Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant and expresses a clear preference, but it is slightly repetitive and contains a trailing 'and' that makes it sound unfinished. To improve, create a concise topic sentence, add one or two specific supporting details using linking words, avoid repetition (e.g., don’t repeat 'sitting by the window' and 'see' too often), and finish the sentence cleanly. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., 'view', 'landscape', 'people-watching'). Keep the response to no more than five sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy the view and people-watching. For example, on train journeys I like watching the changing landscape and noticing how towns differ from one another. This helps me relax and makes the trip more interesting.

Gợi ý: The answer addresses the question but is incomplete and has repetition and grammatical errors (extra 'my', repeated 'water Park water park', and an unfinished ending). To improve, give a clear topic sentence, follow with one or two specific details (where, who, what you did, how you felt), use linking words for coherence, and finish the thought. Correct small grammar mistakes and avoid repetition.

Ví dụ: Yes — when I was six my parents took me on a long trip to Qianlong Water Park. We spent the whole day there swimming, riding slides and having a picnic, and I remember being excited and tired afterward. That trip remains one of my happiest childhood memories.

× Yes, I prefer sitting by the window when I'm traveling because sitting by the window allows you to take a look at outside and see different people and the sightseeing scenery and.

✓ Yes, I prefer sitting by the window when I'm traveling because it allows me to look outside and see different people and the scenery.

The main issue is awkward wording and redundancy rather than a pure grammatical error, but it involves incorrect phrasing after verbs and pronoun use. 'Prefer sitting' is acceptable, but repeating 'sitting by the window' is redundant. 'Take a look at outside' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'look outside' or 'take a look outside'. Replace 'you' with 'me' to keep the sentence consistent from the student's perspective. Remove the extra 'and' at the end and use 'the scenery' instead of 'the sightseeing scenery' which is unnatural. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use appropriate verb+preposition collocations (look outside), and keep pronouns consistent. Tip: Use concise phrasing: 'I prefer sitting by the window because it allows me to look outside and see different people and the scenery.'

× I had a long journey with my family as a child. When I was six years old, I my parents took me to Qianlong water Park water park to play and it's a very.

✓ I had a long journey with my family as a child. When I was six years old, my parents took me to Qianlong Water Park to play, and it was a very memorable trip.

There are several problems: an extra word 'I' appears ('I my parents'), incorrect capitalization and repetition in 'Qianlong water Park water park', sentence fragment 'and it's a very.' and tense/consistency issues. Remove the stray 'I', capitalize 'Water Park' as a proper noun and avoid repeating the phrase, and complete the fragment by supplying a noun like 'memorable trip' and matching past tense 'it was' because the event is in the past. Suggestion: proofread for accidental duplications, ensure proper nouns are capitalized once, and complete sentence fragments by providing the missing information and correct tense.