Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?
Thí sinh
When I travelling I prefer to sit by the window because when I sit there I will I feel good
Giám khảo
Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?
Thí sinh
When I was a child I had a long journey with my family for example for Dubai We flied to this by plane for five hours and been there long.
Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence and use the correct present tense: “When I travel, I prefer…”. Avoid repeating “when I sit there” and “I will I feel.” Explain specifically why you enjoy the window seat, such as enjoying the view, feeling less bored, or taking photos. Add one supporting detail with a linking word such as “because” or “also.”
Ví dụ: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery outside. It also makes the journey more interesting, especially when I am travelling by train or plane. Sometimes, I take photos of beautiful landscapes.
Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: Answer the question directly at the beginning, for example, “Yes, I did.” Use the correct past-tense forms “flew” instead of “flied” and “spent” or “stayed” instead of “been there long.” Organize the details in a logical order by mentioning the destination, transport, duration, and your experience. Use linking words such as “for example,” “although,” or “because,” and avoid unclear phrases like “for Dubai” and “flew to this.”
Ví dụ: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family and I flew to Dubai, and the journey took about five hours. It was quite a long trip for me because I was young, but I enjoyed spending time with my family and looking out of the plane window.
× When I travelling I prefer to sit by the window because when I sit there I will I feel good
✓ When I am travelling, I prefer to sit by the window because I feel good when I sit there.
The present participle travelling needs the auxiliary verb am to form the present continuous: am travelling. Use am, is, or are before a verb ending in -ing.
× When I travelling I prefer to sit by the window because when I sit there I will I feel good
✓ When I am travelling, I prefer to sit by the window because I feel good when I sit there.
Will is used for future meanings, but this sentence describes a general present preference and feeling. Use the present simple feel instead. Also, the repeated subject I after will is unnecessary.
× When I was a child I had a long journey with my family for example for Dubai We flied to this by plane for five hours and been there long.
✓ When I was a child, I had a long journey with my family. For example, we flew to Dubai by plane, and the flight took five hours.
Use to before a destination, such as to Dubai. The preposition for is not used to introduce the destination of a journey. Use for five hours to describe duration.
× When I was a child I had a long journey with my family for example for Dubai We flied to this by plane for five hours and been there long.
✓ When I was a child, I had a long journey with my family. For example, we flew to Dubai by plane, and the flight took five hours.
The past tense of fly is flew, not flied. Because the journey happened when you were a child, use past-tense forms such as had, flew, and took.
× When I was a child I had a long journey with my family for example for Dubai We flied to this by plane for five hours and been there long.
✓ When I was a child, I had a long journey with my family. For example, we flew to Dubai by plane, and the flight took five hours.
This cannot refer naturally to a destination such as Dubai. Do not use a pronoun here; name the destination directly: we flew to Dubai.
× When I was a child I had a long journey with my family for example for Dubai We flied to this by plane for five hours and been there long.
✓ When I was a child, I had a long journey with my family. For example, we flew to Dubai by plane, and we stayed there for a long time.
The phrase been there long is incomplete because it has no finite auxiliary verb. Use a complete past-tense clause, such as we stayed there for a long time. Separate the example into a clear sentence and connect the clauses properly.