. Suggestion: Use consistent tense contrast (present vs past) and natural comparative phrasing.

× Yes, for sure, because there's a there's little parts in my city. Actually I think there's only one or two. So I can't go there easily or I couldn't enjoy the park activities a lot. So I think, yeah.

✓ Yes, for sure, because there are very few parks in my city. Actually I think there are only one or two, so I can't get there easily and I can't enjoy park activities very much.

'There's a there's little parts' is incorrect: 'there are' must be used with plural 'parks'. 'Little' is a quantifier for uncountable nouns; use 'few' or 'very few' for countable plural nouns. 'Couldn't' mixes past modal with present context; use present 'can't'. Also simplify 'enjoy the park activities a lot' to 'enjoy park activities very much'. Suggestion: Use appropriate quantifiers for countable nouns ('few'/'a few') and correct subject-verb agreement with 'there are'.

× Yes, there is a park, a big park in Seoul. There is a swimming pool and some other like roller coaster, a small roller coaster for kids.

✓ Yes, there is a big park in Seoul. There is a swimming pool and other attractions, like a small roller coaster for kids.

Repetition 'a park, a big park' is redundant; combine into 'a big park'. 'Some other like roller coaster' is ungrammatical; use 'other attractions, like a small roller coaster'. 'There is' is fine for singular items but must be followed by correct noun phrases. Maintain articles correctly ('a small roller coaster'). Suggestion: Avoid redundancy and use correct noun phrases after 'there is', and use 'other' with a plural or uncountable noun ('other attractions').

× But I want to enjoy that a various activities in the park. So I want to visit there in the future if I could.

✓ But I want to enjoy various activities in the park, so I want to visit it in the future if I can.

'Enjoy that a various activities' is ungrammatical: use 'enjoy various activities' (no article 'a' and 'various' directly modifies plural noun). 'Visit there' is nonstandard — use 'visit it' or 'visit the park'. The conditional 'if I could' doesn't match the intended future possibility; use 'if I can' or 'if I get the chance'. Also use gerund 'enjoy' with object 'various activities'. Suggestion: Use correct adjective-noun order ('various activities'), appropriate pronoun for place ('it' or 'the park'), and a natural conditional ('if I can' or 'if I get the chance').