Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence saying you liked parks, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce repetition and correct word choice (e.g., “visited parks with my family,” not “visited to pets”). Use linking words like “for example” or “and” to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my family often visited the local park on weekends where my parents and I would play badminton and sometimes have a picnic, which made those days very happy for me.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence stating you still enjoy parks, then explain specific reasons with correct vocabulary and simpler sentences. Avoid unclear words (e.g., “past,” “pack,” “accounts”) and reduce hesitation. Use linking phrases like “because” and “they help me to…”

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax after a long day. For example, walking among trees and listening to birds reduces my stress, and the peaceful atmosphere makes me feel refreshed.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and give a specific reason and one supporting detail. Use correct collocations (e.g., “more parks” or “more green spaces,” not just “paths”), avoid filler words, and use linking words like “because” or “so that.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because more green spaces would improve air quality and provide places for exercise. For instance, adding tree-lined parks would create a healthier and more pleasant environment for residents.

Gợi ý: State the park clearly and give specific reasons why you want to visit. Use correct grammar for place names and phrases (e.g., “the park in Hoan Kiem” or correct name), avoid fillers, and organize with linking words like “because” or “for example.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I want to visit Thong Nhat Park in Hanoi because it is one of the biggest parks and offers beautiful lakeside views. For example, I would like to walk around the lake, take photos of the scenery, and try some local food nearby.

× Well definitely when I was a child I often visited to pets with my families, to work and playing some sports with my parents such as badminton.

✓ Well, definitely when I was a child I often visited parks with my family, went to work, and played some sports with my parents such as badminton.

Errors: 'visited to pets' is incorrect — likely meant 'visited parks'; 'families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's family; verb forms 'to work and playing' mix infinitive and -ing incorrectly. Suggestion: use correct plural nouns for countable items (parks), use singular 'family' for the household, and keep verbs parallel: 'visited parks, went to work, and played some sports'.

× It was my happy time at that when I was a child.

✓ It was a happy time when I was a child.

Errors: unnecessary words 'my' and 'at that' make the sentence ungrammatical. Use the article 'a' before 'happy time' and omit redundant phrases. Suggestion: simplify to 'It was a happy time when I was a child.'

× Well, definitely yes, I still like going to the past now you know that the feeling of the pack give it to me is the accounts and and why my stress after a long hour of the day And also I can feel the respect atmosphere of here.

✓ Well, definitely yes, I still like going to parks now; the feeling the park gives me reduces my stress after a long day. I can also feel the peaceful atmosphere here.

Errors: 'going to the past' is incorrect word choice — should be 'parks' or 'park'; tense and subject-verb agreement: 'the feeling of the pack give it to me' should be 'the feeling the park gives me' (third person singular gives); 'after a long hour of the day' should be 'after a long day'; 'respect atmosphere' is incorrect collocation — use 'peaceful' or 'pleasant atmosphere'. Suggestion: use correct nouns, ensure subject-verb agreement for third person singular, and choose appropriate adjectives.

× Well, I think yes, I would like to see my city have more paths.

✓ Well, I think yes, I would like to see my city have more parks.

Errors: 'paths' likely intended 'parks' given context; if 'paths' is used, it can be plural but earlier context is parks. Suggestion: choose correct plural noun that matches topic (parks).

× You know that paths have a lot of trees and if we umm, increase more paths in our city is could enhance umm, the respect of the atmosphere.

✓ You know that parks have a lot of trees, and if we increase the number of parks in our city, it could enhance the quality of the atmosphere.

Errors: 'increase more paths' is ungrammatical — use 'increase the number of parks' or 'add more parks'; 'is could' is wrong auxiliary combination; 'respect of the atmosphere' is incorrect collocation. Suggestion: use correct noun phrases ('the number of parks'), correct modal usage ('it could enhance'), and appropriate collocations ('quality of the atmosphere' or 'pleasant atmosphere').

× Well, I think yes, I actually have a path that I really want to go in the future is the in the park in Huangmai was which is widely known as the biggest park in Hanoi, and it also have a lot of umm, breathtaking view and I really wanted to enjoy go eat.

✓ Well, I think yes, I actually have a park that I really want to visit in the future: the park in Hoang Mai, which is widely known as the biggest park in Hanoi. It also has a lot of breathtaking views, and I really want to go there to enjoy the scenery and eat.

Errors: sentence structure is run-on and contains many errors: 'have a path that I really want to go in the future' should be 'have a park I want to visit in the future'; 'Huangmai was' is incorrect name and tense — corrected to 'Hoang Mai'; subject-verb agreement 'it also have' should be 'it also has'; 'breathtaking view' should be plural 'views' or 'a breathtaking view'; 'really wanted to enjoy go eat' mixes tenses and verbs. Suggestion: split into clear sentences, use correct place name, maintain future intention with present/future construction 'want to visit' and 'want to go there to enjoy and eat', and ensure subject-verb agreement.