Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Pronunciation and word choice need correction; be concise and clear. Start with a direct, natural topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I loved going to parks as a child."). Use correct words (not "debitedly" or "spa party") and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words such as "because" or "for example." Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my family often spent weekends at a nearby park called Lady Ring, where we celebrated birthdays with picnics and games. I have fond memories of those relaxed family gatherings.

Gợi ý: Be more direct and fluent; avoid filler words ("umm," "uh"). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and contrast using linking words like "however" or "because." Complete sentences and a concise ending will improve coherence.

Ví dụ: Not as much as before. I do enjoy running in the park when the weather is mild, but in summer it gets too hot, so I usually prefer exercising at the gym because it is air-conditioned.

Gợi ý: Clarify sentence structure, correct grammar (singular/plural), and use specific examples. Replace fillers with linking words like "for example" and avoid vague phrases. State one clear reason why more parks are needed and mention a specific benefit.

Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. For example, only a few areas, such as District 1, currently have many parks, so I would like more parks in other districts to give residents easy access to green spaces for recreation and relaxation.

Gợi ý: Organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence naming the park and then describe specific features using accurate vocabulary. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words like "for example" or "because" and finish with a complete thought about why you'd like to visit.

Ví dụ: Yes — I would love to visit Gardens by the Bay in Singapore again. For example, I remember the Supertree Grove with hundreds of illuminated trees; in the evening the lights create a magical atmosphere, which is why I want to return.

× Yeah, it's debitedly.

✓ Yeah, definitely.

The student used 'debitedly', which is not an English adverb; likely intended 'definitely'. This is a word choice/error in sentence formation. Suggestion: learn common adverbs of agreement (definitely, certainly) and proofread for familiar words.

× I would love to spend weekends with my family at a near park called Lady Ring.

✓ I would love to spend weekends with my family at a nearby park called Lady Ring.

The phrase 'a near park' incorrectly combines singular article with an adjective form; use the adjective 'nearby' to modify 'park'. This is an adjective form error related to modifying nouns. Suggestion: use 'nearby' before a noun (a nearby park) or 'near the park' depending on meaning.

× So we usually have a spa party here when one of my family members celebrated birthday.

✓ So we usually had a spa party here when one of my family members celebrated his or her birthday.

Tense and article/pronoun issues: 'celebrated birthday' is missing a possessive and 'have' with past context should match. Correct uses: 'had a spa party' for past habitual events and 'celebrated his/her birthday' or 'celebrated their birthday'. Suggestion: include possessive before 'birthday' and match tense to context.

× Well, not really. Umm. So now if I have a chance to go to the park, I would love to run around the park to do exercise.

✓ Well, not really. Umm. So now if I have the chance to go to the park, I would love to run around the park to exercise.

Use 'the chance' rather than 'a chance' for a specific opportunity; 'to do exercise' is awkward—use 'to exercise'. Suggestion: prefer 'have the chance' and use verb 'exercise' as a verb rather than noun phrase.

× But in the summer going to the park is pretty hot, so I uh, prefer going to the gym to do some.

✓ But in the summer, going to the park is pretty hot, so I prefer going to the gym to exercise.

'to do some' is incomplete; needs an object (some what). Replace with 'exercise'. Also missing comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: complete phrasal verbs and use clear verbs like 'exercise'.

× Umm, in my cities right now only, umm, districts like Florida district, like District 1 would have a lot of parts with a variety of treats.

✓ Umm, in my city right now, only districts like Florida District, such as District 1, have a lot of parks with a variety of treats.

Errors: 'cities' should be singular 'city' if referring to one city; subject-verb agreement 'districts... have' not 'would have'; 'parts' should be 'parks'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches meaning and use correct verb agreement; use 'such as' for examples.

× Well, I remember when I paid a visit to Singapore, umm, there's a recreational part.

✓ Well, I remember when I paid a visit to Singapore, there was a recreational park.

Mixing past memory 'I remember when I paid a visit' requires past tense 'there was' not present 'there's'. Also 'part' is wrong word; should be 'park'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and choose correct noun.

× There's a, there's so many trees with lies on it.

✓ There were so many trees along it.

'trees with lies on it' is unintelligible; likely meant 'trees along it' (trees lining it) or 'trees with lights on them'. Also pronoun agreement: 'it' unclear. Suggestion: use 'along' or 'lined with' for trees beside a path, or 'trees with lights on them' for lights.

× So in the evening, umm, when people turn on the lights, the scene.

✓ So in the evening, when people turn on the lights, the scene is beautiful.

The sentence fragment 'the scene.' lacks a verb and complement. Complete the sentence with an adjective or clause (e.g., 'the scene becomes beautiful'). Suggestion: ensure every sentence has a subject and finite verb; avoid leaving fragments.