Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you prefer typing or handwriting?
Thí sinh
Well, actually I prefer handwriting because I always has many wrong when I typing in my laptop, but while writing can make me more careful.
Giám khảo
Do you type on a desktop or laptop keyboard every day?
Thí sinh
Well, I used to type on my laptop keyboard every day because I think laptop is still convenient when I have a trip on other city or I work outside.
Giám khảo
When did you learn how to type on a keyboard?
Thí sinh
Oh, actually I don't have clearly memory on it, but I think maybe when I'm 12 years old, because in my memory in my childhood I used to play, uh, computer games, so I must be born to use.
Giám khảo
How do you improve your typing?
Thí sinh
Well, I just spent four to five hours in my every day and I use my laptop to spell the English words or use my laptop to have a communicate with my friend in WeChat rather than my phone.
Do you prefer typing or handwriting?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 语法和时态需要改正,句子结构要更自然、简洁;增加具体原因并使用连接词使表达连贯。例如改正动词形式(have → have, typing → type),并补充细节说明为什么更认真。
Ví dụ: I prefer handwriting because I tend to make many mistakes when I type on my laptop, while writing by hand helps me slow down and pay more attention to my spelling and grammar.
Do you type on a desktop or laptop keyboard every day?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 注意时态和词汇搭配,避免不必要的词语。用更自然的短句并补充具体场景以加强内容连贯性,比如说明出差或在咖啡馆工作的情况。
Ví dụ: I usually type on my laptop every day because it's convenient when I travel to another city or work outside, for example in cafés or at clients' offices.
When did you learn how to type on a keyboard?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 句子要更准确并纠正语法(I don't have a clear memory; maybe when I was 12)并删去口语填充词。增加具体回忆或例子,如第一台电脑或在学校学会,以增加内容。
Ví dụ: I don't remember exactly, but I think I learned to type when I was about 12 because I started playing computer games and using the family PC a lot at that age.
How do you improve your typing?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 句子应更简洁并纠正语法(I spend; every day 放句末)。说明具体练习方法并使用连接词,例如在线练习、打字软件或有计划的练习时间,这样更有说服力。
Ví dụ: I usually spend four to five hours a day on my laptop, practising by typing English words, chatting with friends on WeChat, and using online typing exercises to improve my speed and accuracy.
× Well, actually I prefer handwriting because I always has many wrong when I typing in my laptop, but while writing can make me more careful.
✓ Well, actually I prefer handwriting because I always make many mistakes when I type on my laptop, and writing makes me more careful.
此句有主谓一致错误与动词形式错误: 1) “I always has” 中 has 与主语 I 不一致,应改为 make(I make mistakes)或 have mistakes(I always have many mistakes),更自然的是 make many mistakes。 2) “when I typing” 中 typing 用法错误,应用动词原形或第三人称形式与助动词连用;此处无助动词,改为 when I type。 3) 句子连接处逻辑与时态需调整,原句“but while writing can make me more careful”缺主语,改为 “and writing makes me more careful”。 建议:注意主语与动词的一致性(I 用 make/ have 而不是 has),动名词作状语时注意结构(when + 主语 + 动词原形),以及确保每个从句有明确主语。
× Well, I used to type on my laptop keyboard every day because I think laptop is still convenient when I have a trip on other city or I work outside.
✓ Well, I used to type on my laptop keyboard every day because I think a laptop is still convenient when I travel to another city or work outside.
此句时态与冠词/介词使用需改进: 1) “used to” 表示过去习惯,后面接原因可以用一般现在时说明观点(I think),这是可以的。 2) 应在 laptop 前加不定冠词 a,表示“笔记本电脑”。 3) “when I have a trip on other city” 中介词和用词不当,常用表达是 travel to another city(去另一个城市旅行),或 have a trip to another city。建议使用 travel to another city。 建议:注意冠词 a/an 的使用,以及常用动词搭配(travel to, go to)。
× Oh, actually I don't have clearly memory on it, but I think maybe when I'm 12 years old, because in my memory in my childhood I used to play, uh, computer games, so I must be born to use.
✓ Oh, actually I don't have a clear memory of it, but I think maybe when I was 12 years old, because I remember playing computer games in my childhood, so I must have learned to use it then.
此句存在多处句子结构和用法错误: 1) “don't have clearly memory” 中 clearly 为副词,应使用形容词 clear 和不定冠词 a:a clear memory。且介词用 of 而非 on。 2) “when I'm 12 years old” 时态错误,过去时间应使用过去时:when I was 12 years old。 3) “in my memory in my childhood I used to play, uh, computer games” 冗余且不通顺,改为 I remember playing computer games in my childhood。 4) “so I must be born to use” 完全错误和不符合逻辑,意图应为“所以我一定学会使用它”,用 must have learned to use it。 建议:注意形容词/副词的区分(clear vs clearly)、适当的介词(memory of)、保持时态一致(过去事件用过去时),以及用常见表达更清晰地传达意思。
× Well, I just spent four to five hours in my every day and I use my laptop to spell the English words or use my laptop to have a communicate with my friend in WeChat rather than my phone.
✓ Well, I just spend four to five hours on it every day, and I use my laptop to spell English words or to communicate with my friends on WeChat rather than use my phone.
此句主要时态和介词用法不当: 1) “I just spent” 与 every day 连用应为一般现在时表示习惯:I just spend four to five hours every day。若强调过去可用 spent,但与 every day 不搭。 2) “in my every day” 介词错误,常用表达是 every day 或 on it every day(指时间花在它上面)。 3) “to spell the English words” 用词不自然,通常说 spell English words(不加定冠词)。 4) “to have a communicate with my friend” 中 communicate 是动词,不可与 communicate 一起用名词形式;改为 to communicate with my friends。并将 friend 用复数更自然。 建议:习惯性动作用一般现在时;注意介词短语(every day, spend time on sth); communicate 用法为动词或名词,要匹配正确形式。