Part 1
Giám khảo
Did you like going to parks as a child?
Thí sinh
I went to parks with family or friends. I quite often went to parks because I loved play with. Playground equipment.
Giám khảo
Do you still like going to parks now?
Thí sinh
Yes, I still like going to parks. Now I go to refreshing and relaxing. Also my daughter love parks. I often go parks with my daughter.
Giám khảo
Would you like to see more parks in your city?
Thí sinh
Yes, I would like to see more parks. Now there is large park about 20 minutes walk near my house. So I want park near my house.
Giám khảo
Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?
Thí sinh
Yes, I want to go to parks in the future. It is in mountain top and they they they have nice view. And refreshing air.
Did you like going to parks as a child?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 回答は基本的に理解できるが、文法と語順の誤り、冗長な表現があるため改善が必要です。簡潔なトピック文(Yes/No+理由)を使い、続けて具体例を1つ加えると良いです。例えば過去形の扱い(I loved playing on the playground equipment)や冠詞の使用(the playground equipment)に注意してください。発話は最大5文に収め、接続詞(because, so, for example)で流れを整えましょう。
Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks with my family and friends when I was a child because I enjoyed playing on the playground equipment. For example, I used to spend hours on the swings and slides, which made me very happy.
Do you still like going to parks now?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: 内容は伝わるが、文法(現在形・三人称単数のs、前置詞の使い方)と語順の改善が必要です。自然な表現で理由と頻度を述べ、接続語(because, so, also)を使って文をつなぎましょう。簡潔にまとめ、詳細(誰と、どれくらいの頻度)を具体的に述べると効果的です。
Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and refresh my mind. I often go with my daughter, and we usually visit the park two or three times a week to play and walk together.
Would you like to see more parks in your city?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 返答はシンプルだが、不自然な語順と冠詞や前置詞の誤りがあります(a large park, a 20-minute walk)。理由をもう少し具体的に述べ、接続語で説明をつなげると説得力が増します。例えば利便性や健康面の理由を添えると良いです。
Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they promote community health and provide places for exercise. For example, although there is a large park about a 20-minute walk from my house, I would prefer a smaller park closer to my home for daily walks.
Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答は意図が分かるが、文法、語彙の選択と冗長さ(重複した語)を直す必要があります。単数・複数の一致(a park / it, they)に注意し、具体的な場所の説明や理由(view, fresh air)を一つのまとまった文で述べましょう。接続語(because, with)を使うと流れが自然になります。
Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit a mountain-top park in the future because it offers stunning views and fresh air. I imagine hiking up to the summit and enjoying a picnic while looking over the valley.
× I went to parks with family or friends.
✓ I used to go to parks with my family or friends.
The student uses simple past 'I went' which is grammatically correct but 'Did you like going to parks as a child?' asks about habitual past action; 'used to' or 'would' better expresses habitual past. Also add the possessive 'my' before 'family' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits and include possessive determiners.
× I quite often went to parks because I loved play with.
✓ I quite often went to parks because I loved playing there.
After verbs like 'love' when referring to activities, the -ing form is required: 'loved playing'. The original ends with 'play with' which is incomplete and missing an object; 'playing there' or 'playing with friends' completes the thought. Also keep past tense 'loved' to match 'went'.
× Playground equipment.
✓ There were many playground equipment pieces.
A single fragment 'Playground equipment.' is not a complete sentence (no verb). To correct, make a full clause. Note 'equipment' is uncountable, so 'many pieces of playground equipment' or 'a lot of playground equipment' is preferable. Use past tense 'were' to match the context.
× Yes, I still like going to parks. Now I go to refreshing and relaxing.
✓ Yes, I still like going to parks. Now I go there to refresh and relax.
The phrase 'go to refreshing and relaxing' is ungrammatical. Use infinitives 'to refresh and relax' to express purpose. Also include a locative reference 'there' or 'to the park'. Maintain present simple for current habitual actions.
× Also my daughter love parks.
✓ Also my daughter loves parks.
Subject-verb agreement error: 'daughter' is third person singular, so the verb requires an -s: 'loves'. Keep present simple for general preference.
× I often go parks with my daughter.
✓ I often go to parks with my daughter.
Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' when indicating destination. Use 'go to parks'. This is a common collocation: 'go to' + place.
× Now there is large park about 20 minutes walk near my house.
✓ Now there is a large park about a 20-minute walk from my house.
Article missing: use 'a large park'. Also use the idiomatic expression 'a 20-minute walk from my house' (hyphenate '20-minute' as a compound adjective). The preposition should be 'from' rather than placing 'near' awkwardly.
× So I want park near my house.
✓ So I want a park near my house.
Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'park'. Also it's clearer to say 'I want a park near my house' to express desire for an additional park or one closer. Maintain present simple for preference.
× Yes, I want to go to parks in the future.
✓ Yes, I want to go to a park in the future.
The sentence is understandable but more natural to specify 'a park' if referring to a particular visit; 'go to parks' suggests multiple unspecified parks. For a future single visit, use 'a park' or 'the park'. The verb 'want' in present simple expresses future desire; alternatively 'I would like to visit a park in the future.'
× It is in mountain top and they they they have nice view.
✓ It is on the mountain top and it has a nice view.
Use preposition 'on' with 'mountain top' and include the article: 'on the mountain top'. The pronoun repetition 'they they they' is incorrect; the park (singular) requires 'it' and the verb 'has' for possession: 'it has a nice view.' Keep tense consistent.
× And refreshing air.
✓ And there is refreshing air.
Fragment lacks a verb. Add 'there is' to make a complete sentence and express that the air is refreshing. Maintain present simple to describe a general quality.