Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Reduce repetition, correct grammar, and make sentences more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like "uh" and repeated words.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my grandfather, which helped me relax after school and gave me a chance to listen to his inspiring life stories. I still remember those conversations fondly.

Gợi ý: Correct grammar (singular/plural and tense), remove redundancy, and structure answer with topic sentence plus 1–2 specific reasons linked clearly. Use linking words like "however" or "now" to show change.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. However, my reasons have changed: now I visit parks mainly to meet people and relax after a hectic workday, rather than to spend time with my grandfather.

Gợi ý: Use clearer, more concise sentences and fix grammar (articles, plurals, and word order). Provide one or two specific benefits with linking words. Avoid hesitations like "umm."

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they help residents socialize and reduce loneliness. In addition, parks provide safe places for exercise and outdoor activities, which improves public health.

Gợi ý: Be specific and finish your thought. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park, then give concrete reasons (features, activities) using linking words. Eliminate hesitations and correct vocabulary (e.g., "spaciousness" not "wideness").

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit Gunnanakpat Park in Chandigarh, which my grandparents often praised. They described it as very spacious and beautiful, with wide lawns and walking paths where people can meet and relax.

× it not only helped me to unwind myself from my school schedule, but but also allowed me to spend up sufficient quality time with my grandfather to listen his uplifting life lessons stories

✓ it not only helped me to unwind from my school schedule, but also allowed me to spend sufficient quality time with my grandfather to listen to his uplifting life-lesson stories

Uses incorrect verb forms and extra reflexive 'myself' and wrong verb + preposition. 'Unwind' does not need 'myself' after it. 'Spend up' is incorrect; use 'spend'. 'Listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. 'Life lessons' is better hyphenated as 'life-lesson' when used attributively and 'stories' should follow correctly. Remove duplicate 'but'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary reflexive pronouns, use correct verb-preposition collocations (listen to, spend time), and avoid duplicate words.

× my routines has frequently changed

✓ my routine has frequently changed

Subject-verb agreement error: 'routines' (plural) with 'has' (singular) is inconsistent. Context implies a singular habitual pattern 'routine'. Either make both plural ('my routines have') or singular 'my routine has'. Suggestion: choose the intended number and match the verb accordingly.

× I used to visit back to spend quality time with my grandfather

✓ I used to visit to spend quality time with my grandfather

Redundant use of 'back' with 'used to visit' is unnecessary and awkward. 'Used to' already indicates past habitual action; 'visit back' is incorrect here. Suggestion: remove redundant adverbs and use 'used to visit' or 'used to go' followed by purpose.

× But now my motive is just to visit park, to connect with the people, to have some conversation, just to unwind myself from my hectic work schedule

✓ But now my motive is just to visit the park, to connect with people, to have conversations, and to unwind from my hectic work schedule

Errors: missing article 'the' before 'park'; unnecessary 'the' before 'people' and 'myself' is unnecessary after 'unwind'. Use plural 'conversations' or 'have a conversation' for natural phrasing. Combine items with 'and' for clarity. Suggestions: use correct articles, avoid unnecessary reflexive pronouns, and maintain parallel structure in lists.

× I still like to visit Pak, but my routines has frequently changed

✓ I still like to visit parks, but my routine has frequently changed

Likely 'Pak' is a typo for 'parks' or 'the park'. Original uses a proper noun incorrectly and inconsistent article usage. 'Visit parks' (plural) fits the context of liking parks generally. Also fixes subject-verb agreement as above. Suggestion: check for typos and use plural/singular consistently with verb choice.

× I would like to see more parks in my city in upcoming future because I feel having more parks in in any city allow resident to connect with people socially thereby reducing social isolation problem

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city in the upcoming future because I feel having more parks in any city allows residents to connect with people socially, thereby reducing the problem of social isolation

Errors: missing article 'the' before 'upcoming future' (use 'the upcoming future' or better 'the future'); double 'in in' typo; subject-verb agreement 'allow' should be 'allows' because 'having more parks' is singular concept; 'resident' should be plural 'residents'; missing articles before 'problem'. Suggestions: fix typos, ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct pluralization for people, and add necessary articles.

× But also umm the these parts act as a recreational places where people can enjoy perform physical activities

✓ They also act as recreational places where people can enjoy performing physical activities

Sentence has extra filler words and duplicated words ('the these parts'), article-number mismatch ('a recreational places' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'places'), and parallelism error 'enjoy perform' should be 'enjoy performing'. Suggestion: remove fillers, correct articles to match number, and use gerund after 'enjoy'.

× there are a lot of parks in our country where I would like to visit in future whenever I get a leisure time

✓ there are a lot of parks in our country where I would like to visit in the future whenever I get some leisure time

Missing article 'the' before 'future' and 'a leisure time' is unnatural; use 'some leisure time'. Tense is acceptable but phrase corrections improve naturalness. Suggestion: use 'in the future' and 'some leisure time'.

× But one of the most popular park, uh, I heard from my grandparents is Gunnanakpat

✓ But one of the most popular parks I heard about from my grandparents is Gunnanakpat

Article-number mismatch: 'one of the most popular park' should be 'one of the most popular parks'. Also use 'heard about from' to indicate source of information. Suggestion: ensure plural after 'one of the' and use correct verb-preposition collocations.

× I heard a lot about its beauty, about its, uh, uh, wideness and people can connect easily over there

✓ I heard a lot about its beauty and spaciousness, and that people can connect easily there

'Wideness' is an uncommon noun; use 'spaciousness'. 'Over there' is informal and redundant after 'there'. Also punctuation and conjunction use makes sentence run-on. Suggestion: choose appropriate nouns and smooth connectors; break into clearer clauses.