Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail to support your statement. For example, replace "I always go" with "I often went", change "families" to "family", and clarify activities (e.g., "playing with clay" or "playing games"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my family and friends, and my parents would play with me while I made shapes in the clay.

Gợi ý: Improve clarity and grammar, and organize ideas with linking words. Use present simple for current habits and explain reasons briefly and specifically. Avoid contradictory phrases like "unlike my child"; instead contrast past and present clearly. Keep sentences short and coherent.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I no longer play in the sand because it can be dirty, but I walk around the park to relax, especially when my daily life is stressful.

Gợi ý: Use correct sentence structure and reduce hesitation. Start with a direct answer, then give a clear reason using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Replace vague phrases with specific ones like "municipal parks" and explain benefit: fresh air and space to exercise.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. Our city should have more municipal parks because many people have limited access to fresh air and open space, so parks would provide places to relax and exercise.

Gợi ý: Be specific and use correct nouns and plural forms. State the park you mean (e.g., "my uncle's city park"), explain what attracts you with clear details (e.g., flowers, trees, scenery), and avoid fillers like "uh" or repeated words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit my uncle’s city park. He told me it has beautiful flowers and colourful trees, and I want to see the scenery and take photos there.

× When I was a kid, I always go to the park with my friends or my families and my parents always play with me about the clay and I always play with my friends about about.

✓ When I was a kid, I always went to the park with my friends or my family, and my parents always played with me with clay, and I always played with my friends.

The speaker refers to past habitual actions, so verbs should be in the past tense (went, played). 'Families' is incorrect here; use 'family' for the speaker's immediate family. 'Play with me about the clay' is ungrammatical; 'played with me with clay' or 'played with clay with me' is clearer. Remove duplicated word 'about'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for past routines and simplify phrasing (e.g., 'I always went to the park with my friends and family, and my parents played with me using clay').

× Unlike my child, always play in the clay on the sand because it's a little bit dirty.

✓ Unlike when I was a child, I used to play in the sand and with clay, which was a little bit dirty.

Meaning compares past child behavior to now; use past tense 'used to' or 'when I was a child'. The original lacks a clear subject and misuses 'my child'. 'Play in the clay on the sand' is awkward; clarify as 'play in the sand and with clay'. Use a relative clause 'which was a little bit dirty' to describe the sand/clay. Suggestion: restructure the sentence to include subject and proper past tense verbs.

× But I always go around the park is a very great way to relax myself, especially have some very stressful about my daily life.

✓ But I always go to parks because they are a great way to relax, especially when I am stressed by my daily life.

Mix of tenses and missing connectors: 'I always go around the park is a very great way' is a run-on and lacks proper verb linking. Use present simple for habitual action ('I always go to parks'). Replace 'relax myself' with 'relax' and correct the clause describing stress: 'especially when I am stressed by my daily life' or 'especially when I feel stressed by daily life'. Suggestion: break into two clauses and use present simple for habits and present continuous/state verbs for current feelings.

× Yes, especially my city, there always be set some different council parks in there.

✓ Yes, especially in my city, there are always several different council parks.

Incorrect 'there always be set' - use correct 'there are' for existence in the present. 'Set' is unnecessary. Use 'several' or 'some' instead of 'some different' for fluency, and avoid redundant 'in there'. Suggestion: use 'there are' + plural noun for present existence statements.

× I think this is because in daily life, uh, we have no chance to uh, breathe some fresh air and the park always to uh, always satisfy this.

✓ I think this is because in daily life we often do not have a chance to breathe fresh air, and the park always provides that.

Incorrect use of infinitive/verb forms: 'have no chance to breathe some fresh air' should be 'do not have a chance to breathe fresh air' and 'the park always to ... satisfy this' is ungrammatical. Use 'provides that' or 'satisfies that need'. Remove filler words and unnecessary repetition. Suggestion: use proper subject-verb structure and correct verb forms ('do not have', 'breathe', 'the park provides').

× Yes, absolutely. I really want to go to my uncle's cities park.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I really want to go to my uncle's city park.

'Cities park' is incorrect plural; use the singular possessive 'uncle's city park' if referring to the park in his city. The main verb 'want to go' correctly uses present tense for a future intention, so keep it. Suggestion: use correct noun form and possession ('uncle's city park').

× This is because my uncle always told me in this park there are some chilli's in there and uh, they are very beautiful, especially uh really really like to leaves.

✓ This is because my uncle always told me that in this park there are some chillies, and they are very beautiful, especially the leaves.

Incorrect use of apostrophe: 'chilli's' should be plural 'chillies' (or 'chili peppers'). The sentence needs 'that' to introduce the reported information and avoid repetition 'in there'. 'Really really like to leaves' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'I really like the leaves' or 'the leaves are really beautiful'. Suggestion: use correct plural form without apostrophe, include 'that' for reported content, and use proper clause to express liking ('I really like the leaves' or 'the leaves are beautiful').