Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question (Yes/No) and then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations and unneeded repetition. Use linking words (e.g., because, so, therefore) to connect ideas and use correct verb forms and articles.

Ví dụ: Not really. We rarely went to parks because our house was far from the city centre. Instead, I spent most afternoons playing in the local street with my childhood friends, where we rode bikes and played football.

Gợi ý: Give a clear, direct answer and one specific reason. Avoid repeating childhood information already given. Keep to two or three sentences and use linking words (however, because, but) to show contrast between past and present.

Ví dụ: Not really. Because I rarely went to parks as a child, I never developed the habit of visiting them, so I don't go often now. However, I sometimes visit parks when friends invite me or when I want a quiet walk.

Gợi ý: Answer directly (Yes/No/Maybe) and give a clear, specific reason. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and concise phrasing. Mention a concrete benefit (children's play, exercise, green space) to make your point stronger.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. More parks would give children safe places to play and encourage families visiting from other towns to spend time outdoors. For example, parks can provide playgrounds and open spaces for sports and family picnics.

Gợi ý: Be specific about a park or type of park you'd like to visit and explain why. Limit to two or three sentences, use linking words (because, for example) and avoid vague phrases like "new things"—give concrete examples of activities or sights you expect.

Ví dụ: Yes. I'd like to visit large urban parks abroad, such as Central Park in New York or Hyde Park in London, because they offer cultural events, diverse gardens and people-watching opportunities. For example, I would enjoy watching outdoor concerts and exploring botanical areas.

× Growing up UMM, it is seldom for us to go to park because our house is far from the umm center or in the city where the park is located.

✓ Growing up, it was rare for us to go to the park because our house was far from the center of the city where the park is located.

Pronoun and demonstrative errors: 'it is seldom for us' is unnatural; use 'it was rare for us' to match past time. 'to go to park' requires the definite article 'the park' because a specific park(s) is implied. 'the umm center or in the city' is awkward; 'the center of the city' is clearer. Also tense consistency: student refers to childhood so use past tense 'was'. Suggestion: use clear subjects and proper articles and keep tense consistent.

× Uh me, I spent my days in the street, our local street where I played with my childhood best friends there and we also happy.

✓ I spent my days on our local street where I played with my childhood best friends, and we were also happy.

Pronoun and verb form issues: 'Uh me, I' is redundant; use 'I'. Preposition for streets is 'on' not 'in'. 'we also happy' lacks a verb; add past tense 'were' to match childhood time. Remove redundant 'there'. Suggestion: keep sentences concise, use correct prepositions and include required auxiliary verbs for past tense.

× With the experience before, umm, going to park, is that uh, mainly our source of joy as a child and we didn't used to go to parks, so it is not umm, my thing to go to park until, uh, today.

✓ From past experience, going to the park was mainly a source of joy as a child, and we didn't use to go to parks, so it wasn't really my thing to go to the park until today.

Tense and verb form errors: mix of present and past tenses is confusing. 'With the experience before' should be 'From past experience'. 'going to park, is that uh, mainly our source' mixes present with past; use past 'was'. 'didn't used to' is incorrect; correct form is 'didn't use to'. Articles: 'go to park' needs 'the park'. Maintain past tense when describing childhood and use 'until today' to indicate change. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct negative 'didn't use to'.

× Being not able to go to park, uh, in a very many times it is.

✓ I wasn't able to go to the park very often.

Number and structure errors: 'in a very many times' is incorrect; 'very often' is the correct adverbial phrase. 'go to park' requires 'the park'. Also sentence structure is awkward; rephrase to 'I wasn't able to go to the park very often.' Suggestion: use natural adverbials ('often', 'frequently') and correct articles.

× But for me it is OK to have more parks in the city for the children to play if there are a lot of children not just from the city but also outside from the city visiting their families.

✓ But for me, it's OK to have more parks in the city so children can play, not only for local children but also for those visiting from outside the city to see their families.

Run-on and awkward structure: sentence is long and repetitive. 'for the children to play' is better expressed as 'so children can play'. 'outside from the city' is incorrect — use 'from outside the city'. Simplify and parallelize the two groups: 'local children' and 'those visiting from outside the city'. Suggestion: break long ideas into clearer clauses and use parallel structure for contrasting groups.

× Yeah, but the only part that I wanted to go in the future is I want it from outside the country where I can see new things, new people, new experience and new activities that the other country offered in their park.

✓ Yes, but the only place I want to go in the future is parks in other countries where I can see new things, meet new people, have new experiences, and try new activities that other countries offer in their parks.

Article and word choice errors: 'the only part' should be 'the only place'. 'I want it from outside the country' is incorrect; express desire to go 'to parks in other countries'. Use plural 'parks' if referring generally. 'new experience' should be plural 'new experiences' for parallelism. Tense consistency: 'offered' should be 'offer' because you are speaking generally about what other countries offer. Also replace 'their park' with 'their parks' or 'parks there'. Suggestion: use correct nouns for place, ensure parallel lists and use simple present for general truths.