Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?
Thí sinh
I really prefer sitting by the window and travelling because I enjoy both the destinations and road views. For example, I like to take photographs when when we saw some mountains or anything else when traveling.
Giám khảo
Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?
Thí sinh
I didn't have any long journey with my family until I'm going to high school because my parents saw that it's difficult to take a child with them for more than ten hours playing or car trip.
Do you prefer to sit by the window when travelling?
Điểm: 74.0Gợi ý: 回答总体自然且有具体内容,但有重复词("when when")、语序与用词可更简练明确。建议开头给出直接的主题句,然后用一到两句具体细节支持,注意时态一致与避免冗余。可以加一个衔接词如“for example”或“because”来组织句子,同时把拍照的动作与看到的景物描述得更具体。
Ví dụ: I prefer sitting by the window when I travel because I enjoy the changing scenery. For example, when we pass mountain ranges or coastal roads, I like to take photos of the landscapes and small villages we see. I also find it relaxing to watch the view rather than stare at a screen.
Did you have a long journey with your family as a child?
Điểm: 61.0Gợi ý: 回答信息明确但语法与时态错误较多,句子较长且结构不够清晰。建议使用一到两句:先用简单过去时说明情况,然后给出原因并用连接词衔接。注意时态一致(过去发生的事用过去时),简化表达并改正词汇搭配(例如“ten hours by car”而非“ten hours playing or car trip”)。
Ví dụ: No, I did not take any long family trips when I was a child. My parents thought it would be too difficult to travel with a young child for more than ten hours, so we mainly stayed close to home until I was in high school.
× I really prefer sitting by the window and travelling because I enjoy both the destinations and road views.
✓ I really prefer sitting by the window when travelling because I enjoy both the destinations and the road views.
问题类型:动词后接 -ing(偏好动词 prefer 后常接动名词形式),句子本身“prefer sitting”是正确的,但原句重复并列短语结构不清晰。将两个并列状语合并为“sitting by the window when travelling”更符合英语习惯;另外在“the road views”前加定冠词“the”更自然。建议:将多余或重复的连接词去掉,保持短语结构清晰。
× For example, I like to take photographs when when we saw some mountains or anything else when traveling.
✓ For example, I like to take photographs when we see some mountains or anything else while travelling.
问题类型:过去分词形式(这里错误属于时态与动词形式问题)。原句使用“saw”(过去式)与一般现在时的上下文不一致;另外有单词重复“when when”,和美式拼写“traveling”与英式“travelling”不一致。改为一般现在时“see”与前文的习惯性动作保持一致;用“while”或单个“when”避免重复。建议:注意时态一致性(描述习惯用一般现在时),删除重复单词。
× I didn't have any long journey with my family until I'm going to high school because my parents saw that it's difficult to take a child with them for more than ten hours playing or car trip.
✓ I didn't have any long journeys with my family until I went to high school because my parents thought it was difficult to take a child with them on trips of more than ten hours.
问题类型:过去时问题。原句时态错误与搭配不当:1) “until I'm going to high school”时态和形式不对,应为过去时间点“until I went to high school”;2) “my parents saw”用词不当,描述过去想法应用“thought”;3) “it's difficult”需与过去叙述一致改为“it was difficult”;4) “playing or car trip”搭配混乱,改为“trips of more than ten hours”更清晰。建议:叙述过去经历时统一使用过去时,避免奇怪的短语搭配,使用常见固定表达(e.g. take someone on a trip, trips of more than ten hours)。