Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more fluent and correct minor grammar/word choices, avoid repetition, and make the response more concise with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use linking words and specific details (for example, ages, activities, or who you went with).

Ví dụ: Yes, I did. I used to go to the park every day after school with my family. We often played on the swings and went down the slides, and I especially enjoyed playing tag with my younger cousins, which made those afternoons very fun.

Gợi ý: Clarify and correct vague or unclear phrases, avoid filler words, and organize the answer: give a direct statement, then reasons with linking words. Mention specific times or conditions when you go or don't go to parks.

Ví dụ: I still like parks, but I rarely go because the weather in Thailand is very hot, especially in summer. For example, I usually avoid daytime visits and only go early in the morning or in the evening when it is cooler.

Gợi ý: Avoid overly negative or vague language; be more diplomatic and give balanced reasons. Start with a clear direct answer, then provide specific problems and, if possible, a constructive suggestion about what you would like to see improved.

Ví dụ: Not really. There are few parks in my city, and those that exist are often crowded and sometimes poorly maintained, which makes them feel unsafe. I would prefer more well-lit, clean parks with regular maintenance and security so families could use them comfortably.

Gợi ý: Be concise and avoid repetition; give a clear reason and specific examples of what appeals to you. Mention particular parks or features (e.g., large lawns, ponds, walking paths) to make your answer more vivid and credible.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would love to visit parks in England, such as Hyde Park in London. From what I’ve seen, they have spacious lawns, peaceful walking paths and ponds, and a calm atmosphere in cooler weather, which I find very appealing.

× Well, I used to go to the park every day when after school with my family.

✓ Well, I used to go to the park every day after school with my family.

The phrase 'when after school' is redundant and ungrammatical. Remove 'when' so the time expression reads 'after school'. This keeps the past habitual meaning expressed by 'used to'.

× I love playing in the park, like riding down those slides and swinging those swings.

✓ I loved playing in the park, like going down the slides and swinging on the swings.

The examiner asked about childhood, so past tense should be used: 'loved' not 'love'. Also use natural collocations: 'going down the slides' and 'swinging on the swings' are more idiomatic than 'riding down' or 'swinging those swings'.

× I do but when it comes to the weather in Thailand, like it is really hot like especially in summer I don't really like to go outside due to those UE and and now I am currently in high school.

✓ I do, but when it comes to the weather in Thailand it is really hot, especially in summer, so I don't like to go outside. Also, I am currently in high school.

Multiple issues: unnecessary filler 'like' removed; punctuation and clause linking improved with commas and 'so' to show result; 'don't really like' simplified to 'don't like' for clarity; unclear phrase 'due to those UE' removed because it's not grammatical or unclear. Split into two sentences to improve structure and clarity and keep present tense for current preference and state ('I am currently in high school').

× No I don't. In my city there isn't really many parks in there and most of them were are crowded with homeless and sometimes with those Alcoholics so I don't think it's really safe to go to.

✓ No, I don't. In my city there aren't really many parks, and most of them are crowded with homeless people and sometimes with alcoholics, so I don't think it's really safe to go to them.

Subject-verb agreement and 'there be' usage: use 'there aren't' with plural 'many parks'. Remove redundant 'in there'. Use 'are' (present) not 'were are'. Use 'homeless people' (count noun) and lowercase 'alcoholics'. Add 'them' to complete the prepositional object. Punctuation added for clarity.

× That's why I don't really hang out in parks anymore.

✓ That's why I don't hang out in parks anymore.

No tense change required, but 'really' is a filler; remove it for conciseness. Present simple expresses habitual current behavior correctly.

× Yes, I do I I really want to spend my time in the park in England because on social media when I spoke TikTok, I saw lots of parks like where there are crowded people, but there weren't many homeless or anything.

✓ Yes, I do. I really want to spend time in parks in England because on social media, especially TikTok, I saw many parks that were busy with people but didn't have many homeless people.

Fix run-on sentence by splitting and adding punctuation. 'Spend my time' -> 'spend time' is more natural. 'When I spoke TikTok' is incorrect; use 'on TikTok' or 'especially TikTok'. Use consistent past tense 'saw' and past description 'were busy' and 'didn't have' to describe observations. 'Crowded people' -> 'busy with people'.

× And it is just like those chilly vibes, chill, chilling vibes there.

✓ And it just has those chilly, relaxed vibes there.

Avoid repetitive fillers 'chill, chilling'. Use 'chilly, relaxed vibes' for natural adjective ordering and clearer meaning. 'It is just like' simplified to 'it just has' for fluency.