Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural but concise: begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid slang like "my jam" in formal test and reduce repetition. Use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") to connect reasons and outcomes.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were my favourite place to play. For example, I used to ask my mother every day to take me there, and when she was too busy I would ask my grandmother instead so I could spend time on the swings and explore the trees.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct topic sentence and avoid filler sounds like "uh." Use correct verb forms ("rather to sit" → "rather sit") and give one clear reason with a linking word. Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

Ví dụ: Not really. I prefer quieter places because I find crowded parks noisy, so I usually choose to sit in a cafe and enjoy a coffee with my boyfriend in peace.

Gợi ý: Give a balanced opinion: start with a clear position, then support it with specific reasons using linking words like "however" and "because." Remove fillers and be more precise (e.g., "combat air pollution" instead of general phrases).

Ví dụ: Although I don't use parks much myself, I think expanding green spaces would be beneficial because they help reduce air pollution and make the city more attractive.

Gợi ý: Answer directly, avoid repetition ("I enjoy" twice) and fillers, and give a specific plan or example of the type of park you'd like to visit. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to explain your preference.

Ví dụ: I have visited most local parks, but I'd like to visit new ones outside the city because I enjoy hiking; for example, I'd like to explore a national park with mountain trails and scenic views.

× I remember insisting on my mother on a daily basis to take me to the park, even though she was busy and she didn't have enough time to do that.

✓ I remember insisting to my mother on a daily basis that she take me to the park, even though she was busy and didn't have enough time to do so.

The verb insist is followed by 'insist to someone' or 'insist that someone do something.' 'Insisting on my mother' is incorrect: use 'insisting to my mother' or preferably 'insisting that she take me.' Also 'to do that' is wordy; 'do so' or omit it. Ensure verb form after 'that' uses subjunctive or 'should' in some varieties; 'that she take me' is concise. Suggestion: Say 'I remember insisting to my mother on a daily basis that she take me to the park.'

× And I would just go to my grandmother and ask her to take me to the parks.

✓ And I would just go to my grandmother and ask her to take me to the park.

Context refers to a specific repeated activity (going to the park as a child), so the singular 'the park' is more natural. Using plural 'parks' implies multiple different parks, which conflicts with earlier singular reference. Suggest using 'the park' to match context. Suggestion: '...ask her to take me to the park.'

× I don't appreciate a crowded place with a lot of children.

✓ I don't like crowded places with a lot of children.

'Appreciate' is not the best verb to express dislike; 'like' is the correct lexical choice. Also change 'a crowded place' to plural 'crowded places' to generalize the preference. This is primarily word choice rather than a strict grammar error but affects meaning and naturalness. Suggestion: 'I don't like crowded places with a lot of children.'

× I'd rather to sit in a cafe and enjoy my coffee, uh, with my boyfriend in peace.

✓ I'd rather sit in a cafe and enjoy my coffee with my boyfriend in peace.

After 'would rather' the base form of the verb is used, not 'to' plus the verb. So use 'I'd rather sit' not 'I'd rather to sit.' Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity and natural speech. Suggestion: 'I'd rather sit in a cafe and enjoy my coffee with my boyfriend in peace.'

× Personally, I don't care for parks, but for the sake of environment and, uh, global warming, I think it's a good idea to see more green places and uh, it can also help the city look prettier.

✓ Personally, I don't care for parks, but for the sake of the environment and in terms of global warming, I think it's a good idea to have more green spaces, and it can also help the city look prettier.

Use 'the environment' with the definite article. 'For the sake of environment' is incorrect. 'Global warming' needs a clearer prepositional link: 'in terms of global warming' or 'to combat global warming.' 'See more green places' is unnatural; 'have more green spaces' or 'create more green spaces' fits better. Also remove filler words for clarity. Suggestion: '...for the sake of the environment and to help address global warming, I think it's a good idea to have more green spaces...'.

× I think I have visited all the parks in my city, but uh, since I enjoy visiting new places and I enjoy hiking, I think it would be a good idea to visit any new park that I haven't seen before.

✓ I think I have visited all the parks in my city, but since I enjoy visiting new places and hiking, I think it would be a good idea to visit any new park I haven't seen before.

This sentence is largely correct but can be tightened. Remove unnecessary 'uh' and repeated 'I enjoy.' Keep present perfect 'have visited' for experience up to now and present conditional 'would be' for hypothetical future. 'Any new park that I haven't seen before' is wordy; 'any new park I haven't seen before' is clearer. Suggestion: 'I think I have visited all the parks in my city, but since I enjoy visiting new places and hiking, it would be good to visit any new park I haven't seen before.'