Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., because, so). Watch pronunciation and reduce hesitations.

Ví dụ: I didn’t enjoy going to parks as a child because I was very sensitive to noise and crowds. Therefore, I preferred staying indoors where I could read or play games quietly.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and mention one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct grammar for relationships (e.g., ‘take my nieces and nephews’ not ‘text’).

Ví dụ: I enjoy going to parks more now than when I was a child because I often take my nieces and nephews there and I love watching them play freely. Seeing them socialise and have fun in the open air makes the visit very rewarding for me.

Gợi ý: Clarify the main point and avoid unclear phrases. Use a topic sentence, then give specific benefits with correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘green, open spaces’ and ‘develop physically and mentally’). Remove unclear words like ‘Sophie’ unless necessary.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like more parks, especially green, open spaces rather than small enclosed areas. Green parks encourage physical exercise, reduce stress, and provide opportunities for people, especially children, to socialise and stay healthy.

Gợi ý: Make your answer clearer and more specific: name a park or type of scenery, explain why you want to visit using coherent reasons, and avoid vague or incorrect words. Use one or two supporting details and correct word choices (e.g., ‘wildlife’, ‘landscape’).

Ví dụ: I would love to visit Yellowstone National Park in the United States because I enjoy watching nature documentaries about geysers and wildlife. I’m especially interested in seeing the dramatic landscapes and animals I’ve seen on National Geographic.

× Honestly I didn't like much going to parks when I was small because I was a highly sensitive child.

✓ Honestly I didn't like going to parks much when I was small because I was a highly sensitive child.

The adverb 'much' is misplaced. In past-tense negative sentences, 'much' typically comes after the main verb phrase ('like') or at the end: 'didn't like going to parks much.' Move 'much' to after 'going to parks' to form a natural negative past-tense expression. Suggestion: Place adverbs of degree (much) after the verb phrase in negative past-tense sentences.

× So like overcrowding, overcrowded and over stimulating place a little a little bit too much to me.

✓ So overcrowded and overstimulating places felt a little too much for me.

The original has redundant words and incorrect word forms ('over stimulating' should be one word 'overstimulating'), wrong noun forms ('place' vs plural 'places'), and awkward order. Rewriting into a clear clause with past-tense verb 'felt' matches the context. Suggestion: Use correct compound adjectives and pluralize when speaking generally.

× I prefer staying indoors, either reading books or playing games.

✓ I prefer staying indoors, either reading books or playing games.

Sentence is grammatically correct. Preference verb 'prefer' followed by a gerund phrase is appropriate in present tense. No change needed.

× I even enjoy more going to the park now rather than when I was small because I often text my niece and nephews to the park and I could see how happy and joyful and playful they are playing around in open space with other with other kids really.

✓ I even enjoy going to the park more now than when I was small because I often take my nieces and nephews to the park and I can see how happy, joyful and playful they are playing in the open space with other kids.

Multiple issues: word order for 'enjoy going to the park more' is more natural; 'text my niece and nephews to the park' is incorrect — likely 'take my nieces and nephews'; plural forms and possessive errors: 'nieces and nephews' and 'take' fits meaning. Use 'can' instead of 'could' when describing a habitual present observation. Remove duplicated phrase 'with other'. Use commas to separate adjectives. Suggestion: Use correct verb for transporting children ('take'), correct plural forms, and present tense 'can' for current habitual abilities.

× Of course, but I would prefer green and open spaces than Sophie gets the close building because like the natural green environment helps them to develop physically, mentally, connectively and stay healthy.

✓ Of course, but I would prefer green and open spaces rather than close buildings because the natural green environment helps people develop physically, mentally and socially and stay healthy.

Several errors: comparative structure uses 'rather than' not 'prefer... than'; 'Sophie gets the close building' is nonsensical — likely mis-speech; use plural 'buildings' and a general subject 'people' instead of 'them'. 'Connectively' is incorrect; 'socially' is appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'prefer X rather than Y', replace unclear proper name fragment, and use correct adverb 'socially'.

× I would like to go to a National Park in the United States as I watch the series on the National Geographic Channel and I love how white and natural and are very alive with standing Lance.

✓ I would like to go to a national park in the United States because I watch series on the National Geographic Channel and I love how wild and natural they are and how alive the landscapes look.

Problems include article/capitalization ('a National Park' -> 'a national park' is fine but 'National Park' is generic), tense and conjunction choice ('as' -> 'because' to explain reason), subject agreement ('are' needs a clear plural subject 'they' referring to parks or landscapes), and unclear adjectives ('white' and 'standing Lance' make no sense). 'White' likely misheard; replacing with 'wild' and 'landscapes' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Use 'because' for reason, ensure subject agreement, and choose appropriate adjectives like 'wild', 'natural' and 'landscapes'.