Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence saying you enjoyed parks as a child, then give two specific supporting reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'behaving with' and 'such a things').

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they were great places to make friends and try new activities. For example, I often planted flowers with my parents and watched insects closely, which taught me about nature and responsibility.

Gợi ý: Clarify and correct grammar and vocabulary. Give one clear reason with a linked supporting detail. Remove unclear phrases (e.g., 'listening to the bears songs') and filler words ('you know').

Ví dụ: The parks are different now, but I still like going to relax and read. For instance, I often sit under a tree to read because the quiet birdsong helps me concentrate.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with a clear opinion and give one specific reason using linking words. Avoid hesitations and incorrect word choices ('Departedly', 'underground'). Use correct collocations like 'available space'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because green spaces improve residents' wellbeing. However, it is difficult since there is limited available land for new parks in the urban area.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park, then give two concise, specific reasons linked with connectors. Avoid repetition and wordiness (e.g., 'renowned and famous', 'a lot').

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York because it is very spacious and popular for outdoor activities. For example, many people jog there, and I would like to try running along its paths and enjoy the scenery.

× In my opinion, going to park is very useful for children, so I prefer to go to parks because I can find a lot of friends, I can experience a lot of new things like planting flowers or behaving with other animals or insects and such a things.

✓ In my opinion, going to the park is very useful for children, so I prefer to go to parks because I can find a lot of friends, I can experience a lot of new things like planting flowers or interacting with animals or insects and such things.

Errors: missing definite article before singular countable noun 'park' and incorrect plural form 'a things'. Use 'the park' when speaking about parks in general as an activity setting; 'park' as a singular countable noun requires an article. Replace 'behaving with other animals' with 'interacting with animals' for natural collocation. Remove 'a' before 'things' and use correct plural 'things'. Suggestion: use 'the park' for general activities and ensure articles match countable nouns; check noun collocations (interact with).

× Today the atmosphere of the parks is really different with the previous ones when I were a child, but nowadays I prefer to go park to chill out and read books because you know, listening to the bears songs can make you concentrate on your voice.

✓ Today the atmosphere of the parks is really different from before when I was a child, but nowadays I prefer to go to the park to chill out and read books because, you know, listening to the birds' songs can help you concentrate on their sounds.

Errors: 'different with' should be 'different from' (incorrect preposition), 'previous ones' awkward - use 'before', 'I were' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and tense (should be 'I was'), missing preposition 'to' in 'go park', plural possessive 'bears songs' is wrong: likely 'birds' songs' and needs possessive apostrophe. Also 'make you concentrate on your voice' is unclear; use 'help you concentrate on their sounds'. Suggestions: use correct prepositions ('different from'), correct past tense 'was', include 'to' after 'go', and use correct possessive forms for nouns like 'birds' songs'.

× Departedly, I would like to have more parks in my city, but uh underground it is not possible because there is no uh free spaces for uh developing parks and establishing new ones.

✓ Frankly, I would like to have more parks in my city, but underground it is not possible because there are no free spaces for developing and establishing new parks.

Errors: 'Departedly' is nonstandard; use 'Frankly' or 'Unfortunately'. 'There is no free spaces' is subject-verb agreement and quantifier error: with plural 'spaces' use 'there are no'. 'Developing parks and establishing new ones' is repetitive; simplify to 'developing and establishing new parks'. Suggestions: choose appropriate discourse marker, ensure subjects and verbs agree ('there are'), and avoid redundant phrasing.

× One of the renowned and famous parks that I would like to go in the future is the Central Park of New York, because I heard about it a lot and it is very spacious and a lot of people go there for jogging and running, and I would like to run there.

✓ One of the renowned parks that I would like to visit in the future is Central Park in New York, because I have heard a lot about it and it is very spacious; many people go there to jog and run, and I would like to run there.

Errors: 'would like to go in the future' is non-idiomatic; use 'visit in the future' or 'go in the future'. 'Central Park of New York' is better as 'Central Park in New York'. 'I heard about it a lot' should use present perfect 'I have heard a lot about it' to link past experience to present. 'A lot of people' is informal; 'many people' preferred. 'Go there for jogging and running' is awkward—use 'go there to jog and run'. Suggestions: use idiomatic verbs (visit), correct prepositions ('in New York'), present perfect when appropriate, and appropriate verb forms for activities ('to jog').