Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변이 짧고 문법 오류 및 중복이 있습니다. 먼저 주제문으로 명확히 시작한 뒤, 구체적이고 관련된 세부사항(누구와, 어떤 활동을 했는지, 왜 즐거웠는지)을 2~3문장으로 추가하세요. 연결사(so, because, and, then)를 사용해 문장들을 자연스럽게 이어주고, 불필요한 반복은 피하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I could play there with my friends. We often played tag and climbed trees, and sometimes we had picnics with snacks. Those times were fun because everyone was carefree and we could spend the whole afternoon outside.

Gợi ý: 문법과 문장 흐름이 어색합니다. 주제문을 완성형으로 말하고 이유를 명확히 설명하세요. 불분명한 어구는 제거하고, 연결어(because, so, also)를 사용해 이유와 감정을 자연스럽게 잇습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks nowadays because they are peaceful and I often see street cats there. I like watching the cats play and relax on the benches, which makes my visits calming and pleasant.

Gợi ý: 문장이 혼란스럽고 의도 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 먼저 ‘네’로 답하고, 왜 더 많은 공원이 필요한지 구체적으로 설명하세요(예: 녹지 부족, 휴식 공간 필요). 예시(예: Central Park)를 사용할 때는 간결하게 연결해 설명하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we need more green spaces for relaxation and exercise. For example, I wish our city had a large park similar to Central Park where people could walk, picnic, and enjoy nature.

Gợi ý: 의도는 전달되지만 문법과 표현을 다듬어야 합니다. 먼저 목표 공원을 명확히 말한 뒤, 구체적인 이유(분위기, 활동, 시설)를 1~2문장으로 덧붙이세요. 연결어와 자연스러운 표현을 사용하면 더 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: I would like to visit Central Park in the future because it has a relaxed atmosphere and many people enjoy picnics there. I imagine walking on the paths, watching people having lunch, and enjoying the large open lawns.

× Yes, of course, I like playing with my friends and talking about other friends or playing. The park.

✓ Yes, of course, I liked playing with my friends and talking about other children or playing in the park.

The question asks about past preference 'Did you like going to parks as a child?' so the student should use past tense ('liked') to match the time frame. 'Other friends' is repetitive and unclear; 'other children' is more natural. 'The park' is misplaced; it should be 'in the park' as a prepositional phrase. Use consistent past tense verbs and correct preposition placement. Suggested improvement: change verbs to past tense, replace redundant phrase, and place the prepositional phrase next to the verb.

× Yes, I'm like going to park now. Because I love seeing street cat. Enlar Kun.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks now because I love seeing street cats.

The student used 'I'm like' which is incorrect; for habitual present use simple present 'I like'. 'Going to park' needs an article or plural form; 'going to parks' or 'going to the park' is correct. 'Street cat' should be plural 'street cats' if speaking generally. Remove sentence fragments and combine into one sentence for fluency. Suggested improvement: use simple present for habits, correct noun number, and combine clauses.

× Yes, of course. I wish that in my yard there is the I want to see the Central Park, like Central Park, you know that.

✓ Yes, of course. I wish there were a park in my neighborhood; I want to see a park like Central Park.

The original sentence mixes tenses and has word order problems. 'I wish' expressing an unreal present requires the subjunctive 'were' not 'is'. 'In my yard there is the I want' is ungrammatical and redundant. 'The Central Park' is specific; if referring to a similar large park, use 'a park like Central Park' or 'Central Park' without 'the' depending on context. Reorganize into two clear clauses. Suggested improvement: use subjunctive 'were' after 'I wish', remove redundancies, and clarify article use.

× The Central Park is I is what I want to go because people are so relaxed in there and some picnic, some eat sandwiches like that.

✓ Central Park is where I want to go because people are so relaxed there and some have picnics and eat sandwiches.

The phrase 'is I is what I want to go' is ungrammatical; use 'is where I want to go' to indicate destination. 'In there' is redundant; 'there' suffices. 'Some picnic' is incorrect verb/noun usage; use 'some have picnics' or 'some picnic' with correct structure. Maintain subject-verb agreement and use correct verb forms for activities. Suggested improvement: use 'where' for locations, remove extra prepositions, and use appropriate verbs for activities.