Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and use correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix verb tenses (use past for childhood), articles (a/the), and plural forms. Avoid repetition.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I felt comfortable and enjoyed many activities there because my friends and I would meet to play games and explore the playgrounds.

Gợi ý: Begin with a direct answer and use correct present tense and clear reason. Use linking words (however, because) to connect ideas. Correct vocabulary such as 'moved to other cities' and avoid repeating words.

Ví dụ: I still like parks, but I don't enjoy them as much now because my friends have moved to other cities, so I usually go alone.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and give one specific reason with clear linking words. Use correct nouns and quantifiers (more parks, more people), and avoid vague phrases. Mention a concrete benefit to the city.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because more green spaces would encourage children and families to exercise and play, which would improve public health and community life.

Gợi ý: Give a clear direct answer and specific reasons. Use formal contractions (want to) and correct descriptions (amusement parks have rides, pools, and attractions). Avoid vague phrases like 'all doing' and 'have funds'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I want to visit an amusement park in the future because it has many attractions such as rides, water pools, and games, which would make it a fun and memorable trip.

× Yes, I'm very glad when I go to park because I'm very comfortable in park and I'm enjoying all things and I do all activities when I am child and I go to park because my friends meet up and play all.

✓ Yes, I was very happy when I went to the park as a child because I felt comfortable there; I enjoyed everything and did many activities, and I went to the park because my friends met up and played there.

Multiple tense and article errors: The speaker refers to childhood, so past tense should be used (go -> went, am -> was, am enjoying -> enjoyed, do -> did). 'Park' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. 'When I am child' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'as a child'. Combine clauses for clarity and natural flow. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past experiences and include 'the' before 'park'.

× Yeah, but this time I'm not enjoying in park because my friends do not meet up and my friends shift on other other cities though, so this time I'm not glad.

✓ Yes, but now I don't enjoy going to the park because my friends don't meet up; they have moved to other cities, so I'm not happy now.

Tense and preposition errors: 'This time' and present situation call for present simple ('do not meet up' -> 'don't meet up') and present simple for general states ('I'm not enjoying' -> 'I don't enjoy' or 'I don't enjoy going'). 'In park' needs 'the' and usually 'going to the park'. 'Shift on other other cities' is wrong: use 'moved to other cities'. Avoid repetition 'other other'. Use 'happy' instead of 'glad' for naturalness. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('to the park', 'moved to') and consistent present tense for current situations.

× Yes, I see more parks in my city because you have a lot of park in your city. So then more of more of pupils come in park and enjoying and playing and doing all activities and development of your city. This is.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we don't have many parks. Then more children would come to the parks to enjoy, play, and take part in activities, which would help the development of the city.

Pronoun and article errors and sentence structure issues: The student switches from 'I' to 'you' incorrectly ('you have a lot of park in your city') and omits articles ('a lot of parks'). 'Pupils come in park' should be 'children would come to the parks'. 'Enjoying and playing and doing all activities' needs verb forms and connectors. 'Development of your city' should be 'the development of the city' or 'city development'. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent (I/we), use plural 'parks' and proper articles, and use modal 'would' to express hypothetical results.

× Yeah actually I wanna go amusement park in future because I saw amusement park is very big and doing all activities and included more have funds and lot of doing activities like a pool and all doing.

✓ Yes, actually I want to go to an amusement park in the future because they are very big and offer many activities, such as pools and rides.

Informal and incorrect verb forms and article use: 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. 'Go amusement park' needs 'go to an amusement park'. 'In future' -> 'in the future'. 'I saw amusement park is very big' should be generalized or past: use 'they are very big' or 'it looked very big'. 'Included more have funds' is unclear and ungrammatical; remove or clarify. 'Lot of doing activities like a pool' -> 'offer many activities, such as pools and rides'. Suggestion: use 'want to', include articles ('an'), and choose clear verbs ('offer', 'have').