Views— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant but long-winded and has several hesitations and unclear phrases. To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question. 2) Reduce fillers ("you know", "like") and avoid unrelated phrases ("I do really laugh"). 3) Use one or two specific reasons and one brief example. 4) Keep your response under 4–5 sentences and use linking words (e.g., "because", "so", "for example").

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember places I have visited. For example, I often photograph mountain landscapes and city skylines to look back on later. I also like sharing a few of my best photos with friends so we can talk about the trip.

Gợi ý: Good choice and relevant reasons, but the answer contains repetition and fillers. To improve: 1) Give a direct topic sentence. 2) Remove repeated phrases and hesitations. 3) Add one specific detail or brief example about what you enjoy (e.g., scenery, quietness, local life). 4) Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "for instance").

Ví dụ: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and more scenic. For instance, I enjoy visiting small villages where I can see rice fields and old wooden houses, which helps me relax during holidays. Moreover, the fresh air and quiet countryside make the experience more refreshing.

Gợi ý: The answer is understandable but has factual/confusing phrasing ("my own Guantanamo" then "Myanmar") and awkward expressions ("so much places", "some artifice", "need to view"). To improve: 1) State your preference clearly and consistently. 2) Correct grammar ("many places") and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "architecture", "crafts", "traditions"). 3) Give one concrete example of cultural features you appreciate. 4) Avoid vague words and keep it concise.

Ví dụ: I prefer views in my own country because I can appreciate local culture and traditional architecture. For example, in Myanmar I love photographing ancient temples and local festivals, which tell me more about our history. These familiar scenes are more meaningful to me than views abroad.

× Well, I think everyone, including me, likes taking pictures of different views because when we are taking in the view, we also like taking pictures of different landscapes so that, you know, we admire the view and then we take pictures as memories to look back. So for me, like I do really laugh.

✓ Well, I think everyone, including me, likes taking pictures of different views because when we take in a view, we also like taking pictures of different landscapes so that we can admire the view and then keep the pictures as memories to look back on. For me, I really enjoy it.

Issues corrected: 'when we are taking in the view' -> 'when we take in a view' (present simple preferred for habitual actions); 'so that, you know, we admire' -> 'so that we can admire' (adds modal to express purpose); 'take pictures as memories to look back' -> 'keep the pictures as memories to look back on' (plural/singular clarity and natural collocation). Also changed 'I do really laugh' to 'I really enjoy it' because 'laugh' is incorrect verb for meaning enjoyment. Suggestions: use present simple for habitual actions, use 'can' or 'in order to' for purpose, and choose verbs that match intended meaning (enjoy vs laugh).

× Of course, rural areas, because when I have holidays, I often go off the beaten track just to, you know, explore the hidden villages in rural areas because I feel like it's a kind of a, you know, unwinding stress.

✓ Of course, rural areas, because when I have holidays, I often go off the beaten track to explore the hidden villages in rural areas since I feel it helps me unwind and reduce stress.

Issues corrected: 'just to, you know, explore' -> fine but tightened to 'to explore' (infinitive expresses purpose); 'I feel like it's a kind of a, you know, unwinding stress' -> 'I feel it helps me unwind and reduce stress' (original used noun phrase awkwardly; 'unwinding' as gerund misused with 'stress'). Suggestions: use 'to' + base verb for purpose, avoid filler words, and use clear noun/verb combinations (help + verb, reduce stress).

× Definitely views in my own Guantanamo because in Myanmar there are so much places where I can actually admire the cultural values and, you know, some artifice in my country. So I would say I really need to view in my own country.

✓ Definitely views in my own country because in Myanmar there are so many places where I can admire the cultural values and some artifacts. So I would say I really prefer to view places in my own country.

Issues corrected: 'Guantanamo' likely wrong place name—replaced with 'country' to match context; 'so much places' -> 'so many places' (quantifier for countable noun); 'some artifice' -> 'some artifacts' (wrong word choice: 'artifice' means cunning, 'artifact' means cultural object); 'I really need to view' -> 'I really prefer to view places' (use 'prefer' to express preference; 'need to view' is unnatural). Suggestions: use 'many' with countable nouns, choose correct vocabulary (artifact), and use verbs that match meaning (prefer rather than need).