Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 总体表现自然，内容具体，但可更简洁并用一到两个连接词提升连贯性。注意避免略显冗长的句子，可在第一句给出主题句，然后用简短的支持细节。

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often spent hours on swings and slides with friends, and my parents frequently took us for weekend picnics, which helped me make many happy memories.

Gợi ý: 回答直接但信息较多且句子过长，建议先用一句明确的主题句，再用一或两句具体原因并用连接词（e.g. because, however）衔接，使表达更清晰。

Ví dụ: Not really. I hardly visit parks now because I'm busy with work and studies and prefer indoor activities like going to the gym or watching films. Also, the local parks are poorly maintained, so I have little motivation to go.

Gợi ý: 观点明确但语气稍显消极且有句子断裂（"To be honest."）。建议合并想法，用连接词给出原因并补充一条较客观的对比或例子，使论证更完整。

Ví dụ: I don't think more parks are necessary in my city because I rarely use them; instead, the government should focus on improving public transport and building more schools, which would benefit more residents.

Gợi ý: 回答积极且具体，细节充足。可加入一两句说明原因或计划（什么时候/如何去），并用连接词使内容更连贯，避免重复表达（"in America"与"Yellowstone"已足够）。

Ví dụ: Yes, I'd love to visit famous parks abroad, such as Central Park in New York and Yellowstone National Park. I've seen them in films and online and they seem incredible; in the future I hope to go hiking in national parks to explore nature and take photos.

× No, I don't really go to parks anymore, I'm quite busy with work and studies and to be honest I prefer indoor activities now like hitting the gym or catching a movie.

✓ No, I don't really go to parks anymore. I'm quite busy with work and studies, and to be honest I prefer indoor activities now, like going to the gym or watching a movie.

句子中使用了逗号连接多个独立分句（逗号拼接句），应分为两个或更多句子或用连接词正确连接；此外部分短语搭配不当：英语习惯说 "go to the gym" 和 "watch a movie"，而不是 "hitting the gym"（口语可用但与正式叙述和并列结构不太协调）或 "catching a movie"（主要美式非正式）。建议将长句拆分为更清晰的句子，并使用更自然的动词短语：go to the gym / watch a movie。

× No, I don't think we need more parks in my city. To be honest. I rarely visit parks myself so it wouldn't make much difference to me.

✓ No, I don't think we need more parks in my city. To be honest, I rarely visit parks myself, so it wouldn't make much difference to me.

原句把 "To be honest." 单独成句，造成不完整的句子（句子没有动词或主语）。这属于句子结构错误，应将其与前后句合并或改为完整句；同时在复合句中需在从句前加逗号以增强可读性。建议把短语与邻近句子合并并加上逗号。

× Yes, I'd love to visit some famous parks abroad like Central Park in New York or Yellowstone National Park in America.

✓ Yes, I'd love to visit some famous parks abroad, like Central Park in New York or Yellowstone National Park in the United States.

短语中使用地名时，通常用 "in New York"（城市）和国家应正式写为 "the United States" 而不是 "America"（口语可用但不够正式），且在列举示例前加逗号更符合书面语。这里是介词和地名用法的细微调整，建议在正式答题时使用更标准的国家名称并在举例前加逗号以增强清晰度。