Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and pronouns, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words for coherence.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played there with my friends, especially hide-and-seek, and I usually caught them hiding behind trees or in park corners. Because the parks were safe and shaded, we spent whole afternoons playing together.

Gợi ý: Reduce repetition and improve sentence structure. Give one or two specific reasons and link them logically (e.g., 'because' or 'so'). Keep within four sentences maximum.

Ví dụ: Definitely. Even as an adult I go to parks to relax because walking among trees helps me unwind after a busy day at work. For example, sitting on a bench and watching people or reading a book helps me forget stress and recharge.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and use more precise vocabulary. Begin with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons and a brief example or result. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. More parks would benefit residents because green spaces improve air quality and help reduce the urban heat and traffic pollution. For instance, planting trees along streets can lower temperatures and make the city healthier.

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid vague or conflicting descriptions (e.g., 'white park'). Start with one clear park, describe specific features and say why you want to visit, using linking words like 'because' or 'so that'.

Ví dụ: Yes. I want to visit the large tree-filled park near the river because it feels like a small forest with swans and squirrels. Being there would make me feel close to nature and help me relax away from the busy city.

× Yes, when I was young I usually play with my playmates.

✓ Yes, when I was young I usually played with my playmates.

The sentence refers to habitual actions in the past ('when I was young'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Change 'play' to 'played' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: Use past simple for repeated past actions (I usually played).

× I remember when we play the games hide and seek as a seeker I always find my friend who who who was hide him himself behind a trail or in some corners it's.

✓ I remember when we played the game hide-and-seek. As the seeker, I always found my friends hiding behind a tree or in some corners.

Multiple issues: the main clause refers to past memories so verbs should be past simple ('played', 'found'). The noun 'game' should be singular for the activity. 'Hide and seek' is written as 'hide-and-seek'. 'Was hide him himself' is ungrammatical: use the present participle 'hiding' to describe location, and plural 'friends' if referring to more than one. 'Trail' is likely intended as 'tree'. Also split the run-on sentence into clearer sentences. Suggestion: Use past simple and correct participle forms and nouns for clarity.

× Definitely, even now I am a grown up, I still like going to the park because park in the park I can free myself and unwind after a busy day.

✓ Definitely. Even now I am a grown-up, and I still like going to the park because there I can free myself and unwind after a busy day.

The clause describes current habitual action, so present simple 'like' is fine, but the original has word order and article issues: missing article 'the' before 'park' and awkward repetition. Use 'there' to refer to the park location. Add hyphen in 'grown-up' and join clauses with 'and' or split into sentences for clarity.

× It's a way to relax my stress from the work and the study.

✓ It's a way to relieve my stress from work and study.

Use the verb 'relieve' rather than 'relax' for stress. Omit unnecessary definite articles: 'work' and 'study' are uncountable here so do not need 'the'. 'From' can be kept but often 'from work and study' is idiomatic. Suggestion: Use 'relieve' and remove 'the'.

× Definitely I want more parks in my city because green places as nowadays important to residents in the city and the parks with a lot of trees can improve the air quality and reduce the effect of traffic.

✓ Definitely. I want more parks in my city because green spaces are important to residents nowadays, and parks with many trees can improve air quality and reduce the effects of traffic.

'Green places' is better as 'green spaces'. 'As nowadays important' is ungrammatical: use 'are important ... nowadays'. Use plural agreement: 'parks with many trees' and 'effects of traffic' is more natural. Remove redundant 'in the city'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and select appropriate plural forms.

× Yes, there is a quite a good, beautiful and white park in my city and a park with a lot of trees like a forest and a lot of small animals like Swans and squirrels, which makes me feel I'm so close to the nature.

✓ Yes, there is a quite good, beautiful, and peaceful park in my city, and a park with a lot of trees like a forest with many small animals such as swans and squirrels, which makes me feel so close to nature.

Multiple issues: redundant 'a quite a' should be 'quite a' or 'a quite' is wrong—use 'quite good' or 'quite a good'. 'White' is odd to describe a park; 'peaceful' or 'clean' may be intended. Capitalization: 'Swans' should be 'swans'. Use 'such as' instead of repeating 'like'. 'Close to the nature' should be 'close to nature' (no 'the'). Also improve punctuation and parallel structure. Suggestion: Choose appropriate adjectives, correct article placement, and remove unnecessary 'the' before uncountable nouns like 'nature'.