Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve clarity, grammar and cohesion. Give a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh), correct pronouns and verb forms, and use one or two linking words to add a brief reason. Be specific about what you enjoy (e.g., landscapes, watching cities). Keep to no more than 3–4 concise sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes. I usually prefer a window seat when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery change outside. For example, I like seeing mountains and rivers during long drives, and I find it relaxing to watch the landscape pass by.

Gợi ý: Focus on producing a clear, grammatically correct response with a topic sentence and supporting details. Remove repetitions and correct tense and word choice (e.g., 'as a child', 'I lived in my hometown', 'we didn't take long trips', 'we went to my parents' hometown'). Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast and give one specific memory or age to support your answer. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: No, I didn’t have many long journeys with my family when I was a child because we lived in our hometown. However, I remember one trip when I was ten: we drove to my parents’ hometown for a festival, and the six-hour journey felt very long to me.

× I always try to sit by the window when traveling, uh, because I wanna see the scenery outside and I enjoy your movement of the vehicle I sit.

✓ I always try to sit by the window when traveling because I want to see the scenery outside and I enjoy the movement of the vehicle when I sit there.

The original sentence misuses 'wanna' (informal contraction) and has unclear phrasing 'your movement of the vehicle I sit.' Use 'want to' for formal correctness and restructure the clause to 'the movement of the vehicle when I sit there.' Also remove filler 'uh' and ensure the gerund 'traveling' correctly follows 'when.' Keep verb forms consistent and natural.

× Well, when I was a trite, I live in I I live in the hometown, so I didn't have any long journey with my family, but we we have 20 go to my parents hometown. So I think that the first.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I lived in my hometown, so I didn't have any long journeys with my family, but we used to go to my parents' hometown. So I think that was the first.

Multiple errors: 'trite' is wrong word choice; correct is 'child' (vocabulary). Tense consistency requires past tense: 'I lived' not 'I live.' Plural 'long journeys' matches context. The phrase 'we used to go' expresses habitual past action instead of unclear 'we have 20 go.' Possessive 'parents'' needs apostrophe. The final fragment 'So I think that the first' is incomplete; revised to 'So I think that was the first' to complete the idea. Remove duplicate words and fillers.