Parks— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently for childhood, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid redundancy.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved going to the park when I was a child. It was peaceful, and I often went there with my mother to feed the ducks or sit under the big trees.

Gợi ý: Make the response more natural and grammatical. Use present tense, a clear topic sentence, and one specific supporting detail connected by a linking word. Remove filler phrases and keep it concise.

Ví dụ: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks sometimes. For example, I often go with friends and we sit on benches eating ice cream while chatting.

Gợi ý: Avoid vague or contradictory statements and explain reasons clearly. Begin with a direct answer, then give one specific reason with a linking word. Use more natural vocabulary (e.g., unnecessary rather than not valuable).

Ví dụ: No, I don't think we need more parks in my city because the current park meets most residents' needs and additional parks would be unnecessary given limited space.

Gợi ý: Good conditional detail—improve grammar and conciseness. Start with a clear direct answer, then use a conditional clause to show possibility, and correct verb forms. Keep it to two concise sentences.

Ví dụ: No, I don't plan to visit any parks in the near future because I don't expect new ones to be built nearby. However, if an attractive park were created close to my home, I might visit it occasionally.

× Yes, I was a child. I like to go to the park because it's very peaceful for me. So I go to the park with my mother.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I liked to go to the park because it was very peaceful for me. I went to the park with my mother.

The response mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be in the past tense: 'was a child' is fine but surrounding verbs need past forms. Use 'when I was a child' for clarity, 'liked' and 'was' for past description, and 'went' for habitual past action. Suggestion: keep all verbs referring to childhood in past tense and add 'when' to link the time clause.

× Yes I like to go in park sometimes I go with my friends and we eat ice cream like that so my I like it.

✓ Yes, I like to go to the park sometimes. I go with my friends and we eat ice cream. I like it.

This sentence has preposition and sentence structure issues and inconsistent phrasing. Use 'to the park' not 'in park'. Split into clearer sentences and remove extra filler 'like that so my'. Keep present simple for habitual actions ('I like', 'I go', 'we eat'). Suggestion: use correct preposition 'to', separate ideas into sentences, and avoid filler words.

× No, actually no, because 1 park is enough in my city. I think many parks, it's not good, it's not valuable.

✓ No, actually not, because one park is enough in my city. I think having many parks is not necessary and not valuable.

Use 'one' instead of numeric '1' in formal speech. The second sentence has incorrect sentence structure and comma splice. Rephrase to a noun clause 'having many parks' as the subject and use 'is not necessary/valuable'. Suggestion: write numbers as words in speech transcripts and avoid comma splices by forming a complete clause.

× No, I don't plan to go to any parks in the future because I don't expect many new parks will be made where I live.

✓ No, I don't plan to go to any parks in the future because I don't expect many new parks to be built where I live.

Use the correct verb form 'to be built' or 'to be made' in a to-infinitive or passive construction. 'Will be made' after 'expect' is less natural; 'expect many new parks to be built' is the preferred structure. Suggestion: after 'expect' use 'to' + passive infinitive for anticipated events ('expect X to be done').

× If a new attractive Parkway created nearby I might visit, but at the moment I don't see that happening.

✓ If a new attractive parkway is created nearby, I might visit, but at the moment I don't see that happening.

The conditional clause is missing the auxiliary 'is' for the passive voice: 'If ... is created'. Also 'Parkway' is capitalized unnecessarily; use 'parkway' unless it's a proper name. Commas are needed after the conditional clause. Suggestion: include the auxiliary verb in conditional clauses and punctuate the sentence with a comma after the 'if' clause.