Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence about liking parks as a child, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid irrelevant references to current work or awkward phrases; use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'soft grass' instead of 'cream grass'). Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use a linking word if adding a detail.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often spent evenings there playing tag with friends and walking barefoot on the soft grass, which made me feel relaxed and happy.

Gợi ý: Give a focused answer: state clearly that you still like parks, then provide one specific reason and an example. Remove unclear or repetitive phrases (e.g. 'apart from that and the childhood'). Use one linking word like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas, and keep sentences short and grammatical.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax after a busy day. For example, last Sunday I walked for half an hour there and felt much more productive the next morning.

Gợi ý: Be clear and structured: give a concise opinion (yes/no), then a specific reason and one consequence. Avoid filler words ('uh') and redundant phrasing. Use precise vocabulary like 'deforestation' and explain the effect briefly in one sentence using a linking word such as 'because' or 'so'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because deforestation has reduced green spaces. As a result, air quality has worsened and people have fewer places to relax.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and give one or two specific details about the park that explain your interest. Remove hesitations and repeated phrases. Mention the park name once, then add a concrete reason (e.g. unique activities, special attractions) and, if possible, a short example of an activity.

Ví dụ: Yes, there is a large park in Secunderabad that I want to visit. It is popular for its playgrounds and themed activity zones for children, so I would like to go there with my niece to try the obstacle course.

× Yes actually I love going to parks.

✓ Yes, actually I loved going to parks.

The question asks about childhood habits (past), so the verb should be in the past tense. Change 'love' (present) to 'loved' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Use past simple for habits in the past (I loved going to parks).

× I enjoy whenever there is I find easier time or during the evening hours after finishing my work I usually go for a walk in the park and I feel so refreshed and relaxed by walking barefoot and the cream grass.

✓ I enjoyed going to the park in the evenings after finishing my work; I usually went for a walk and felt refreshed and relaxed walking barefoot on the grass.

The original sentence is run-on and mixes tenses and fragments ('whenever there is I find easier time' and 'the cream grass' are incorrect). For past habit, use past tense ('enjoyed', 'went', 'felt'). Also correct word choice: 'on the grass' not 'the cream grass', and 'walking barefoot on the grass' is clearer. Suggestion: Break long sentences into clauses and maintain consistent past tense for childhood routines.

× Yes, of course, still today I love going to parks and I enjoy and I feel when I come back from the park I feel very relaxed and refreshed and also more productive for my next day work schedule.

✓ Yes, of course. Even today I love going to parks; when I come back from the park I feel very relaxed, refreshed, and more productive for the next day's work.

Maintain consistent present tense for current habits ('love', 'come back', 'feel'). Remove redundant phrases ('I enjoy and I feel') and use possessive day form 'next day's work'. Suggestion: Use concise clauses and proper noun forms (next day -> next day's).

× Apart from that and the childhood I usually used to go up to the past one Sunday.

✓ Aside from my childhood routine, I used to go to the park on Sundays in the past.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear ('go up to the past one Sunday'). Use 'used to' for past habitual actions and specify frequency/time correctly ('on Sundays' or 'on one particular Sunday'). Suggestion: Say 'I used to go to the park on Sundays' for habitual past actions.

× Definitely I, in the future, I want to see more and more parks, uh, in the society, uh, because uh, and nowadays people are, uh, cutting the trees and there's a deforestation which is causing more pollution and people are unable, they're not able to find space for.

✓ Definitely, in the future I would like to see more parks in our community because people are cutting down trees and deforestation is causing more pollution, so people are finding it harder to find green spaces.

The original mixes hesitations and incorrect phrases ('there's a deforestation', 'people are unable, they're not able to find space for'). Use 'deforestation' without 'a', and 'cutting down trees'. Use future preference 'would like' or 'want' consistently. Suggestion: Remove fillers and use clear cause-effect clauses.

× Yes, recently I got to know that there is a huge park in the Secunderabad, uh, which is very popular among, uh, which is very popular in my city.

✓ Yes, recently I learned that there is a huge park in Secunderabad that is very popular in my city.

Phrase 'got to know' is informal; 'learned' is better. Remove extra commas and repeated 'which is very popular'. Also 'in the Secunderabad' should be 'in Secunderabad' (no 'the'). Suggestion: Use 'there is' correctly and avoid redundant clauses.

× And in the future, I will definitely visit the park because it has some unique activities, uh, for kids.

✓ In the future, I will definitely visit the park because it has some unique activities for children.

Minor: remove filler 'uh' and use 'children' or 'kids' consistently. 'Will definitely visit' is fine for future intention. Suggestion: Keep sentences concise and avoid fillers.