Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and add one or two specific supporting details in coherent order. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example") and correct small grammar errors (e.g., tense and word order). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they had lush greenery and fresh air. For example, I would play under big trees and enjoy the cool breeze every afternoon. Those visits helped me relax and feel close to nature.

Gợi ý: Respond directly and correct vocabulary errors (e.g., "fresh beer" -> "fresh air"). Combine short fragments into coherent sentences and give a specific reason or example. Use linking words like "but" or "however" to show contrast.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they offer fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere. However, in my city beautiful parks are quite rare, so I visit them only when I can find one. When I do, I like to walk and relax for an hour.

Gợi ý: Make a concise direct response, avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use accurate vocabulary ("parks" not "parking"), explain one clear reason, and suggest a realistic action using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because rapid urbanization has reduced green spaces. Therefore, the government should protect public land and build new parks in densely populated neighbourhoods.

Gợi ý: Answer the question directly with a specific future plan or preference (name a type of park or feature). Avoid repeated calls to government and unclear phrases. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so that") and provide one specific reason why you would like to visit such parks.

Ví dụ: Yes, in the future I would like to visit a large botanical garden or riverside park because it would offer peaceful walking paths and diverse plants. I hope the city creates more such parks so families can relax and the local ecology can improve.

× I would go to the parks I would enjoy going to parks every day, lush greenery, you know, the breeze, uh, fresh air really I enjoy uh, going to the park when I was tamed metro city the.

✓ I used to go to parks and enjoyed them every day: the lush greenery, the breeze, and the fresh air. I really enjoyed going to the park when I was in my hometown in the metro city.

The original contains run-on fragments, incorrect word order and unclear phrases ('tamed metro city the'). This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Fix by splitting into clear sentences, using 'used to' for past habitual action, adding articles ('the breeze'), and correcting word order to 'in my hometown in the metro city' or 'in the metro city where I grew up'. Suggestion: Break long fragments into complete sentences, use 'used to' + base verb for past habits, and place modifiers near the nouns they describe.

× I enjoy being in parks. Really. I enjoy the fresh beer. In metro city we find the lot of policing going to the past. We can have fresh air. In metro cities we hardly find beautiful parts very rare.

✓ I enjoy being in parks. I enjoy the fresh air. In the metro city we find few parks because of heavy development. Parks are rare in large cities.

Multiple present-tense and word-choice problems (ID 6). 'Fresh beer' is incorrect word choice; intended 'fresh air'. 'We find the lot of policing going to the past' is unclear; likely means 'we find few parks due to development' or 'parks are rare'. Correct by using simple present statements and count/quantifier corrections: 'few parks' and 'parks are rare in large cities.' Suggestion: Use simple present for general truths, choose correct nouns ('air' not 'beer'), and use quantifiers 'few' for scarcity.

× I'd love to see more parking directly due to urbanization, the one of Pakistan being encroached by the encroached by the land grabbers.

✓ I'd love to see more parks, but due to urbanization in Pakistan much land has been encroached on by land grabbers.

Preposition and word-choice errors (ID 11). 'Parking' should be 'parks'. 'Encroached by the encroached by' is repetitive and missing correct preposition; use 'encroached on by'. Also 'the one of Pakistan' is incorrect; use 'in Pakistan'. Suggestion: Use correct nouns ('parks'), avoid repetition, and use 'encroached on by' for passive of 'encroach on'.

× So we hardly find these paths into this metal especially in metro city.

✓ So we hardly find these parks in the city, especially in metro areas.

Incorrect vocabulary and sentence structure (ID 26). 'Paths into this metal' is meaningless; intended 'parks' and 'metro city' meaning 'metro areas'. Rearranged to a clear subject-verb-object structure: 'we hardly find these parks in the city, especially in metro areas.' Suggestion: Keep subject and verb close and use the correct noun ('parks') and plural form for general areas ('metro areas').

× So by all is the government to have to develop main.

✓ So the government needs to develop more parks.

Pronoun/staructure misuse and awkward phrasing (ID 12). Original is ungrammatical; simplified to clear subject and modal/necessity expression: 'the government needs to develop more parks.' Suggestion: Use 'needs to' or 'should' to express obligation and place the subject 'the government' before the verb.

× I wanted to go in the park, so I urge the government to establish the most number of paths around the city so that it, it works as good luck, stay through people.

✓ I want to go to parks in the future, so I urge the government to establish as many parks as possible around the city so that they can benefit people.

Mixed tense and wrong quantifier and pronoun usage (ID 5). 'I wanted' uses past tense while context asks about future; use present/future 'I want' or 'I would like'. 'Most number of paths' should be 'as many parks as possible'. Pronoun 'it, it works as good luck, stay through people' is unclear; corrected to 'they can benefit people.' Suggestion: Match tense to question (future or present desire), use quantifier 'as many ... as possible', and use plural pronouns to agree with plural noun 'parks'.

× It gives me, uh, balance the ecological system. I urge the government to establish more number.

✓ They help balance the ecosystem. I urge the government to establish more parks.

Preposition and noun choice errors (ID 11). 'Gives me balance the ecological system' is ungrammatical; better: 'help balance the ecosystem'. 'Establish more number' should be 'establish more parks.' Suggestion: Use correct verb phrases ('help balance') and pair 'establish' with the noun 'parks' rather than 'number'.