Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Reduce repetition, correct small errors, and make the reply more concise (max 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Correct redundant phrases like “prefer prefer” and “photos and pictures,” and remove unclear phrase “of the of use.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery and it feels more private. For example, on train journeys I often take photos of landscapes, which makes the trip more relaxing and memorable.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition and run-on sentences. Give a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘for example’, ‘so’). Correct repeated phrases like “during my school holiday during the school holidays” and break into shorter sentences for clarity.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often had long journeys with my parents when I was a child because we visited relatives who lived far away. For example, during school holidays we sometimes drove for many hours to see cousins, and I remember bringing games and snacks to pass the time.

× Yes, I definitely prefer prefer to sit by the window when I travel.

✓ Yes, I definitely prefer to sit by the window when I travel.

This sentence contains a repeated word 'prefer prefer', which is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove the duplicate so the verb appears only once. Suggestion: read aloud to catch accidental repetition and edit out duplicates.

× I love watching the scenery go by and I feel it's more comfortable and private.

✓ I love watching the scenery go by, and I feel it is more comfortable and private.

The original is generally correct grammatically but needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses (sentence structure error, ID 26). Also expand the contraction for formality if desired. Suggestion: use a comma before 'and' when connecting two complete clauses.

× Plus I can take photos and pictures of the of use.

✓ Plus, I can take photos and pictures of the view.

The phrase 'photos and pictures of the of use' includes a redundant pairing 'photos and pictures' and a garbled phrase 'of the of use'. The intended noun is likely 'view'. This is a sentence structure and article error (IDs 26 and 22). Suggestion: choose one word ('photos' or 'pictures') and replace the incorrect noun with 'view' to match context; add a comma after 'Plus' for clarity.

× Yes, I did have some long journeys with my parents when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had some long journeys with my parents when I was a child.

Using 'did have' is not ungrammatical but is unnecessary emphatic past tense construction; simpler 'I had' fits better (sentence structure issue, ID 26). Suggestion: use the simple past 'had' for a straightforward statement about childhood.

× My family often took a long trip during my school holiday during the school holidays sometimes we visited our relatives who lived far away so the journey would take many hours.

✓ My family often took long trips during the school holidays. Sometimes we visited relatives who lived far away, so the journey would take many hours.

Original has repetition ('during my school holiday during the school holidays'), missing punctuation, and needs pluralization of 'trip' and 'holidays' (singular/plural and sentence structure issues, IDs 1, 6, 26). Split into two sentences and pluralize to match the habitual past 'often took long trips.' Add a comma before 'so' when it connects clauses. Suggestion: avoid repetition, ensure subject-verb and number agreement, and use punctuation to separate ideas.