Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar; begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and informal fillers like "something like this."

Ví dụ: Yes. Parks were one of my favorite places as a child because I often went there to ride my bike and play games with my friends. For example, we used to race on the trails every weekend, which made those visits very memorable.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct topic sentence and correct grammar (use full clauses). Explain briefly with a specific reason and use a linking phrase to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases like "you know" and awkward sentences.

Ví dụ: Not really. I rarely visit parks now because I am busy with university and part-time work, so I don't have much free time. However, I do sometimes walk in a nearby green space when I need a short break from studying.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and avoid repeating earlier points. Offer a brief reason and, optionally, a contrasting idea using linking words. Keep sentences varied and grammatically correct.

Ví dụ: Not particularly. Because of my busy schedule, I don't prioritize parks, and I prefer visiting cultural venues or cafés as an adult. That said, I would welcome more parks if they offered facilities for adults, such as jogging trails or outdoor study areas.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear and confident topic sentence, give one specific reason why you want to visit that park, and use linking words to connect ideas. Remove hesitations like "uh" and vague language such as "kind of."

Ví dụ: Yes. I would like to visit Central Park in New York because it is famous for its large green spaces, lakes, and cultural events. For instance, I would love to walk around the lakes and visit the sculptures and museums nearby when I travel there.

× Yes, it was one of my favorite place back in my childhood and I really like to go biking as a child and play with my friends.

✓ Yes, it was one of my favorite places when I was a child, and I really liked going biking and playing with my friends.

Plural noun 'place' should be 'places' to match 'one of my'; 'back in my childhood' is awkward — use 'when I was a child'; tense consistency: question asked about past so use past 'liked' and 'going biking' and 'playing' (gerunds) to list activities.

× I really like to go biking as a child and play with my friends.

✓ I really liked going biking and playing with my friends as a child.

The sentence mixes present 'like' with past time reference 'as a child'; change verb to past 'liked' and use gerunds 'going' and 'playing' for parallel structure and correct tense agreement.

× No, not really, because I kind of busy with my university courses and working and I just don't get the time.

✓ No, not really, because I'm kind of busy with my university courses and work, and I just don't have the time.

Missing auxiliary 'am' for present continuous 'I'm busy'; 'working' should be 'work' or 'working on' but 'work' fits better; 'don't get the time' is nonstandard—use 'don't have the time'.

× And you know, I think everything has its own time and going to parks where was for my childhood.

✓ I think everything has its own time, and going to parks was something I did in my childhood.

Sentence is ungrammatical: 'where was for my childhood' incorrect order and words. Rephrase to 'going to parks was something I did in my childhood' to convey intended meaning and correct word order.

× No, as I said earlier, I just don't have time for visiting parks anymore.

✓ No, as I said earlier, I just don't have time to visit parks anymore.

Use 'to visit' after 'have time' rather than 'for visiting'; 'have time to do' is the correct structure.

× And I think it was something that I like to do as a child.

✓ And I think it was something I liked to do as a child.

Tense mismatch: 'was' (past) requires 'liked' (past) rather than 'like' (present). Use past tense for consistency.

× So I like to visit somewhere else as an as an adult person.

✓ So I like to visit other places as an adult.

Awkward repetition 'as an as an' and wordy 'adult person'; simplify to 'other places as an adult' for natural phrasing and correct structure.

× Uh, I don't know, maybe it's a park called Central Park, which is located in New York.

✓ Uh, I don't know, maybe the park called Central Park in New York.

Use definite article 'the park called Central Park' because Central Park is a specific known place; 'which is located in New York' is wordy—shorter 'in New York' suffices.

× And as I live in Tehran, I really like to visit the park because it's kind of touristic place of New York.

✓ Since I live in Tehran, I would really like to visit that park because it's a tourist attraction in New York.

'Kind of touristic place' is unnatural; use 'tourist attraction' or 'tourist destination'. Also 'of New York' incorrect preposition—use 'in New York'. Change tense to 'would like' to express desire.