Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문법과 어휘 선택이 많이 어색합니다. 과거 습관을 말할 때는 과거형과 적절한 표현(used to, liked)을 사용하고, 문장은 간결하게 핵심을 먼저 말한 뒤 구체적 예시를 덧붙이세요. 중복되는 이유(comfortable mind, can see many things of perks)는 구체적이고 자연스러운 표현으로 바꿔야 합니다. 예: 주제문 + 이유(특정 활동/장소와 느낌) + 간단한 예시의 구조로 최대 2~3문장으로 말하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I often went on picnics with my family, which made me feel relaxed and happy. For example, we would play games on the grass and watch birds together.

Gợi ý: 의도는 명확하지만 문법(when I very stressful, have a very stressed emotion)과 반복이 있습니다. 현재 습관을 말할 때는 현재형 사용과 연결어(if, when, so)를 자연스럽게 쓰세요. 감정을 표현할 때는 'feel stressed'나 'under a lot of stress' 같은 표현을 사용하고, 이유-결과 구조로 정리하세요. 문장은 2문장 이내로 유지하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. When I feel stressed, I usually take a walk there to clear my mind and relax.

Gợi ý: 문장 연결과 복수/단수 일치(plural agreement)가 틀렸습니다 (every parks, each parks). 의견을 말할 때는 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요(예: 녹지 비율, 휴식 공간 다양성). 연결어(because, so)와 정확한 표현(every park has its own character)으로 1~2문장으로 명료하게 말하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because each park has its own character. With more parks, people could choose different places to relax, exercise, or meet friends.

Gợi ý: 전달은 잘 되었지만 몇몇 문법 오류(places → place, because when I was young I watched → because I watched when I was young)와 불필요한 장황함이 있습니다. 선호 이유를 더 구체적으로 말하고 연결어를 깔끔하게 사용하세요. 예시로 경험이나 기대하는 활동을 덧붙이면 좋습니다. 문장은 2문장으로 간결하게 구성하세요.

Ví dụ: I would like to visit Central Park in New York because I saw it in a documentary and it looked like a peaceful urban oasis. I want to walk there, see the trees and lakes, and experience how locals use the space.

× Yes, I learned to going to park because when I was young I like to go picnic with my family because going to park with my family can gives me very comfortable mind because I can see many things of perks.

✓ Yes, I learned to go to parks because when I was young I liked to go on picnics with my family; going to parks with my family gave me a very comfortable feeling because I could see many things in the parks.

'to going' is incorrect after 'learned to' — use the base verb 'to go' (동사원형 사용). 'park' should be plural 'parks' for general meaning (단수/복수 문제). 'I like' should be past 'I liked' to match 'when I was young' (시제 일치). 'go picnic' needs preposition 'go on picnics' (전치사 사용). 'can gives' combines modal/auxiliary and inflected verb incorrectly — use simple past 'gave' to match context (modal/동사 형태 오류 및 시제). 'very comfortable mind' is unnatural; use 'a very comfortable feeling' (형용사/명사 선택). 'perks' is misspelling of 'parks' and plural needed; use 'parks' or 'the parks' (철자 및 관사/복수). Suggestion: simplify clauses, ensure correct verb forms after 'learned to', match tense across the sentence, use correct prepositions 'go on a picnic/ go on picnics', and use 'parks' for general places.

× Yes, I still like going to the park because nowadays I like to take a walk when I very stressful.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park because nowadays I like to take a walk when I am very stressed.

'when I very stressful' is ungrammatical: adjectives need a linking verb with a subject, so use 'I am very stressed' (be 동사 필요). 'stressed' is an adjective, not an adverb; do not use 'stressful' to describe a person (단어 선택). Also maintain present simple 'I am' for current states (시제). Suggestion: use 'I feel stressed' or 'I am very stressed' for clarity.

× When I have a very stressed emotion, I usually go to the park and take a walk to get relaxed.

✓ When I feel very stressed, I usually go to the park and take a walk to relax.

'have a very stressed emotion' is unnatural; use 'feel very stressed' (동사/표현 선택). 'to get relaxed' is awkward; use the infinitive 'to relax' or 'to feel relaxed' (동사 형태). Also 'have' with 'emotion' is incorrect collocation here. Ensure present simple 'When I feel' fits habitual action (시제 및 표현 선택). Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'feel stressed' and 'go for a walk to relax.'

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I think every parks has their own.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I think every park has its own characteristics.

'every parks' is incorrect: 'every' is followed by a singular noun, so use 'every park' (관사/수 일치). 'has their own' uses plural pronoun 'their' with singular 'every park' and missing noun 'characteristics' — use singular possessive 'its' and include the noun: 'its own characteristics' (대명사 및 명사 누락). Suggestion: use 'every park has its own characteristics.'

× And I want to go each parks and feel some different feelings.

✓ I want to visit each park and experience different feelings.

'go each parks' is ungrammatical: use 'visit each park' (동사 및 수 일치). 'each' takes a singular noun. 'feel some different feelings' is repetitive and vague; use 'experience different feelings' or 'feel different emotions' for natural phrasing (어휘 선택 및 문장 구조). Suggestion: avoid redundant words and use 'each park' + appropriate verb.

× I want to go to the Central Park in New York because when I was young I watched the documentary of New York and I think that Central Park is very calming places for many people, so I want to go there.

✓ I want to go to Central Park in New York because when I was young I watched a documentary about New York, and I think that Central Park is a very calming place for many people, so I want to go there.

'the Central Park' — usually 'Central Park' without 'the' (관사 오류). 'a documentary of New York' should be 'a documentary about New York' (전치사 사용). 'is very calming places' mixes singular and plural — use singular 'is a very calming place' (단수/복수 일치). Maintain present tense 'I want' for future intention and past 'I watched' for past action (시제). Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('about'), correct article use with proper nouns, and ensure singular/plural agreement ('place' vs 'places').