Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and concise: remove hesitations (uh, I’d), correct word choice (machinery → scenery/views), and finish sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views because I find natural scenery very inspiring. For example, when I see a panoramic mountain or lakeside, I often stop to capture the moment with my camera. I feel connected to nature, so I try to document scenes that look breathtaking.

Gợi ý: Improve grammatical accuracy and coherence: use correct articles and singular/plural (a rural area, mountains and lakesides), reduce fillers (uh), and use a linking phrase to compare (whereas, because). Provide one specific example to support your preference.

Ví dụ: I prefer rural areas for photography because they offer natural features like mountains and lakesides that create beautiful scenery. For example, when I visit the countryside I can capture wide landscapes and tranquil water reflections, whereas city shots are often blocked by high-rise buildings.

Gợi ý: Be concise and avoid repetition: remove filler phrases (honestly speaking, uh) and repetitive statements. Use clearer linking (because, for example) and give one specific example of a type of scenery you enjoy in your country. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer viewing and photographing landscapes in my own country because India offers a wide range of scenery, from Himalayan peaks to coastal beaches. For instance, I can photograph snow-capped mountains in the north and tropical backwaters in the south without traveling abroad.

× Yes, I'd, I would love to take the pictures of different views when the machinery is beautiful and breathtaking.

✓ Yes, I would love to take pictures of different views when the scenery is beautiful and breathtaking.

The phrase 'take the pictures' is unnatural; 'take pictures' is the normal collocation. 'Machinery' is incorrect in this context; likely 'scenery' or 'landscape' is intended. No -ing form correction needed here but the main issue is word choice and article use: 'the' before pictures is unnecessary. Suggest using 'scenery' and omit 'the' before 'pictures' to sound natural.

× Sometimes when I go outside, I see uh, a panoramic view and that really attracts me and then I capture those moment because uh, I'm very much attached to the nature and I would.

✓ Sometimes when I go outside, I see a panoramic view and it really attracts me, so I capture those moments because I'm very attached to nature.

Plural agreement and unnecessary articles: 'those moment' should be 'those moments' (singular/plural issue). 'That really attracts me and then I capture' is slightly awkward; use 'it really attracts me, so I capture'. 'Attached to the nature' should be 'attached to nature' (no definite article). Also remove filler 'uh' and the unfinished ending 'and I would.' Suggestions: ensure subject-verb consistency and correct plural noun, remove unnecessary articles.

× Mostly I prefer views in a rural areas than taking pictures in urban because I feel rural areas are having mountain and lakeside which gives you a beautiful uh scenery.

✓ Mostly I prefer views in rural areas to taking pictures in urban areas because I feel rural areas have mountains and lakesides which give you beautiful scenery.

Article and preposition errors: 'a rural areas' is wrong; use 'rural areas' without 'a'. Comparative structure: use 'prefer X to Y' not 'prefer X than'. 'Have' instead of 'are having' (present simple vs progressive). 'Mountain and lakeside' should be plural 'mountains and lakesides'. 'Which gives you a beautiful scenery' should be 'which give you beautiful scenery' (plural subject, uncountable 'scenery' no 'a'). Suggestions: use 'prefer ... to ...', pluralize countable nouns, use present simple for general facts, and omit unnecessary articles before uncountable nouns.

× Uh in city areas it's quite difficult to see the nature because already there are high rise constructed buildings.

✓ In city areas it's quite difficult to see nature because there are already high-rise buildings.

Article error and word order: 'the nature' should be 'nature' (no article). 'High rise constructed buildings' is awkward; 'high-rise buildings' is the standard phrase. 'Already' should come before or after 'there are' depending on emphasis; 'there are already high-rise buildings' is natural. Use hyphen for 'high-rise'. Suggest simplifying phrases and using standard collocations.

× Honestly speaking, I prefer to, uh, see views in my country because my country is quite big and has all the different sceneries available around you.

✓ Honestly, I prefer to see views in my country because it is quite large and has many different types of scenery available.

Word choice and article use: 'sceneries' is rarely used; 'scenery' is uncountable and 'many different types of scenery' is better. 'My country is quite big' is acceptable but 'large' is more formal. 'Available around you' is informal/awkward; use 'available' or 'throughout the country'. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestions: use 'scenery' as uncountable, avoid redundant phrases like 'around you'.

× I don't think so we need to go anywhere just to see the sceneries because we have the big landscape here in India.

✓ I don't think we need to go anywhere just to see scenery because we have vast landscapes here in India.

Word order and article issues: 'I don't think so we need' should be 'I don't think we need' (remove 'so'). 'Sceneries' should be 'scenery' or 'sceneries' replaced by 'scenery' as uncountable. 'The big landscape' is awkward; use 'vast landscapes'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary words, use correct noun forms, and choose appropriate adjectives ('vast').

× So I would definitely love to take photos there.

✓ So I would definitely love to take photos there.

No major grammatical error; sentence is acceptable. Keep as is. Suggestion: can omit 'So' at the start for conciseness.