Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar (use past tense consistently and fix articles). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating ideas (e.g., “not anymore” then repeating same reason later).

Ví dụ: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my parents often took me to a small park near our house where we would play on the swings and have picnics. Those visits felt special because they gave us quality family time.

Gợi ý: Give a direct topic sentence, then one clear reason with a linking word. Improve sentence structure and avoid vague phrases like “developed more ways.” Be specific about the alternative activities and limit answer to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Not really — I rarely go to parks now because my job keeps me very busy. Instead, I prefer spending free time exercising at the gym or meeting friends for coffee on weekends.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear opinion and then give two specific benefits using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'for instance'). Fix repetitions and awkward phrasing. Be specific about how parks would help (e.g., relaxation, exercise, community events).

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. I think parks bring greenery and calm to a busy city because they provide places to exercise and relax. For example, small community parks could host yoga classes or weekend markets that help people unwind.

Gợi ý: This answer is clear and fairly specific. Improve by starting with a direct topic sentence and adding a brief reason why you want to visit (e.g., interest in plants or photography). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct minor phrasing (e.g., 'more of a garden').

Ví dụ: Yes — I would like to visit the Rose Garden in Chandigarh because it has many different rose varieties. I’m interested in seeing the flowers and taking photographs of the displays.

× I did like to go to parks when I was kid but not anymore.

✓ I did like to go to parks when I was a kid but not anymore.

Missing article 'a' before 'kid' causes singular noun to be incorrect. Use 'a kid' to indicate one child; alternatively 'when I was a child'. Use articles with singular countable nouns.

× We used to spend a quality time together there.

✓ We used to spend quality time together there.

The phrase 'a quality time' is unidiomatic because 'time' in this context is uncountable; do not use the indefinite article 'a'. Use 'quality time' without an article.

× But now this fast-paced life did not enable me to go to.

✓ But now this fast-paced life does not enable me to go.

Mixes past tense 'did not enable' with 'now'; use present tense 'does not enable' for current situation. Also sentence ended with 'to' without object; remove the trailing 'to'.

× Actually no, as I told earlier that now because of my job and fast-paced life I don't get enough time to go to parks anymore.

✓ Actually no, as I told you earlier, now because of my job and fast-paced life I don't get enough time to go to parks anymore.

Missing object after 'told' — include 'you' to clarify who was told. Comma after introductory clause improves clarity. Tense 'don't get' is correct for present; correction adds pronoun.

× Also I have developed more ways to spend my quality time rather than going to parks.

✓ Also I have developed other ways to spend my free time rather than going to parks.

'More ways' is acceptable but 'other ways' is more natural. 'My quality time' is awkward; 'free time' is idiomatic. Pronoun 'my' plus 'quality time' is not the expected collocation.

× As far I think parks represent greenery, peace and in this fast-paced life it is a necessity that there should be a thing which could you could do when you're free.

✓ As far as I think, parks represent greenery and peace, and in this fast-paced life they are a necessity because they provide something you can do when you're free.

Original has multiple structural problems: missing 'as' in 'as far as I think', run-on sentence, awkward phrase 'there should be a thing which could you could do'. Replace with clearer structure: use 'they are a necessity' and 'provide something you can do'. Correct pronoun agreement 'they' for 'parks'.

× Yes, there is a place in my mind, but I'm not sure if I would call that a park as it is more or less a garden.

✓ Yes, there is a place in my mind, but I'm not sure if I would call that a park, as it is more or less a garden.

Add comma before 'as' for clarity. Sentence otherwise acceptable; minor punctuation improves readability.