Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?
Thí sinh
Well, I prefer to sit by the windows when I'm traveling because I like to quiet place and relax myself and also can ignore other people's bosen, and also I could take some pictures with beautiful set scenes and feel better.
Giám khảo
Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?
Thí sinh
No, I had never had a chance to spend a long journey with my parents because my parents are not being with me when I was a kid. My grandparents as my compion, they took me to different places. I think this is a good experience too.
Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: 回答切题,也给出了多个理由,但句子过长,连接词重复使用了多次“and also”。注意语法:应说“sit by the window”“like a quiet place”“relax”“ignore other people’s conversations/noise”和“take pictures of beautiful scenery”。建议先直接回答偏好,再用“because”和“Besides”分别补充两个具体理由,使表达更自然、清晰。
Ví dụ: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I enjoy having a quiet space where I can relax and avoid unnecessary noise from other passengers. Besides, I can take pictures of the beautiful scenery outside, which makes the journey more enjoyable.
Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?
Điểm: 64.0Gợi ý: 回答包含了否定回答、原因和相关经历,内容比较完整,但时态和句子结构需要改进。“had never had a chance”在这里不自然,直接说“I didn’t have many chances”即可;“my parents are not being with me”应改为“my parents weren’t with me”;“My grandparents as my companion”应改为“My grandparents accompanied me”或“My grandparents were my companions”。建议用过去时保持一致,并具体说明旅行带来的收获。
Ví dụ: No, I didn’t have many long journeys with my parents because they weren’t often with me when I was a child. Instead, my grandparents accompanied me on trips to different places. I really enjoyed those journeys because they gave me the chance to see new things and spend quality time with them.
× Well, I prefer to sit by the windows when I'm traveling because I like to quiet place and relax myself and also can ignore other people's bosen, and also I could take some pictures with beautiful set scenes and feel better.
✓ Well, I prefer to sit by the window when I'm traveling because I like to quiet place and relax myself and also can ignore other people's bosen, and also I could take some pictures with beautiful set scenes and feel better.
这里谈的是坐在窗户旁边这一类位置,通常使用单数形式 “the window”。“the windows”表示多个特定的窗户,在此语境中不自然。
× Well, I prefer to sit by the windows when I'm traveling because I like to quiet place and relax myself and also can ignore other people's bosen, and also I could take some pictures with beautiful set scenes and feel better.
✓ Well, I prefer to sit by the windows when I'm traveling because I like a quiet place and relax myself and also can ignore other people's bosen, and also I could take some pictures with beautiful set scenes and feel better.
可数名词单数 “place” 前面需要冠词。这里表示“一个安静的地方”,所以应使用不定冠词 “a”:a quiet place。
× Well, I prefer to sit by the windows when I'm traveling because I like to quiet place and relax myself and also can ignore other people's bosen, and also I could take some pictures with beautiful set scenes and feel better.
✓ Well, I prefer to sit by the windows when I'm traveling because I like to quiet place and relax and also can ignore other people's bosen, and also I could take some pictures with beautiful set scenes and feel better.
“relax”本身就是不及物动词,表示“放松”,通常不需要反身代词。因此应说 “relax”,而不是 “relax myself”。只有在强调“使自己放松”时,才可以使用 “relax myself”。
× Well, I prefer to sit by the windows when I'm traveling because I like to quiet place and relax myself and also can ignore other people's bosen, and also I could take some pictures with beautiful set scenes and feel better.
✓ Well, I prefer to sit by the windows when I'm traveling because I like to quiet place and relax and I can also ignore other people's bosen, and I could also take some pictures with beautiful set scenes and feel better.
“can ignore”前缺少主语,导致句子结构不完整。应补充主语 “I”,改为 “I can also ignore”。并列结构中要保持主语和谓语关系清晰。
× No, I had never had a chance to spend a long journey with my parents because my parents are not being with me when I was a kid.
✓ No, I never had a chance to spend a long journey with my parents because my parents were not with me when I was a kid.
“when I was a kid”明确表示过去时间,因此主句中的 “are not being”不能使用现在时。应改为过去时 “were not”。在回答过去经历时,“I never had”比 “I had never had”更自然。
× My grandparents as my compion, they took me to different places.
✓ My grandparents were my companions, and they took me to different places.
“grandparents”是复数,所以表示“陪伴者”的名词也应使用复数形式 “companions”,不能使用单数 “companion”。
× My grandparents as my compion, they took me to different places.
✓ My grandparents were my companions, and they took me to different places.
原句使用了不完整的结构 “My grandparents as my companion”,并且后面重复使用了主语 “they”。应使用完整的系表结构 “My grandparents were my companions”,再用 “and” 连接后面的分句。
× I think this is a good experience too.
✓ I think this was a good experience too.
这里谈论的是童年时已经发生的经历,因此应使用过去时 “was”,而不是现在时 “is”。主句 “I think” 可以保留现在时,因为这是说话者现在的看法。