Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid grammar errors (e.g., verb forms, articles) and redundant phrases. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Not really. When I was a child I preferred staying indoors because I liked playing video games and reading books. Also, there weren’t many good parks near my home, so I rarely had the chance to visit them.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and complete the thought. Use correct tense and clear reason why your preference changed. Keep it to two or three sentences and include a linking word such as “but” or “however.”

Ví dụ: Not as much as some people, but I do visit parks more often now than I did as a child. As I grew older I appreciated green spaces for exercise and relaxation, so I try to go to nearby parks on weekends.

Gợi ý: Give a complete, well-structured answer: one clear opinion sentence followed by specific reasons. Avoid unfinished ideas and word choice errors (e.g., “de stress” should be “de-stress” or “relax”). Add an example of how parks help people.

Ví dụ: Definitely. Parks provide places where people can relax and de-stress after work, and they encourage exercise and social interaction. For example, a local park with walking paths and benches would make it easy for neighbors to meet and unwind.

Gợi ý: Clarify the park name and correct grammar. Use one or two specific places and explain why you want to visit them. Avoid repetition and use correct verb forms and articles.

Ví dụ: I’d love to visit Hyde Park in London because I’ve seen it in magazines and films and it looks beautiful. I’m also interested in exploring nearby national parks to experience different landscapes and wildlife.

× I'm not a fan of exploring the parks.

✓ I'm not a fan of exploring parks.

The definite article 'the' before 'parks' incorrectly implies specific parks already known. Use the plural noun without article to mean parks in general. Suggestion: remove 'the' when speaking about parks in general.

× When I was a child I preferred to stay indoors, like playing the game console or getting lost in a good books.

✓ When I was a child I preferred to stay indoors, like playing video games or getting lost in a good book.

Errors: 'the game console' is awkward for a general hobby and 'books' should be singular after 'a good'. Use 'video games' or 'playing on the game console' and 'a good book'. Suggestion: choose the correct noun form and match the article to the noun.

× Additionally, there aren't many nice parks near my home so I really have a good get a chance to explore them.

✓ Additionally, there weren't many nice parks near my home, so I rarely had a chance to explore them.

Tense and structure are mixed and phrase 'have a good get a chance' is ungrammatical. The context is past, so use past 'weren't' and 'rarely had a chance'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use idiomatic expression 'had a chance'.

× Back when I was a child, I rarely go to parks to explore, but as I grew older, I found that the City of Parks gives me a chance to.

✓ Back when I was a child, I rarely went to parks to explore, but as I grew older, I found that the City of Parks gave me a chance to.

Mix of past and present verbs: 'go' and 'gives' should be in past to match 'Back when I was a child' and 'as I grew older, I found'. Use 'went' and 'gave'. Suggestion: maintain past tense sequence when describing past events.

× Definitely, since parks are a great way for individuals to have a space that could help them de stress and unwind after a long day at work and also it could be a sense of.

✓ Definitely, since parks are a great way for people to have a space that can help them de-stress and unwind after a long day at work, and they can also provide a sense of community.

Problems: 'de stress' should be hyphenated 'de-stress' or written 'de-stress' as one word; 'individuals' is formal—'people' fits better; sentence was incomplete 'a sense of' needs object; 'it could be' mismatched pronoun. Suggestion: complete the idea and use consistent pronouns and vocabulary.

× I'm looking forward to see myself the gender park in London since I always just saw it on magazines and movies.

✓ I'm looking forward to seeing the Garden Park in London since I have only seen it in magazines and movies.

After 'looking forward to' use gerund '-ing' (seeing). 'See myself' is unnecessary; use 'seeing'. Also 'gender' likely a typo for 'Garden', and 'just saw it on magazines and movies' needs present perfect 'have only seen it in'. Suggestion: use gerund after 'look forward to' and correct collocations.

× I also be interested in visiting local national local local parks.

✓ I am also interested in visiting local and national parks.

'I also be interested' is ungrammatical; use 'I am interested'. Repetition 'local national local local' is erroneous; likely intended 'local and national parks'. Suggestion: use correct auxiliary 'am' for present state and remove duplicate words.