Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변이 직접적이지만 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 동사의 시제와 복수형을 바로잡고, 주제 문장 뒤에 구체적인 세부정보(어떤 활동을 했는지 등)를 연결어로 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 예: 'Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child' 같은 완전한 문장으로 시작하고, 'for example', 'often' 같은 연결어로 활동을 설명하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child. For example, from about seven to fifteen I often played football and climbed trees in the small parks near my house, so I have many happy memories.

Gợi ý: 문법(관사, 동사형)과 문장 연결이 불안정합니다. 'prefer to go to parks'처럼 전치사와 관사를 정확히 사용하고, 마침표와 반복어(‘still still’)를 제거하세요. 주제문 다음에 이유나 예시를 연결할 때 'because'나 'however' 같은 접속사를 쓰면 더 논리적입니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still like going to parks, and I prefer the ones near my house. Although they are smaller than the parks I visited as a child, they are peaceful and convenient, so I enjoy walking there every weekend.

Gợi ý: 문장이 장황하고 중복(‘in my city’ 반복)되어 의미 전달이 흐립니다. 솔직하게 말할 때는 'to be honest'를 사용하고 조건문 구조를 단순화하세요. 또한 의견과 이유를 분명히 구분해 연결어('because', 'but')로 논리를 구성하세요.

Ví dụ: To be honest, there is the Han River near my house, so I think the city has enough green space. However, more small local parks would still be useful for people who live farther from the river.

Gợi ý: 구어체('wanna')와 문장의 불완전함('and. Some animals')을 고치세요. 목적과 기대를 구체적으로 설명하고 연결어('because', 'to see', 'and also')를 사용해 문장을 완성하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

Ví dụ: I'd like to visit Lumpini Park in Bangkok because I want to see its beautiful lakes and gardens. I am also interested in observing the monitor lizards and the variety of birds that live there.

× Yes, I'd like to go to park.

✓ Yes, I'd like to go to the park.

The noun 'park' is a singular, countable noun and requires an article. Use the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific park or parks in a familiar context. Suggestion: Use 'the park' or 'a park' depending on specificity.

× When I was young, about 7 years old to 15 years old, there was many parks around my house.

✓ When I was young, from about 7 to 15 years old, there were many parks around my house.

Subject-verb agreement with past tense: 'parks' is plural so the past form of 'there is' should be 'there were'. Also improve phrasing by using 'from about 7 to 15 years old'. Suggestion: Use 'there were' with plural nouns in past contexts.

× Yes, I prefer to go parks around my house.

✓ Yes, I prefer to go to the parks around my house.

When referring to specific parks near the speaker, use the definite article 'the' with the plural noun 'parks'. Also include the preposition 'to' after 'go'. Suggestion: Use 'go to the parks'.

× It's different from where I visited before, but it's.

✓ It's different from the places I visited before, but it's still nice.

The original sentence is incomplete ('but it's.' is a sentence fragment) and uses awkward structure. Replace 'where I visited before' with 'the places I visited before' and complete the second clause with an adjective like 'still nice' to express a positive evaluation. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments and complete comparisons.

× It's still still happy for me to go park.

✓ It's still enjoyable for me to go to the park.

'Happy' is not used to describe an activity; 'enjoyable' or 'fun' is appropriate. Also 'to go park' needs the preposition 'to' and an article with the singular countable noun 'park'. Remove duplicate 'still'. Suggestion: Use correct adjective and include 'to the park'.

× If honestly there is Han river around my house so it could be better if there are more parks in the city in my city, but it's enough for me.

✓ Honestly, there is the Han River near my house, so it could be nice if there were more parks in the city, but what we have is enough for me.

Multiple issues: word order and conjunctions ('If honestly' is incorrect), article use ('the Han River'), conditional mood (use 'were' for a hypothetical: 'if there were more parks'), redundancy ('in the city in my city'), and clarity. Suggestion: Start with 'Honestly,' use 'near' for proximity, use 'if there were' for unreal conditional, and remove redundancy.

× I'd like to go Rumpini Park in Thailand, Bangkok.

✓ I'd like to go to Lumpini Park in Bangkok, Thailand.

Place name correction: 'Lumpini Park' is the common English name. Use the preposition 'to' after 'go'. Also put 'Bangkok, Thailand' in natural order. Suggestion: Use correct park name and 'go to'.

× I wanna see beautiful scenery up there and. Some animals.

✓ I want to see the beautiful scenery there and some animals.

Avoid colloquial 'wanna' in formal speech: use 'want to'. 'Scenery' is uncountable and often uses 'the' when referring to a specific view. Remove the sentence fragment 'and.' and combine ideas: 'and some animals'. Suggestion: Use 'want to' and complete sentences without fragments.