Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is honest and detailed, with good content and clear reasons. To improve, shorten the opening phrase to sound more natural, vary sentence beginnings, and avoid small redundancies (e.g., "on swinging and climbing, on monkey bars"). Use one or two linking words to connect regret to consequence. Keep responses within 3–4 sentences for Part 1.

Ví dụ: No, I didn’t really. I preferred staying at home using my iPad to watch videos and play games, so I rarely visited parks. As a result, I missed out on activities like swinging and climbing and I sometimes find it hard to relate when others talk fondly about park memories.

Gợi ý: This answer is natural, coherent and includes specific personal routines. To push the score higher, replace colloquial contractions sparingly in formal test, combine short sentences for flow, and add one linking phrase to strengthen coherence. Avoid vague phrases like "rational decisions"—be concrete about benefits.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have. Parks feel like a small sanctuary, so when I’m stressed I often go for a short walk or sit under a tree to clear my thoughts. As a result, I usually feel calmer and more focused, which helps me make better decisions.

Gợi ý: Strong, well-structured answer with clear reasons and specific benefits. To improve further, use smoother linking words and tighten phrasing (e.g., replace "I think that parks thus should be" with "therefore, parks should be"). Add a brief local example to make it more concrete if time allows.

Ví dụ: Definitely. As the city urbanizes, green spaces are shrinking, so parks should be more widely available. They improve air quality and offer affordable places for families to relax and exercise—for example, a small neighborhood park could serve many local residents who currently must travel farther to find greenery.

Gợi ý: Good, clear answer with personal intention and specific activities. To improve, avoid overly formal or awkward phrases like "As of right now" and "whatever comes to mind." Use one linking word to connect intention and activities and keep sentences concise. You could name a type of park (riverside, botanical) to be more specific.

Ví dụ: I don’t have a particular park in mind, but I plan to find a nearby green space where I can unwind. For instance, I’d like a quiet riverside or botanical park where I can sit, read a book, and clear my mind when I need to relax.

× spending time on my iPad, watching videos and playing games

✓ spending time on my iPad, watching videos, and playing games

This phrase lists parallel gerunds. A comma before the final conjunction (serial comma) improves clarity but is stylistic; more importantly, ensure parallel structure is maintained. Add a comma after 'videos' to clearly separate items in the series. Suggestion: maintain parallel -ing forms and use a comma to separate list items.

× I missed out on outdoor activities like swinging and climbing, on monkey bars and on socialising with other children

✓ I missed out on outdoor activities like swinging and climbing on monkey bars and socialising with other children

The repeated 'on' is unnecessary and makes the sentence awkward. Use a single preposition 'on' applied to coordinated noun phrases. Also keep parallel structure for the activities. Suggestion: remove the extra 'on' instances so the preposition governs the whole coordinated list.

× Whenever my mind is buzzing, I'll go for a short walk or sit under the tree to clear my thoughts

✓ Whenever my mind is buzzing, I'll go for a short walk or sit under a tree to clear my thoughts

Using 'the tree' implies a specific, previously mentioned tree; here the student refers to any tree in a park, so the indefinite article 'a' is correct. Use 'a tree' when no particular tree is intended.

× I would go there to sit quietly, read a book, or just think about anything, whatever comes to mind when I need to calm down

✓ I would go there to sit quietly, read a book, or just think about whatever comes to mind when I need to calm down

'Think about anything' is vague and less natural; 'think about whatever comes to mind' avoids the redundant 'anything' and aligns with the following clause. Also maintain parallel infinitive forms 'to sit', 'read', 'think' (implicit 'to' for read and think is acceptable in coordination). Suggestion: use 'whatever comes to mind' for natural phrasing.